Leaderboard

This app looks good to me. If I disapproved this, I may need to have a vacation couch on the moon Second approval granted.

Hello @Loud Opinion (I'm a little slow my apologies) I've gone over your Crystal mare and she is something and a half that is for sure I must say and what I've been reading it seems Randimaxis and yourself have been working on her quite a bit since the start and have created a monster... I mean well-written character. I can't find any issues with your character entry so I can do nothing more but approve her well done on this OC and have fun with her out there in Equestria.

Hello, @Loud Opinion I do apologise for making you wait, I've been a little slack. Nevertheless, I'm here to help in getting your OC through to approved. I had a look through your whole entry and it's pretty good I can't really see anything that would stop me from approving this character, but maybe hold off on so many commas in future But otherwise Blue Thorn is a rather interesting stallion and I like how he is still trying to discover his purpose in life despite having a cutiemark, quite a unique idea from the characters I've read.

Unfortunately, the images problem is on OUR end... and our tech staff is so overworked right now, it sorta falls down to 'fix when we have time'; perhaps once it's fixed, I'll go back and do the work to add the pic in, myself. But for now, we'll just have to work it out as we can. My sincerest apologies. By the way, I reworked your picture a little bit - if you like, you can use this. I was simply influenced, and decided to do it... simply because I could. I hope it's well-received. Otherwise, do you feel like this OC is ready to go?

Okay! It's time to take a look at this app - and hope I don't hurt my eyes, staring into the proverbial sun! First off, I very much like your allusions to the fate of her parents; as there's almost zero mention of them in the series itself, I am quite satisfied with leaving their fate nebulous like this. The app itself is solid... and the typos I see, I can fix personally. I will say that there should be a bit more after the gathering of Twilight & the Mane Six; I would at least advise to continue the background (important events only) up to & including Starlight sw

Okay, then - I suppose we're done here. Off to SecApp with you, so that thy fun may be doubled!

Look numero DOS: The slight mention of the disappearance of her parents still points to some sort of foul play, in my opinion... but I'm okay with letting it slide - after all, there's no mention of them AT ALL in the show; I suppose that such a thing will be eventually addressed, and until then? All good, homeslice. I like your addition of the Tantabus event (though it was after the Nightmare Night moment, not before)... but I think it could be spoken about just a bit more; that event meant a great deal to Luna's character development, and it seems as if much of that was glossed ov

Edits are complete and I await your updated review.

Alrighty then! Into the Second Approval queue you go - best of luck, and I'm glad to have helped!

We'd prefer that you did have one yes, do you have

Did you look at my mention I sent on the 25th of June?

*looks around* Umm... is there still an interest in Lumi here? If so, please speak up; this character will have to be deleted from the queue on June 20th if there's no further interest. Thank you for your time.

@Hustler If you're having issues, by your permission I can edit on your behalf and fix the 3 things I've noticed. If you can provide a link to the Cutiemark image.

I absolutely appreciate your help! Thanks! Also my computer is deciding to be mostly shitfaced right now. Sorry. I’ll get that up soon though!!!! Edit: My tech is working again. I appreciate your help. Check it out! I also left your edits blue as you made them so that they’re easy to identify, although your writing style is quite memorable!!

Hmmmmmm... Well, there are still instances of death having occurred in the MLP universe, but simply saying he caught a disease and died sounds... a bit terse and cold. Instead of: His mother would not relent and so this argument gave way to divorce. There was a furious court battle over which parent would get the foal, but eventually, the judge split the time 60-40. As they were readying to move out, his father caught a horrible disease. He died a week later. Try this: His Mother stood her ground, yet so did his Father - though both meant well, it eventu

@Randimaxis, I completely understand the logistical troubles with customer support of this nature, so don't sweat it (I'm majoring in Computer Information Systems so maybe I can elevate the burden in the future). As for if I think my OC is ready: Yes, it very much is. I forgot to add the scars... oops. Okay, now it's ready Wait, the artist that I originally wanted a drawing from just got back to me, I'll wait until next Monday to update you. BTW: Nice picture. The white background seems to work better with the layout of the page giving it a more generalized feel, but I'm sure I

To be certain, there's a link to the artwork, and I can see it well enough. If you find a way to get a better piece of art for Blue, then we should include it BEFORE he goes into Second Approval - otherwise, he'll have to be RE-evaluated if you want to add art later. Not that he won't pass, mind you - more like I'm trying to get everything juuuuuuust right before he's approved.

Hiya, Loud! Allow me to take a gander here at what you've got, and let's see what we can do to get Blue ready for the EqE. Let's see here... First off, I have to admit that I LOVE how verbose your write-up is! I appreciate an extended vocabulary, and it pleases me to no end to see mulitsyllabic expressions such as these. Kudos! First, let's take care of the typos: -standard mane style hardly draws- -adorned with several scars that tell exaggerated tales of a- -member of the Equestrian Legion had he- -His unnaturally spade-tipped tail- (deleted excess wor

@Cosmic Breeze The database is still being worked on. But your character is fine as is.

@Cosmic Breeze We are still rebuilding the site. It may take some time for the character bios to return to normal.

Alrighty, I've reviewed everything, and Peony has all the issues I've asked for is covered. Just one nitpick, "Rarity in person" in your backstory will need to be changed to "in pony". But, I won't hold such a small detail away from your first approval. Have it changed before the second and you should be good to go. First approval given.

