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MMC

 

In the aired version of Magical Mystery Cure, Twilight gained her status by completing a spell that Star Swirl the Bearded wasn't able to do. (In the locked version, SS and his spellbook weren't even in the script; it was Pandora's Box, but that's beside the point.) The Marks were swapped because Twilight read the incomplete spell out loud, but she finished it in rhyme.

 

Now, let's think about rhyme for a minute. One of poetry's most known general tools is the ability to display rhyme or rhythm. Sometimes that's not the case, like haikus. Sylvia Plath, a well-known poet who committed suicide after battling from youth-based depression, wrote several in her lifetime, including her infamous Daddy (describing her anguish of her father's death from diabetes and using Holocaust analogies to accentuate her pain to the audience). Rhyming allows imagery to flow from text to imagination and sets up the conflict without feeling stilted.

 

According to MMC, Star Swirl used rhyme to write and complete the "alicorn ascension" spell.


Twilight Sparkle: Dear Twilight Sparkle,

 

The spell contained on the last page of this book is Star Swirl the Bearded's secret unfinished masterpiece.

 

[gasps] Ooh!

 

He was never able to get it right, and thus abandoned it. I believe you are the only pony who can understand and rewrite it. Princess Celestia

 

From one to another, another to one. A mark of one's destiny singled out alone, fulfilled. That doesn't make any sense. It doesn't even rhyme!


Twilight Sparkle: [echoing] A mark of one's destiny, singled out alone, fulfilled. [normal] [gasps] Wait a second, that's it! I understand now! I know how to fix the spell!

 

From all of us together, together we're friends. With the marks of our destinies made one, there is magic without end!

 


Now, it's possible that not every spell Star Swirl wrote will rhyme, and you can break it here and there if you want to drive home a point. And I'll admit, I suck at poetry rhyming, but it doesn't mean I can't try.

 

What I'm thinking here is creating a structure of the spell that shows that the spell can open periodically, but can't be sealed. How King Arion originally wrote his spell and then have Star Swirl revise the spell by writing it over and over. But lest they not forget, reading it aloud can cause it to go haywire. Unlike MMC, Arion's original spell isn't found in Star Swirl's book that Celly gave to Twi, but perhaps somewhere else in the castle. Maybe an old studio. Perhaps in Sunset's in a corner of the room where she normally didn't go. It's the dustiest, and inside one of the books is the old scroll. The parchment is old, but still pliable and capable to write on.

 

Now, what to put in? Well, for one, referencing the cremated bones that created the glass and ability to travel from one dimension to another. But also an earlier reference to travel from one portal to another, which was crossed out. Then a reference to travel to a new world over it, but the way it's written makes it sound like it opens periodically (every eleven years) and not. Change that in favor of it opening forever. Give the location of the other side of the portal (the Canterlot statue's base and backup locations in case the statue is damaged, misplaced, replaced, or destroyed). Clean up the writing and grammar. Before the clock strikes midnight into the fifteenth day, Twilight and Sunset recite it.

 

I'll get back to this is a bit.

 


 

The day of the test

 

The last day the portal opens will be in Pedestria, and Sunset had her stuff packed, including her journal, pen, and a whole lot of memories. But that doesn't mean she can't try to distract herself with the help of her friends and especially Pinkie Pie. Think about activities all of her friends would like to do, including maybe an event each of them can enjoy together.

 

Journey 1: Time cleaning up Rarity's wardrobe workshop and helping set up a fresh variety of fashion, including the possibility of moving away from strict stereotypes in favor of taking the clothing concepts she's normally have for girls (i.e., bright, zany designs; dresses) and making them unisex. Why? Every single catalog she reads just goes for the same old, same old. Drabby, cool-colored shirts and pants for the males and the females with the brighter colors and varieties. She just needs to plan the ideas. Sunset and Rarity review Rare's scrapbook to see patterns of yellow, white, and a light sienna for a tall male, but it can be adjusted with some changes in the design to make it something that men and women of other sizes can wear. Another included a bright green dress with subtle peach leggings with a crimson lightning gradient starting at the ankles and fading completely once it passes the knees. After an hour of fun conceptualizing, it's off to meet with Fluttershy and the others at the Botanical Gardens in the neighborhood of North Canterlot.

 

Journey 2: I've been to Botanical Gardens before, both in Brooklyn and The Bronx. My personal favorite is B'klyn Botanical Gardens. For this, gorgeous green trees, a little lake with a torii (a tribute to the Brooklyn Gardens), a lot of magnificent flowers, and a little dance. Outside of Spike, one of the best parts of EQG1 was the "We Will Rock You" tribute with the clapping and banging of the floor to begin Win the Crown. Rather than the full song, it's that banging, but become one with a dance. With their arms crossed to the other side and all six creating a circle, Sunset helps lead by banging her left foot twice to the left (thump…thump), banging her right toe twice to the left quicker (thump-thump), and finally one more bang with her left straight down (thump). Process continues. It starts slowly, and it gets painful by tripping over feet and sometimes stepping on them. (AJ: My leeeeeg!) But they get the hang of it and feel a little sore. But they feel better and continue walking along the path to the other side of the garden where Twilight and the two Celestias waited.

