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Finally Another Update

I finally finished something else for my book! Writing, as it turns out, is really difficult when you have so many other things you like to do, like watch Supernatural or read Homestuck. However, I have finally written something else! Hooray! What I've written is the first of many paintball matches that the team plays. I'm not really familiar with paintball (having only ever played it once) and so I don't really know if what I've written is actually something that would make sense. However, I think it does, and so I've written it.   Without further ado, here it is!:   Teresa, Alex, and Jade started forward, staying close together. They reached a crossroads and split up. Teresa went right, Alex forward, and Jade left. Teresa and Jade stayed in each other’s sight for as long as possible. As they made to go forwards, there came the sound of someone firing on Jade’s end, and paint splats appeared on the ground a little ways behind her. She fired back some while running for cover. She crouched down behind a corner and gestured at Teresa to come help. Teresa started towards her, but froze when something flew past her and splatted on the building to her right. She turned quickly to her left and searched for the paintballs origin. She couldn’t find it until another shot went whizzing past her face, missing her mask by inches. She looked where the paintball had come from and saw Nick aiming through the first story window of a building at the other end of the area. Teresa fired off a couple shots, then ducked behind the building to her right. She peeked around the corner and got hit with the remains of a paintball that had splattered on the wall barely an inch from her face. She whipped back around and crouched. She took this opportunity to check on Jade. Jade was no longer there, but there were quite a few more paint splats. She looked back around her corner and saw that Nick has disappeared. She abandoned that route and moved to the middle, where Alex had gone. She cautiously peered around the corner and almost got a face full of paint. When the paintball hit the building however, it splatted green rather than orange. She looked around the corner again to see Alex standing in the middle of the lane. Teresa pulled her head back and held out her gun to show that she was on the same team. When no shots came she slowly came out from around the corner. Alex was walking towards her. Teresa came out and quickly walked to Alex.
When they were close enough Alex said, in a muffled voice because of her mask, “Did you get anyone?”
Teresa shook her head and said in an also muffled voice “Nick almost got me, but I have no idea where he went. Do you know what happened to Jade?”
“No, but she’ll probably be okay. I’m pretty sure it was Felix that was shooting at her, and she’s much better than him.” Alex responded. She looked around, then opened her mouth to say something, but was interrupted when Teresa shoved her down. A second later a paintball hit the ground a few feet behind where Alex was standing. Teresa aimed about where it came from and saw Jayden aiming down at her from a balcony. They both fired at each other. Teresa hit the door frame behind Jayden and he hit the ground to her left. Jayden turned back into the building and ran. Teresa lowered her gun and walked over to where Alex was noisily getting up.
“Was shoving me over really necessary?” she asked annoyedly as Teresa helped her up.
Teresa responded, “Hey, it’s not my fault you fell over. I was just trying to push you out of the way.”
“Whatever, we need to find Jade.” said Alex, turning towards the crossroads. They walked to the corner and looked around it. Nothing was there except the paint splatters from before. They both slowly walked to the other corner and ducked down. Alex quickly edged out around it and pointed her gun upwards. After a few seconds she stood up and said, “All clear.”
Then a large amount a paintballs splattered all around her. She jumped behind the corner and almost fell over again. “Never mind.” she said, “Not clear.”
The paintballs stopped raining down after a few seconds. “Where do you think they were coming from?” Teresa asked.
Alex pointed in the general up direction. “Over up that way I think.” Then she moved over to the edge and pointed her gun around the corner. She fired about ten times before they heard a muffled shout of, “Damn it!”
Alex and Teresa then both cautiously walked around the corner. In the upper right balcony on the second closest building stood Nick, with one large paint splat on his right shoulder. There were other splats on the wall to his right.
Alex put down her gun and shouted, “Ha! Gotcha!”
Then she took a paintball to the face.
From the doorway of the house Nick was in stood Jayden, his gun still pointed towards them. However, he didn’t see Teresa until it was too late. The paintball hit him right in the chest and he jerked back a little. He looked down at where it had it, then looked back up, walked out, and held up his gun in surrender. He walked to the exit to wait for the game to finish. Not too soon after, Nick came down doing the same thing. Alex gave Teresa a thumbs up and followed Nick.
Now teresa was all by herself. From what she could tell, neither Jade nor Felix were out yet. She walked down the lane, gun up and ready. She reached the next crossroads without incident. There she found the largest collection of paint splats yet. She looked around at the spot, trying to determine where they had gone, when she spotted movement on a balcony a house down. She fired off a few shots, but missed. However, the person shot the ground roughly ten feet in front of Teresa, rather than at her. One check of the color told her it was Jade. Teresa ran to the building and ducked inside. After checking that Felix wasn’t around, she ran to the stairs and up to Jade. She was still on the balcony, looking for Felix.
She turned as Teresa approached. “I think I know where he is, so I’ve been trying to draw him out. So far, I haven’t seen him, but I heard him fall down the stairs in one of these houses.”
“Ouch,” said Teresa. “What do you think he’s planning?”
Jade shrugged and said, “Not sure. I’m sure he’s probably coming after us, but he’s being very ste-”
THUMP
Both Teresa and Jade whipped around, guns pointed into the building. After a few seconds, they relaxed slightly, only to tense up again with another THUMP. They moved slowly into the building, expecting Felix to suddenly jump out from somewhere.
Then, quite suddenly, there was another thump right behind him, and the sound of a paintball gun going off. Teresa spun around quickly, firing blindly. She heard a grunt of pain from Jade and a very loud, “Ow!” from Felix. She looked and saw that she had Felix right on the inside of his left thigh, and Jade had been hit on the back of her right hand. After a few seconds, she realized what had happened and punched the air, shouting, “Suck it, Felix!”
Felix grumbled a little then said, “That’s not very sportsmanlike.”
“Oh shut up.” Teresa said, happy from her victory. Then she, Jade, and Felix all left the building, ready to finish up and get something to eat.