Hello Nightmare Season, After reviewing Peony, I see some problems with the app. One would be your personality section. The last sentences on paragraphs two and three sounds fitting in the Likes/Dislikes section than in personality. The last paragraph is also unnecessary, it sounds more just like a list of already stated likes/dislikes. Second would be the spell that Peony uses to keep flowers alive longer. It's stated that she already used the spell before she researched it when Peony discovered her special talent. It doesn't make sense. Why did she need to research the spell lat

OH MY GOSH he looks so adorable! And that's a wonderful backstory, not to edgy and not to boring. Great job on the whole thing!

Everything looks to be in order. The most important first approval is yours!

Hello Cosmic Breeze! Welcome to the Forums! I'm sure I'm not the first to welcome you to our lovely little (if you consider 35k small) community. I also thank you for your interest in Equestrian Empire. With the formalities out of the way.... Overall, this is very solid. I just have a couple nitpicks. The personality section could get some better spacing between paragraphs. And lastly in the final paragraph from the last mentioned section, you mention that Cosmic enjoys playing video games at home. We haven't seen the use of video games at home in canon, just at arcades. That will need

Looks like everything seems to be in order. I'm giving you the first approval Just a note, when you have a better pic, just give me a PM and we can work on getting it replaced.

Hello ProbablyNotLyra! Welcome to the forums! It is great to see you apply to enter our famed Equestrian Empire (don't quote me on this ). So on to the review... First things first, you will need a picture of Mirage. We don't expect the most awesomest commission or drawing, a simple Griffin Creator image will suffice (it exists). The likes and dislikes section will need some work. A lot of them are unexplained from where they come from. Like how does Mirage like or even know of Princess Luna? Why does he dislike snooty ponies? These are just some questions. Of course you don't have

All the fixes I noted above are all fixed. I see no point in prolonging this further... So off to get that second approval!

All the changes I stated earlier are fixed. Thanks for fixing them, now the coveted first approval will be given to you!

Hello Glacies, I have to give you a bravo on your OC. It is well above the requirements we in EQE have established. There are just a few nitpicks that need fixing/explaining before I can give my approval. The statement "His humor is rather dry, witty, and sarcastic" on the third paragraph in personality is redundant. You already established his humor in the first paragraph. It also doesn't fit in with the rest of the contents of the paragraph. His like for pony watching isn't connected to either his personality or backstory. Why does he like to pony watch? A small comment in his personali

Hey NightTerror! I gave this OC a good read and it looks like you put a lot of thought and effort into this. And it shows. There are some minor fixes that are needed before I can give my first approval. First paragraph on personality has a small mispelled word. Burried should be buried. What is Legends of Equestria? I'm just wondering what this is in relation to show canon. According to our stated lore, batponies need some artifact to imbue them the appearance of one. Simple fix to this would to have the silver the molar is using come from some worn artifact that was in Midnight's possess

I will give you mercy =P It all was just so well written and chaotic. I will give ya the first approval!

Okay, I think I caught all of the instances of word-mashing and fixed 'em. Updating the profile..? Well, I sorta left it open-ended on PURPOSE. As you see above, just writing out the initial introduction took a LOT of work - especially with shenanigans going on - and left it open-ended so that anything further could be alluded to in-play. If I was to bring the above application 'up to speed'? It would be a MILE of text. Mind you, I am NOT arguing with you; if you feel it TRULY needs to be done, *gulp* I'll do it... but I would like to make this single attempt to ask for mercy o

This was definitely a fun read. Just a few things to add and fix and it can be added to the cast characters. There were a couple places where there was a lack of space between words. Mostly where an italic word and normal formatted word met. And lastly it needs be to updated to current status of the show. Especially with the latest season finale being a big moment for Discord. Otherwise, great and entertaining read!

cool

I see no further issues that need refining. I'm giving Alto her first approval.

Hey Yoshi, Overall you got a good application here. I just have one teeny tiny nitpick with Alto. In her dislikes section, you mention she hates ponies who try to weasel out of things. Where does this dislike come from? It kinda just comes out of the blue, maybe a small tale of how this dislike came to be? Otherwise, she looks great!

Everything looks great! I'm giving Soft Star her first approval.

@@Randimaxis, Alterations have been made.

@@Derplight Sperkle, That lore you guys have is... hmm well interesting, certianlly dose not match my own, but I will bow to your wishes. Cirrus's section has been moved to second last paragraph of her background section I've adjusted her opening background sentence to incorporate a magically enchanted item to make her a thestral Hope that is sufficient.

Looking over the character, it does look good overall. It has some issues though. The half pegasus/half batpony does not go well with the lore we brought in. A good adjustment would be to have Soft Star inherit some artifact from her father. Batponies are a product of being near or brought up with an artifact of some sort that gives them their appearance. I would recommend putting the part in your other section about Cirrus in your backstory instead. It fits better there. Make these minor changes and you will be on your way to approval.

This is a test to see what the stance on bat ponies is.

I would tend to agree with that mate.

@@Eloquence, I belive I have done him now El.

oh my god Luna, another Randi (it's a compliment) well you are gonna be fun.

@@Randimaxis,@, YAY CHEERS PEOPLE!!

@@Eloquence, fixed minor errors and yes Geordie is correct.

@@Eloquence, My friend and you colleague Randimaxis has looked at the grammar so has helped with that so that the backstory and personality sections are now up to his standards + have made note in other about family ties.

all but listed have been attended too, I don't remember an Orange family in the show? and I do want her to be part of it if there is one a cousin or such (dose that effect tier) I'll have to find someone to do the second part soon (i hope)

roger will make amendments when I have enough time (soon)