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Fanfic idea: Equestria Girls rewrite


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After all the vitriol I gave to EQG and Rainbow Rocks, betcha didn't see this one coming? :P

 

One of the most important overall concepts of Friendship Is Magic is subversion. Feminine concepts that were written to fit gender roles of men and women are reversed to empower the characters, which empowers the audience in return. Equestria Girls and Rainbow Rocks had absolutely none of that. Each fall for the same high school cliches and accomplish them really poorly.

 

So after posting this, I began to think: What if Equestria Girls can be subverted? The world of Canterlot High is sterile as hell. Why not create an idea that critiques these systems? A fanfic that addresses these issues.

 

At this point, these are the ideas:

  1. Flash Sentry Walking Cardboard won't appear. Less of this Gary Stu, the better.
  2. Change the entire backstory of Sunset Shimmer. In EQG, Celestia described Sunset as being "cruel and dishonest" while under her tutelage, and IDW showed her as selfish and antagonistic. Rainbow Rocks made her a completely different character; pen a new name, and you got someone different.
     
    When Twilight became Celestia's student, Celestia wanted to help Twilight grow. She's a teacher and desires to see Twilight mature into someone who could help rule in some capacity. Instead of being so focused on being a princess, why not have Sunset become so focused on her tudies and feels like she has to put so much weight on her shoulders, she eventually can't anymore. The stress took a toll, and she can't respond. By chance, she sees the mirror that would send her into a world where she doesn't have to feel the burden. As a result, she decides to drop out and run into the mirror, only to enter into a world she had no idea about. And worse, she learned how once she climbed through the portal, she couldn't return.
     
    Stranded, she began to adapt to her new environment. As a human, she was forced to start anew. Train how to walk on two feet, write, put on clothes, write, learn how she can't use magic, and learn the language without tagging ponyisms. Because there was nowhere for her to live, she was forced to steal and eat garbage to survive before she found a map that led her to a homeless shelter, where she was given new food and new set of clothes. There, a human version of Pinkie Pie volunteered working for the shelter and gave them comfort. The two would later become very good friends, and Pinkie eventually asked Sunset if she could stay at her house with her family permanently.
     
    This led to Sunset eventually applying for a scholarship at Pinkie's school, Canterlot High. There, she let her smarts finally come to fruition. She was able to learn and excel in her classes. With the intense pressure of Canterlot and homeless life behind her, she started to receive very high grades, passing the tests, and receive honors. However, she also disn't like about how structured her school was. Everything was locked into groups, never really talking to each other, and fitting into stereotypes, something she always found uncomfortable. Which is completely different from her stay in Equestria, where everything was hands-on unless directed.
  3. Canterlot High would be a critique on how structured the public school system is. You saw this critique in Testing Testing 1, 2, 3, but more confined into how individuals learned. Here, it's how sterile Canterlot High is. You saw how in Equestria Girls, everyone was in groups they felt most comfortable with. Sunset Shimmer was one of those people who could fit in any one of them and got along with them well. But she felt really uncomfortable over CHS's segmented society within the school, and no one ever dared to talk to anyone else. The only reason she never spoke out against it is because she always did well in school and felt it didn't affect her, only to be told by Twilight and the others that what she sees affect everyone, including herself.
  4. This concept would be antagonist-free. May of us love a good antagonist, but having an antagonist to spice up the plot would make it too cluttered and too forced. Not every story needs one, and it'd focus more on the slice of life aspect. Anything to do with adventure would be mostly for trekking.
  5. A scene where Equestria!Twilight and Sunset would develop their friendship and become close. To the point where Sunset looks up to Twilight as a mentor. A scene where both ride the city on bike.
     
    How do I envision it? Something like this (from Tale of the Brave):
     

     
    When Sunset asked Twilight if she's able to stay in this world, Twilight admitted that she's a prncess from another world, and her purpose was to bring her home. The portal is open, and it was going to close tonight. As Twilight bikes away, Sunset is left to think about it.
  6. Although Sunset Shimmer would love to go home, she also gained a close friendship with the HuMane Five. She gets hit with a dilemma when asked about wanting to go home. Human Equestria was just as much a home to her as Equestria in the other world. So with the portal temporarily open, she's left with a choice: to stay in the human world or return to Equestria?
  7. Only Pony!Twilight goes through the mirror, and only because she senses an urgent call from someone she can hear, but can't see. She goes alone with Spike to Canterlot and located the mirror. Celestia, Luna, and Cadance tell Twilight Sunset's story and her family's reaction to her disappearance. Twilight asked why neither of them tried to open it, but they said they couldn't. The mirror only opens once every three years and only remains open for one week, and they were advised never to go through at risk of possibly never returning. Twilight, however, believed there was a risk necessary to return Sunset home. She tells Celestia et al to inform the others that she'll be back soon. As a result, she and Spike travel through the mirror to the Human World, where Twilight becomes human and Spike becomes a talking dog. In fact, the portal is the statue by Canterlot High's entrance and only accessible to her.
  8. The Elements of Harmony are out of the equation. The last thing this concept needs is to forcibly change a personality.

There's still plenty to be done, and I don't know if or when I'll ever work on it. If you have any ideas or want to comment on them specifically, let me know in the comments below.

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Might I also suggest this change to your fanfic

 

9. Remove the lipsticks from Celestia and Luna, and make Granny Smith not grotesquely fat. In cartoons, the females always look better without lipsticks, and I have no idea why they made Granny Smith fat.

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It sounds great, could really work. I think it also needs some FIM style comedy and the characters to be full versions of themselves though.

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