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Does my alicorn OC suck like the others? Let me know.


StarshineSun

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I've heard many people say "Alicorn OCs commonly turn out terrible" and sometimes... I wonder if mine is terrible like the silly old Mary Sue alicorn, and her name describes her personality. She has no backstory at all, and she's all perfect in every way, so she says.

 

My OC has a who, what, where, why, and how to her, but I'm still rather dubious about how good the quality of her creation is. I'll put out a general idea of the WWWWH here.

 

Who is she?: A strange alicorn with a strange backstory.

What is her passion/purpose?: She loves playing video games and drawing things, and she doesn't know what she was put here to do, and like the other ponies, she plays her part. Whether it is really important or not, she doesn't know either.

Where does she come from?: She comes from King's Island, an moderate size island East from the entire Equestria map. This island was rumored to once have Princess Celestia and Princess Luna's parents living on it.

Why was she created?: When I started to take a liking to My Little Pony, I wanted to make a pony that had a personality like mine, and I couldn't decide on an Earth pony, Pegasus, or Unicorn. So I decided to make her an Alicorn, but add something that wouldn't cause people to treat her like any other princess, or average pony, which is that her horn and wings were torn off, and are not usable.

How did she come to be who she is now?: Well, she wasn't born from anypony anypony knows about, but she, nor anypony else knows that she is actually Celestia and Luna's mother. Eventually, this is revealed the night of the Demon's coming, and everypony's minds have to be modified, but Twilight, Celestia and Luna all remember exactly what happened.

 

So, does my alicorn OC suck? Please tell me your opinion, I really want to know.

 

Edit: I have a new OC... ask me about it, if you want to. Further replies on the previous OC will be ignored.

Edited by StarshineSun
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Well, it doesn't suck, and I personally think the term "Mary Sue" is thrown around haphazardly (the only example of most OCs in literature is the backstory, and I rarely see backstories where the OC faces absolutely no obstacles).

 

With that said; I don't think your OC is bad, but I don't see why it needs to be an alicorn. If you're going to disable the horn and wings, why even bother with using an alicorn? Just make it an earth pony; it is essentially one right now.

 

As long as your character isn't overcoming every single obstacle in the plot of whatever story you decide to create with no setbacks, difficulties, or disadvantages, you don't need to worry about it being "Mary Sue." Alicorn does not automatically equal "Mary Sue," but I personally think you should have a good reason to make your character an alicorn as the species itself is rather elusive canonically, so making it an alicorn just for the heck of it isn't a good idea in my eyes.

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Ok, I chose Alicorn, because I couldn't decide from the main 3 options, and I'm not saying Alicorn OCs are "Mary Sue" ponies, I'm simply refering to the OC named Mary Sue. Also, another reason I chose an Alicorn is because I wanted my OC to be particularly special, because I think of myself as a bit more than different from other people. I would have simply made it an earth pony, but remember, later in Starshine's story her wings and horn are restored. And yes, my OC comes across many obstacles, and the biggest one she came across so far, she wasn't powerful enough to overcome, so she had to have nearly half the town help her. I made a post on it on the welcoming forums, and you can read it right now, if you don't mind long stories.

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Demons, video games and torn off horns and unusable wings. No. Being Celestia and Lunas mother. No. You have fallen into unlikable OC territory. 

 

The fact that a lot of this takes place in the current canon also needs to stop. Have this OC be in the old times of MLP:FiM. For example around the time of the Wendigos. This is a bad OC for Rps and Stories. 

 

Is your OC your avatar? If so those body colors aren't too good. Get rid of the blue on her legs. 

 

If you want to improve start over, study good OCs, redo her design, don't make her an alicorn and stay away from gradients.

 

I may be too harsh, but you asked and I gave. 

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An Alicorn with wings and horn torn off/unuseable? Why is this so popular? Losing your wings/horn is a traumatic event likely on par with a racer losing both legs or a swimmer losing all limbs. Without wings/horns, you aren't a real Pegasus/Unicorn, just a weaker and lighter version of an Earth Pony.

 

Or, at least, that's how the majority would see it. So why is this "It's okay for my OC to be an Alicorn, because she isn't an Alicorn at all!" mentality so popular?

 

Also, your OC isn't really that good. I like the King's Island idea, but different places typically have different cultures, which should reflect in this character. Most ponies have already found their Cutie MArks and what they want to do with their lives LONG before they reach adult age.

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Hmm, being the Princeses' mother? No.

Broken horn and/or wings? No.

I like the idea of her coming from a non canon place, though as @Asquerade said, it will take more character development. Not a good choice if you are lazy.

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IMO, anything not canon is leaning in a bad direction.  Think about it like this:  If it was a character introduced into the show, what would the community say about it?  In my opinion, a normal pony with character development is much better than a alicorn.  Alicorns normally have little to no background, and little development.  They are already supposed to be omnipotent.  People like characters that they can grow with.  As a side note, I expect that you really like video games, and want to transmit that to your character, but it's pretty far-fetched for a land with no electricity or electronics :)  Keep trying, though!

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I think it's actually a good OC, unlike many that are saying,

"I'M A MAGICAL ALICORN PRINCESS! I AM CELETIA'S NIECE AND DISCORD'S GRAND-DAUGHTER! THAT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE, BUT WHO CARES? I LOVE PINK!" You actually have a backstory, and it has a good design considering it's not really a normal Alicorn.

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