 

Journey 3: Lunch at a vegetarian cafe with an Italian vibe/aura. I'll admit, Italian food is some of my favorite, but let's twist up some of the clichés, and there are examples available in sites like this one. Maybe we'll get an omnivore joke where a character (perhaps Sunset) has grown to like eating meat, something she can't do in Equestria for obvious reasons.

 

Now, get back to the end of the prior section:

 

Dash: But how do we test it to see if the revised spell will work? I mean, there's gotta be something we can use.

 

Fluttershy: But what?

 

Principal Celestia: What about tossing the crown through the portal?

 

*Twilight's eyes widened, nearly chokes on her beet ravioli*

 

Rarity: *pats Twilight's back hard* My goodness, Twilight! Are you okay?!

 

Twilight: I'm fine. Principal Celestia, that's crazy!

 

Princess Celestia: I have to agree. Twilight needs her crown to help defend against evil there.

 

*shakes head* No, I mean Sunset's crown.

 

Everyone: Huh?

 

Spike: But Sunset doesn't hold the Element of Magic here… Does she?

 

Sunset: *shakes head* No, Spike. She means this. *she takes out a dull, Plexiglas crown that bore Twilight's cutie mark*

 

That crown looks like mine!

 

Princess Celestia: *taps it* Except Twilight's is gold and amethyst, not something low-end.

 

Unfortunately, CHS's budget stinks.

 

*Principal Celestia whistles innocently*

 

Twilight and Princess Celestia look at her.

 

*chuckle* Never mind. Now, Princess Celestia, Twilight, every year around the time of the Autumn Equinox, CHS prepares a Fall Formal. It's like a popularity contest. The one with the most votes wins this crown, becomes Queen of the Fall Formal, and holds onto it until either the next Fall Formal when they try to defend it or elect not to defend the crown.

 

Pinkie Pie: For the past two, she's won by a bigger landslide than the best juggler in a clowning-in-training contest.

 

*sheepish smile* After you convinced me to try the first time and then voted for me even though you were my competitor.

 

Anything to help make you happy. *wraps arm around Sunset* So, your plan?

 

Oh, of course. Anyway, I won this crown for the past two years. It's pretty cheap, and it won't damage the mirror or anypony— I mean, anybody else. If the trial works, then I can see all of you again. If it doesn't, well, you'll still be able to make another one. *looks down sadly*

 

Poor thing. *reaches out and holds Sunset's hand* Sunset, don't worry about the spell. It's ready, and you'll be seeing us tomorrow.

 

You're convincing yourself it'll be ready, Rarity. I know you. I know you're worried.

 

Applejack: We all are, darling. You're a part of our lives as all of us here. In many respects, you're like family.

 

You've come a long way since living in Canterlot City. Kind, bold, comforting, forgiving, and not afraid to crack a joke or two. You're all of us into one.

 

Including me! Sunset, you're one of us.

 

I still can't believe you're all so welcoming, even after I lied to you about where I come from. None of you knew where I came from, and it doesn't matter to you.

 

Why should it? Human, equine from a fantastical land, some fire-breathing baby dragon, or demigod from a thousand moons into the future. Don't care! You're awesome because you're you, Sunset.

 

And by the way, Dash, in Equestria, I am a fire-breathing dragon.

 

And you're still amazing, Spike. *rubs his head* Sunset, if you want to talk to any of us, we're always available. Remember, you're never alone.

 

*The waiter walks by*

 

Waiter: Good afternoon again. How was your meal?

 

Wonderful. Thank you, sir.

 

Excellent. Rainbow Dash, what time is it?

 

*looks at her watch* It's almost two. We got so much to do!

 

Twilight, Spike, and I better head back home.

 

Four of you actually live in another dimension, don't you?

 

Eeyup! In my world of Equestria, I'm a child dragon that can breathe fire! *laugh* I mean, you don't see talking dogs around here?

 

How did you know anyhoo?

 

Well, you talked a little loud, and the diner heard you, so we all listened. Your friendship here is one of the strongest I've ever seen. I can tell you all care for each other.

 

*The kids blush*

 

Oh, I almost forgot. *takes out check presenter and hands it to Principal Celestia, who opens it; it showed that the meal has been paid* Someone here decided to pay for your meal so you can enjoy the rest of your important day.

 

*A tear rolled down Sunset's face*

 

Principal Celestia: If you see that person again, please tell him, her, or her we appreciate it.

 

I will, ma'am.

 

A minute later, Sunset and the HuMane Five split up from Twilight, Spike, and the two Celestias. From across the street, a principal from a rival school placed her credit card and check back into her wallet.

 


 

More to come in later entries.

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