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Better Idea for Side Series

So back in May I made an entry about the second book I have thought of writing. Well, that has just kind of sat in my brain for a bit, until recently. A few days ago I checked out the anime Monster Musume and found it was pretty good. It's funny and entertaining. It's also an ecchi anime. I also started reading the manga, which is basically the same as the anime. To sum it up, basically it's the same as real life except there are species of half human creatures (like centaurs and lamias) exist and are attempting to integrate into human culture. The story follows of the protagonist who's name I can't spell who was accidentally made into a host for a lamia. Hilarious antics ensue where more half human girls end up living with him and they all attempt to seduce him. There's a bit more to it than that, but that's the best short summary I've got.   Anyway, on to my original point. I think I should have the kids all transform into these half human creatures. I think this would work better, since they could more easily blend into normal humans society.   I thought of a name for the book: Unhuman. You know, like Unmirrored? I think it could do with some work though. What do you guys think? (Please answer, it takes five seconds.)

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My Craziest Notes

These are the notes that I have on my iPod that I've been taking since the start of this whole process. They are all of whatever I've come up with (that isn't actual writing). As you can probably tell, these are all very convoluted and some are much older (such as the fact that Alex is called Unnamed Female). So, that's that. Enjoy.   Also, the ; things are the dividers.   Ideas: Boat chase scene with Teresa being knocked out; 1133 appearing somewhere; Order 66 appearing somewhere; Felix making an 88 miles per hour reference; Felix also making a Civ 5 reference; Felix dying but turning out to be alive in the sequel; Felix's "last words" are a reference to The Outsiders; Felix has a slingshot; Felix has slingshot ammo that explodes; There is a movie night where they have a box of terrible movie ripoffs, including: Cretaceous Park, Mission Improbable, Stair Wars: The Elevator Strikes Back, Ternimator To: Jugment Daay, Carpnado, Finding Emo; Teresa has a great repeating dream featuring mist and the mirror; Felix makes a G. I. Joe reference after asking what the mirror looks like; Felix gets embarrassed after explaining how to see "World Glitches" and leaves, leaving (Unnamed Female) to explain that he got really upset and almost cried after a fictional character died in his book; Something does something to vaguely annoy Felix and he says "YOU FOOLS DON'T KNOW WHAT YOU'VE DONE." in a sarcastic, dramatic voice; Felix says, "In this world, IT'S SMILE OR BE SMILED!" and then Teresa and (Unnamed Female) stare at him blankly; (Unnamed Female) reveals she has a girlfriend in the real world when Teresa asks if she likes (Unnamed Male). Teresa says, "Oh. You don't seem very, well, gay." (Unnamed Female) says, "What, do you expect me to look like this?" and shows her a picture of person wearing a rainbow t-shirt, face paint, and flag. Teresa goes slightly red and says, "Well, uh, no but-" (Unnamed Female) cuts her off and says, "It's fine, I'm not stupid and sensitive. Here's a picture of my girlfriend." She shows Teresa a picture of a pretty Black girl; When Teresa tries to go into Felix's room, she knocks and he says, "No one sees the wizard!"; Felix has an all graphite pencil; Everyone is playing Mario Kart at one point; Felix is told he looks like a girl. He responds by saying, "Well, I'm a pretty one, right?"; Alex wants something with Felix, but Felix says, "Can't right now, sorry, in the middle of a heated internet debate on time travel." Alex says, "Of course you are. Well, I guess we could find Jadeyn. Let's go, Teresa."; Alex asks, "Did he get delivery?" Jade says no. Felix says, "What about Digiorno?"; "If I'm gonna die, I'm gonna die with a Sonic slushy in my hand!"; Spoons but with knives; Unicorn jacket for Felix; Still a better love story than Twilight joke; Dr. Scientist; Suddenly there came a shout of, “I came in like a wrecking ball!” and a large object swung past them. Upon further inspection, it turned out to be Felix;

