Idea for a Fanfic?

[~Jake~ 15]

In short, Twilight has to study for an exam so she can’t help her friends the way she normally does. A new unicorn comes to town and helps Twilights friends instead, she’ll cheat in helping do the task by using magic, and then use her magic to sort of hypnotise them. It turns out to be Trixie. They have a magic-duel, but Trixie uses Twilights friends against her. But Twilight wins them back by reminding them of their friendship:

Rb: ?

AJ: Helping clear the apple farm when she was in need

Pinkie Pie: ?

Fluttershy: ?

Rarity: Helping find the materials for a new dress

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That was just a quick idea that I had, something that I might start writing during my holidays. What do you guys think...how could I improve this?

[BlinkZ 1,151]

I dont know the idea sounds a little...eh... Just the fact ti wudl be trixie seems, over done. But that just me not seeing Trixie as a villian that would have a realistic motive to do such actions.

[1Bit 1,531]

sounds like a good idea if developed further. Maybe a different unicorn other than Trixie as well? An OC if necessary? Still...could be a good story if you work on it!