Blue Moon

OC: Princess Harmony Star Owner: Princess HarmonyStar First off: the design. Well, I'm actually not quite sure on this one. The coat color looks very nice, and I really like the body type you chose for your OC; gives your OC a very pretty look and suits her quite well. But the mane color scheme is what is causing my dilemma. I'm not sure if I like it or don't like it. In some of the pictures you gave, such as the first one, the colors appear to clash. But in others, such as the second one, it looks very nice. So, I guess I like the color scheme that was present in the second picture you gave, and I think that you should most likely use that for the official color scheme. Though I must say this: your OC's mane reminds me of a peanut butter jelly sandwich. Take that as you like. Next up: the personality. There are plenty of flaws and positive traits, but the way you write the personality gives no relation between some of the traits. Now, these are fine traits, but I have two options if you want to improve the personality. You could either put more depth and info for each of the traits, and have them relate to eachother to fit together like a puzzle. Or, you could take out some of the traits that contradict others, and focus more on the remaining trait. Same with the likes and dislikes. They seem very random right now, and you should make them appear less list-y. Though I find it kind of funny she dislikes stereotypes when she is an alicorn. Not sure if this was done on purpose, but it was very clever. Lastly, the backstory. Well, I don't really like this backstory for a couple of reasons. First off; the reason she became an alicorn doesn't make sense as passion isn't the only thing that makes an alicorn ruler. Speaking of rulers, I don't really like how she is princess of the earth as it gives her way too much power that seems a bit unfair. Along with her level of power, I don't understand another thing about your OC's backstory. Why would the best friend of your OC turn against your OC just because of her cousin. You say there friendship is as strong as a diamond, but it is quickly ruined by a cousin. That doesn't seem to realistic to me. Lastly, I really don't like how your OC's emotions are connected to the land. It seems like too much power for your OC to have. I recommend giving your OC less power, and perhaps just keep her as a normal non-princess alicorn. Overall, an OC with a possibly good design, a personality that could be presented better, and a over-powered position in its backstory that could use some editing. Grade: C- Thanks for the complement and wishing me good luck! I'll try my best to let you know if there is anything that could be improved in your review as soon as I get to it. OC: Ion Owner: Ion Let's begin with the design. I love this color scheme. It isn't overly flashy, and the colors go together very well. Also, something I'd like to complement you for not going overboard with accessories. The few accessories look very nice and doesn't clutter up the rest of your OC. I really love the mane clip, and I like how it corresponds to her cutie mark. And, I must say your OC is simply adorable. I'll continue with the personality next. Very good job here as well. You did use the very common trait of "shy at first, but can be outgoing" (nothing wrong with that as long as you add more), but you added more which distinguishes your OC from others. I like how you incorporated her intelligence in the story, and even added some humorous moments. You did a great job here; you have positive traits, flaws, interests, and added some little touches which all equal up to a great personality. You even added a life wish which is something I like in people's OCs, and it is really something that adds a lot more than some people think. Lastly, the backstory. You did a very good job here as well. I like what you did with the whole "unicorn in pegasus body" thing, and it is pretty unique. I also like how you never went overboard with this OC, and she seems normal enough. She worked hard to accomplish what she accomplished in a realistic way. I also like how you mention her family, and the fact that none of them died is nice (nothing wrong with orphans; just that it is done a lot in situations where it is unneeded.) A great backstory that serves its purpose well. Overall, an OC with a great cute design, great unique personality, and a great backstory. A great OC by all of my standards. Grade: A+

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OC: Sunyatay Sutra Owner: InvisiblePinkUnicorn I'll start this review off with the design. Well, an invisible OC is certainly one of the more unique OCs I've seen. However, I do have a few issues with her design. First off: the coat type. That kind of coat always looked weird to me, and I don't think it looks too good with your OC. I think just a normal coat type would look much nicer. Next up: the colors of the mane. Now, I am going to assume you picked a white color to further emphasize the "ghost-like" state of your OC, but I suggest either replacing the white with a different darker color, or just keep the whole mane the same color; preferably the pink color already present. The white clashes badly with the rest of the mane, and the coat. Also, the transparency effect you used is nice, but I have a method for doing it that I think would be much more effective. Instead of using that effect, try lowering the opacity of the whole picture in a photo editing program until you have the desired effect. This would look very nice, especially if you decide to take my advice for the color scheme. I'll continue this review with the personality. I guess this personality works for a character like this, but Sunyatay is still a regular pony on the inside; so I think you should put more normal pony traits in, or at least reflect them into it a bit. Try to add some of Sunyatay's interests. However, I do like the negative traits you gave. Lack of confidence is pretty good for a trait, and it works very nicely here. To top of this review, I'll be reviewing the backstory. You did a fairly good job here. It is very unique in my opinion, and I quite like it. But what I love most about this backstory is the last part. The thing about her turning visible again when she makes a pony happy and dims whenever they panic is brilliant, and really adds a whole lot to this OC. Overall, an OC that could use some edits to the color scheme, a bit more additions to the personality, and a great and unique backstory. Grade: C+

Yay! Simple and normal was what was in my mind when I made Blue Moon, so I'm glad you see him that way. Thanks for the review and I'm happy he got a good rating. Have fun with the rest of the reviews!

Could you review my OC, Blue Moon? His link is in my signature (make sure to only click the "http" part or else it won't work.) Be as harsh as you like. Thanks!

I'm almost to your review. Just check the order of the requests and who I did last, and you can see who is up next. Yours is coming up soon though.

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It's alright. I'm not too sure I like it a whole lot, but it has its moments. I still prefer the original Clocks much more, of course.

5/10 Not sure as I haven't chatted with you too much.

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