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Something really stupid that I thought of

So all I've done since the last entry is what I made five minutes ago:   Felix said, “No ma’m, I ate a chameleon and fell through the skylight.”   It's a stupid reference to Gravity Falls that I thought of. If I get around to writing another entry I'll post my even more jumbled notes.

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Side Series Idea

So I have had a few ideas for other books, but one developed farther than the rest. The idea is that a group of kids is accidentally transformed into mythological creatures (so far I've got dragon, pegasus, unicorn, gryphon, and elf). My plan is for this series to run along Unmirrored and the two eventually converge and there is one big thing at the end. I decided to link them through two ways: One, a genetics company where the kids are transformed. Two, one of the characters in the second series is Alex's girlfriend.   One more thing: The point of this blog was to hear feedback and thoughts, So, what are your thoughts? I do want to know.   Thanks for reading and (hopefully) commenting!

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Some more stuff

I wrote some more. Not much else to say. Writing is really, really hard.   “Whoa there Nelly, slow down,” Alex said. “I’ll answer your first few. According to Felix, this is supposedly an alternate world, what he says is the other side of a mirror. It’s supposed to be a better world where everyone is always happy, but as you saw, it’s not a very good world. The mirror, he says, is the connection between the two, and acts as a sort of portal. That’s all I really understand. You’d have to ask him to hear his whole theory.”
Teresa was still trying to process all that information so she went with an easy question: “Who’s Felix?”
Alexis said, “He’s our techy guy person. You know what, I think it’d be better if we started with introductions. So yeah, I’m Alex. I came here about seven months ago. I’m from Florida, near the Miami area. Over in the kitchen is Nick, He’s our sort of leader person. I’ll let him introduce himself.”
Alex walked to the kitchen and Teresa followed slowly and cautiously. Before they got to the kitchen though, Nick came through the doorway. He was tall, probably around 5 foot 10, and black, with dark brown hair and eyes. He was about the average weight, but he was built strongly; definitely what you’d expect the leader to look like.
His voice, however, was definitely more like a combination of a comedic relief character and Samuel L Jackson.. “Hi there Teresa. I’m Nick, obviously.” He smiled at her, and she stared.
After five seconds, she realized she was staring and quickly said, “How did you know my name?”
“Well, Alex here isn’t exactly quiet.” Nick and Alex both laughed, and Teresa smiled a little.
Nick stopped laughing and continued his introduction. “Well, there’s not much you really need to know about me. I’m pretty good at martial arts and I’m an excellent cook. I’m 17, from South Carolina. I came through the mirror when my family was on vacation. Fell right into when I tripped down the stairs at our hotel. Hurt a lot.”

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Small Humor Addition

So I wrote down a little humor bit and though I'd might as well share it since I haven't added an entry in a while.   This goes under the heading of Humor bits my parents would probably disapprove of (also, they're getting ready to play paintball):   As Alex, Teresa, and Jade were getting their equipment set, Alex started telling a story.
“One time when we were playing, Felix jumped down from a platform yelling Scotland and shot me in the ass.” said Alex, grinning wickedly.
Teresa looked apprehensive. “What did you do?” She asked.
Alexis replied,“ Turned around and shot him in the dick.”
“Ouch.”   I'm pretty much out of things for other entries, so you guys can ask what you'd like to know or see and I'll do something with that.

