I've been working on Chapter 3 of BBBTF, and I've decided to ramp up my linguistics a bit to make it stand out as an improvement. Over 200 people have now favorites the story, and the like/dislike ratio is at 134:6. I want to give people a justification for their generous ratings and genuine interest. Have a snippet of Ch.3.

Morning drifted in, replacing the beauty of the night with the brilliantly orange-hued skies of dawn.  Twilight awoke; the sun had penetrated the glass of her windows, blaring its intense beams over her sleeping figure.  She slothfully raised her dry hoof over her face, denying the rays an offensive against her eyes.  

Twilight trudged towards the door, entering the hallway.  A lovely shade of pink flushed her cheeks as her hooves confronted a sticky liquid; her evidence of the previous night's sin.  She plodded down the stairwell and into the kitchen, tracking her iniquitous fluids across the carpet the entire journey.  She grated her hind hooves on the welcome mat, pulled out a chair at the nearby kitchen table, and sat down to eat the meal her mother had prepared for her.  She gawked at it lazily: a daisy salad paired with a side of honey-smothered hay.

Still working out kinks, but I hope my effort with more advanced imagery usage is seen as an improvement.