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[JakobGibby]

This is a concept based on an idea I had years ago that I just found a rough draft of in a stack of papers. Read below if you are interested, but the spoilers are real spoilers, so you've been warned. How far I get with the actual story will be determined by the interest that people here show, although I will have way too much time on my hands this summer, so I may continue it regardless. Be warned that the spoilers are very much spoilers, so don't read them if you don't want to know.

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Demons occupy another dimension. Demons exist in a sort of larval form in which they shapeshift in order to frighten people and draw positive energy out of their bodies. These larval demons inhabit a school or academy until they find their masters. The frightening/drawing out energy serves a dual purpose: in addition to providing a demon with sustenance, it enables him or her to find a master: upon coming into physical contact with their future master, their body will react and transform into their true form (which looks near-human).

Upon discovering their true master, demons return to the academy or school with their masters. Humans almost always have no knowledge of demons and magic and thus new masters must be taught from scratch.

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The protagonist is an extremely rare exception.

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Refusing to become a demon’s master by the human results in a slow and painful death for both the demon and human as they are ripped apart atom by atom until there is no trace of their existence. This only takes place after 72 hours of separation with the psychological intent to be a permanent separation by at least one of the pair.

The protagonist is a girl who has been secluded from regular human life for the entirety of her existence because

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her mother, who raised her, was part of a group of witches loosely bonded together in the service of the good of mankind, who were not even known of by the highest members of the demons’ world. The girl learned certain magic at a much higher level than even veterans of the demon world and possesses a natural aptitude for it due to being raised as if it was normal. The existence of demons is something that she has known of for her entire life, but the other world’s existence remained unknown to her until she became a master.

Despite being home to mostly demons, the humans of the demon world are much more powerful in general than the demons and have regulated demons to the position of animals. This unfair treatment is a huge surprise to the protagonist, who resists this treatment for her own partner with every action.

The story is a social commentary on the evils of racism, sexism, and prejudice of all kinds.

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So let me know what you think and I will get to writing the actual story soon enough.

Edited by JakobGibby, 06 May 2012 - 06:25 PM.

[balderdash]

I was looking through all of the non-pony art and stumbled across this and it really interested me! I was wondering if you had written any more of it? If so, I would love to see it (you have a rock solid concept you're working with), and if not, I urge you to pm me and maybe we can work on turning it into a full on story.