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What I need help with for the beginning

So, I need help. I have everything for my book except a beginning. I want some help with ideas. I want Teresa to have to wait a while before going into the mirror. I want her to just experience her life normally, but with odd visions of the mirror cropping up randomly. I'm not sure what should drive Teresa to touch the mirror, though I'm thinking a bad storm. If anyone would like to help, comment some ideas or suggestions. Thanks in advance!

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Bit's and Piece

So this entry will be very long because It showcases every single little bit I've written. It's not a large amount, but still a considerable amount. What I need help on is a beginning. I'm not sure how to write Teresa. I'll give some more details on what I'd like in my beginning and what I want help on in the next entry. Anyway, now for the book pieces.   Bits and Pieces:   Teresa’s introduction   Teresa Loch sat at her desk, poking around at the inside of an old radio. After a few moments, she sighed and moved the radio aside. She picked up a pencil and a notebook. She said, “Ok, let’s see here.” She wrote while she said, “Radio Reconstruction Day 3: I still have no idea how the hell this thing goes together. May or may not have lost multiple screws. Will report next time.” She set the notebook aside, and stood up from her desk.  
Teresa is saved by the five other main characters   A small canister landed on the ground in front of her and the people. With a click it went off, filling the air with a foggy gas. Teresa spun around wildly, coughing, searching for anything identifiable. Something black flashed in the corner of her eye, and she saw someone standing a few feet away wearing a gas mask.
Then, the person said, “Come with me if you want to live.”
Teresa just kept coughing and stared at him. He sighed and said, “Just come on. Here, hold my hand.”
Teresa backed away, right into another coughing person. She jumped away, but the person wasn’t paying any attention. Teresa turned back around, but the gas mask person was gone.
Suddenly, another voice spoke from behind her. “Sorry about this, we didn’t want to have to hit you.”
Teresa turned, saying, “Hit me? Wh-” Then everything went dark.   Teresa learns some stuff   Teresa woke to feel her head throbbing painfully. She stared at the ceiling for a second, then started to panic. Where was she? This wasn’t her room. What happened? Then her memory returned, and she stopped panicking. Then she started again, because she remembered that she’d been knocked out. She sat up, and realized she was on a couch. She looked around, taking in the room. She was on one of two couches, the second one facing a large flat screen TV. Below the TV was a cabinet. A doorway led to a living room, and another one led to a kitchen. In the few seconds it took for her to take all of that in, a girl walked into the room. She looked around her own height, maybe a little taller, with longish, reddish brown hair and pretty hazel eyes. The girl saw Teresa and then said, “Oh good, you’re awake.” She then called loudly over her shoulder, “HEY, THE NEW ONE’S AWAKE!” Teresa covered her ears.
From the kitchen behind her she heard a someone say, “Good! Tell her about what’s going on. I bet she’s pretty confused.”
“OK!” The girl responded. She then sat down next to Teresa.
“So, I bet you’re pretty confused and probably scared right now.” She said. Teresa just stared for a second and nodded. The girl continued, saying, “My name’s Alexis, though everyone calls me Alex. Probably could have just said to call me Alex. Anyway, what’s your name?”
Teresa stared for another few seconds, then stammered out, “Te-Teresa…” She then realized she had been staring for way too long and looked away, blushing slightly.
Alex said, “Well Teresa, I bet you have questions, so if you’d like to ask them, you can. Before you ask though, I need to tell you that all of us also came through the mirror, so that’s why we kidnapped you. Anyway, ask away!”
Teresa looked back at her, sat a little straighter, and started asking, “What is this place? Why is everyone happy all the time? How did I get here? What does that weird mirror have to do with this? Why did you come here? Why aren’t there more of you? Wha-”
“Whoa there Nelly, slow down,” Alex said. “I’ll answer your first few. According to Felix, another one of us, this is supposedly an alternate world, what he says is the other side of a mirror. It’s supposed to be a better world where everyone is always happy, but as you saw, it’s not a very good world. The mirror, he says, is the connection between the two, and acts as a sort of portal. That’s all I really understand. You’d have to ask him to hear his whole theory.”   Movie Night   Felix came in, holding a large box and saying, “I got a good deal for these. A whole bunch of classic movies for only ten dollars!” He set the box down and opened it up.
Alex got down too, and picked up a movie. She stared at it for a few seconds, then burst out laughing. Teresa asked, “What?” and Alex held the movie up for Teresa to see. It said Stair Wars: The Elevator Strikes Back. Teresa started laughing too, as well as Nick and the twins.
Alex then asked Felix, “Why exactly did you buy something at a bargain when we’re rich? I mean, look at these. Cretaceous Park? Mission Improbable? Would it have been that hard to buy these normally?”
Felix defensively replied, “Come on, cut me some slack, I procrastinated getting movies until yesterday. I had to act fast.”
Jade, who had been looking at a movie called “Finding Emo”, looked up and said, “Where did you even get these?”
Felix said, “Some guy named Duke sold them to me. He didn’t seem very shady and he had a family esque minivan. I assumed he just wanted to make some money by selling some movies.”
“How come you didn’t even look at these? This one’s called Ternimator To: Jugment Daay. It’s not that hard to miss.” Said Alex.
“I did look but it was dark and it looked fine!” Felix said indignantly.   Humour bits my parents will probably disapprove of   1. Alexis grabbed two paintball guns, jumped up on to the divider, shouted, “Take this, goat f***ers!” and started shooting everyone below.   2. Alex crouched down, then gestured frantically at Teresa to do the same. Teresa crouched, and Alex started talking into her headset.
“Ok, there’s like, five guys. Wait, now there’s ten, no fifteen, wait-Oh f*** me!”
Felix responded, “Maybe later, right now you need out of there.”   Humour bits my parent’s would probably be fine with
1. Felix said, “I’m not good at advice. I can only give you chess tips and sarcasm.”

