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I have a half-siren OC named Nocturne. It would be interesting for them to meet.

Yea... if only i used her.

You should put more time into her regular backstory, not just her Equestria Divided one. A lot of people discuss how great the story is, but there isn't a lot there. Besides that, she's an okay character.

Oh, and there's not much there about her personality, either.

As i said i am making a new backstory for her and copying it here. KEEP IN TOUCH FOR UPDATES!!!

I have a new backstory i just cant update it right now.

1)No i don't...
2)I've done the same mistake... you're forgiven. My story previously with Selune was equally bloody.
3)You only mention one.

Your OC is the reason i hate joining dark Tournaments. I tried lots and lots of times to nerf my OC into some acceptable levels then someone like you who hasn't gotten an opinion like "Your OC is pretty dang OP" enters such a tournament and makes it nigh impossible to defeat. For goodness sake he's only got one weakness like Superman has Kryptonite... That's kinda too much. If i knew i would have supermen in that kind of RPs i would have made mine stronger. 

Tl:dr; Your OC is OP. Also too much tragic past don't you think? Just saying.

Kiwi? Isnt that some kind of fruit?

Thanks a lot!

Heya!

She became a nightmare? What nightmare? I have so many questions...

What is her profession, what is her lifestyle? How did she grow up? Who are her parents? Why did they leave her? Does she have any brother or sister? Any other relatives?

Also... never missing a shot with her crossbow does this mean people can't dodge her shots? Can they protect themselves from it?

Where is she now... does she have a goal in life? Does she like living in the forest or city?

You might wanna look at a skull some time, it's just the one bone lol

Yea... i should probably say it "cracked" a bit.. or i could just say his hooves got broken.

A nice lunatic... but i have one objection... jail? "Clockwork, in the end, won, having suffocated his friend below his hooves. "Shh, sleep now, my friend.. Don't worry about the time. I've got better plans in mind."

Clockwork was eventually shunned from his town, having destroyed all things harmonic between himself and his fellow ponies. He fell further and further into the black hole which was growing in his mind. Taking ever more caution in his methods, and becoming increasingly cunning in his execution of creating disharmony."

He killed someone and all that he was punished with was be shunned? You could just say he run away from authorities... or that he served his time by seemingly fixing the disharmony of the prison.
 

http://www.eophtha.com/eophtha/Pictionary/Sunset%20glow.jpg It seems to me like you added the cutie mark as a vector to the overall work. You know you could always use a picture of a sun diving between the clouds/mountains for that... could be cool.
"-Sunset glow- A soothing aura which calms the nerves of almost anyone who is nearby and is not immune to such effects." How about "those who are nearby and are not immune..."

-Telepathic- can speak through thoughts to another. Is there a distance limit to this spell that i should know about? This doesn't mean she can read thoughts right?

-Torchlight horn- Self explanitory, it makes her horn like a magical torch. Why do i think this spell will end up burning her own mane? But what am i saying... it's magic right? Just seems to me like it could burn her mane.

All in all nice character... simple... good. You should mention where her parents are, if she has any other relatives, e.t.c. Always be careful not to make her appear overly dramatic. These chars tend to kill the fun of the RPs if their dramatic-ness stays too much.

"-Ignition *Second strongest spell* (Setting fire to anything)"  You should really be careful when you use the word "Anything". I don't understand how it works... does it launch a stream of fire that covers the item or whatever or just makes flames appear out of nowhere to burn it?
"-Weather control within range of 1 mile radius" This really doesn't make much sense considering this is supposed to be pegasi Territory. 
"-Frightening presence (aura spell)" This really doesn't seem like a necessary spell when there is Invisibility.
These spells are fine... they don't need to be removed. ((Except the Weather-Control maybe...)) and i believe that frightening presence and invisibility can be modified to fit.

Here's an idea... rename invisibility spell to "Shroud of The Night" ((since he is a creature of the night as you say it will fit)) as a night-time only spell. A creature of the night should not be able to hide that easily in broad daylight. However a creature of the night would perhaps instill fear to those who saw such an "alien" creature during the day. Therefore the Frightening Presence ((Known to me from Baldur's Gate as the Cloack of Fear spell http://www.planetbaldursgate.com/bg2/character/spells/priest/priestspell.asp?lvl_id=4&file_name=CloakOfFear.htm&title=Cloak+Of+Fear))
should be a daytime spell only. 

"As a little filly" isn't he a male? Don't we say colt for males? Or is it universal for little babies? Minor detail...

Maybe you could elaborate on profession, location, aspirations and stuff. I tend to think those stuff as important when an OC takes place in RPs where there are mentioned known locations.

All in all a good OC hardly OP by my standards and pretty nice. He doesn't have anything overly strange or extreme and that's good.

This pony has some serious drive, another great idea. Well thought out, and well written. The only thing I kind of question with this OC though is the part where he crushes his "head bones"?

I'm guessing you mean skull, and he suffers a severe concussion or something?

Yea... he broke several of his skull bones in the forehead. He had to be hospitalized for some time... which probably took away some of his "fitness".

Selune is quite the character. I really like her storyline, it's very well thought out. Her abilities don't seem OP, but are definitely well paired abilities, and would be quite effective even by herself. She wouldn't want to fight hand to hand yet it looks like, but she can definitely throw off any foe with these spells. Well done.

Thanks... anything that you can say that you want me to delve into a bit more like story, or a signature spell... you can tell me.

If you ask me she needs a greater backstory.

Currently remaking this character due to ALOT of hate from it...

What? Why... why in the bloody hell would you hate that?

Isn't his cutie mark like the Yugioh "Dimensional Fissure"?

Oh my gosh. So much detail and originality. I've never seen an OC that had so much time and effort put into it. I love hoe the backstory tells of how Selune was born. You should be proud of this OC. I swear, best one I've seen so far. 5 stars. Congratulations.

Hey thank you! The reason i love this OC is because people offer to draw her and make her interesting for me. Her backstory was reworked to not be "dark past" bs filled... thank you again for you support! It is the guys that drew her that i thank for having put so much work on her. That and the interesting Rps i've participated in.