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(This is a rough draft)
The Experiences and Experiments of Professor Cogsprocket
Prologue: A Flame in the Works
Professor Cogsprocket's Chamber room, Ville du Cheval Brulant, Canterlot
Dark and damp was the chamber room of Professor Cogsprocket, lonely he sat on his gilded wooden throne; isolation enveloped him like the haunting shadows of the cold room.
"Alas! How weary I have grown, my memories of mirth and ingenuity fly before me in a fleeting moment. How I wish to clasp them once again, this darkness stirs no thought!"
A singular oil lamp flickered and burned as its flame danced about the room, the steed hung his grey head and looked to the floor; a birch white mane hung over his faded lab coat.
He tapped his hoof on the plated arm rest and groaned. "I have worn my books to the spine, and the pages fall from their bindings, I need light, true light. I need an outlet...creativity...life!"
Dust clouded the far side of the chamber as it floated through the lamplight, the scarlet draps of the canopied bed danced with it like a flame on a pale tree.
"I grow tired of shadows," said the frustrated professor in a voice lined with revelation. He got up from his chair and walked to the window.
Every step grew in determination, becoming more oppressive on the old mahogany floor; it wailed under the unexpected weight, almost beckoning him to return to the shadowy throne.
"Curse this ignorant darkness!" he exclaimed as he ripped the curtain from its post.
The blazing light ripped through the chamber, fiery sunbeams illuminated every aspect of the once dead room.
A glimmer and gleam of light sparkled about on the violet goggles that hung upon the coat rack.
Drapped upon a branch of the rack was a snow white lab coat, adjacent to the goggles, along with a bright purple necktie wrapped about it.
The luminous reflection of a bright, mid day sun flew from the chamber door like a burning phoenix, the gold lining blinded the newly rejuvenated being, the gateway to his old love, his old Aidenn, was revealed.
"Now I am free, now I build the vessels of my imagination, now I return!"
Edited by Moosefullaeggs, 18 February 2012 - 05:35 PM.