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Characters

So, last time I just went over the characters quickly, just saying their name and age. This time I'm putting in my notes on each character.   Teresa Loch, Age 14, Has Complete Heterochromia Iridum; Blue left eye, Green right eye; Long, milk chocolate brown hair (normally ponytailed), 5 foot 5, Slightly skinny, Athletic, Ambiverted, American, Single   Alexis Winn, Age 16, Hazel eyes, Longish, reddish brown hair, 5 foot 6, Average Weight, Extroverted, Cocky, American, Has a girlfriend   Felix Lennox, Age 13, Goldish Amber eyes, Longish, dirty blond hair (until dyed), 5 foot 7.5, Thin, Social Introvert, Plays the Theremin, Does lots of accents, Half American, Half Scottish, Single   Jayden Alkaev, (Twin of Jade), Age 15, Dark green eyes, Average length, black, slightly brown hair, 5 foot 8, Slightly thin, Ambiverted, Mysterious, Russian, Single   Jade Alkaev, (Twin of Jayden), Age 15, Apple green eyes, Average length, black, slightly brown hair, 5 foot 7, Slightly thin, Ambiverted, Mysterious, Russian, Single
Nicholas Clark, Age 17, Light brown eyes, Short dark brown hair, 5 foot 10, Average weight, Leadery, Half American, Half African American, Has a girlfriend

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More specific

So, I'm going to be more detailed on what exactly happens in my book. So yeah, Teresa finds a mirror in her basement. It's a few weeks before she touches it and is pulled through, probably because of a storm driving her to the basement. Now for the alternate world. It is a world where everyone is always happy. No one can feel any other emotion. Obviously it sounds great, but it's the exact same as our world. If everyone was happy in our world, it'd be weird, creepy, and bad. Teresa learns this quickly, and is chased by people at one point. She is saved by a team of five people that came through the mirror. They are: Alexis Winn, Age 16; Felix Lennox, Age 13; Jayden Alkaev, Age 15; Jade Alkaev, Age 15; Nicholas Clark, Age 17. She adjusts to their life of fun and adventure. They rob banks because they are all very skilled in some way, and don't exist in that world. They have fun most days and nights, but things do get serious and sometimes things go south. And in the end, something terrible happens. I am planning on there being a sequel. In the next entry I'll go in depth on the characters.

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Introduction to Unmirrored

Hello peoples of the internet! This is my introduction to the blog about my book (Unmirrored). It is a story about a teenage girl named Teresa that finds a mysterious mirror in her basement. One day, she's inspecting the mirror when she touches it, and is pulled into an alternate world. There she makes friends, go's on adventures, and makes attempts to find the mirror and return home. So far, I have a small part of the beginning, a little bit of right after she goes into the mirror, and some other random pieces I wrote down. This blog'll be to show what I've made, to get opinions on what I've written, and for help on parts I may need it. In the next entry I'll explain in better detail what Teresa goes through.

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