Skycoaster

Hehe, I forgot that one reference was even in the second paragraph, and history is now in the proper order. 

Ready for final inspection.

Edits are complete and I await your updated review.

Hello there Tyranosuarus.

I have read over Mirror Image, and there are some things that would need fixed to make him Equestrian Empire acceptable.

• All Oc's must have an appearance uploaded. There are plenty of pony creator apps that would be able to help you with this.
• Second, we do not know how long ponies live in Equestria. Please remove any references to a physical age and just use the appropriate adjectives for age.
• As for backstory, saying he was proficient as a thief would be adequate. Also, you mention that he started taking jobs from other ponies. Are these thief jobs or just general ones.
• Lastly, there are a few typos and spelling errors that would need fixed.

Make these changes and I or another staff will be willing to look him over once more.

Thanks,

Skycoaster~EQE Staff.

Looks good on my end. Second approval given.

Everything seems to be in order. Second Approval given. 

All seems to be in order. Approved.

Looks good here. Approved!

All looks good on my end. Giving second. Have fun with Pathfinder.

I see nothing out of line with Zeus's application. Giving first approval. He is a very cute oc.

All required changes have been made. Giving first approval. 

Moving to approved. Have fun with Arcing Storm in Equestrian Empire. 

Looks good as well. Approved! Have fun with her.

Everything seems to be in order now. Giving first approval.

@@Gloomfury,

I must say that Crowbar is quite an improvement. I enjoyed reading his back story and liked the idea of his Pink Eyes. It was very unique and a nice touch.

There are only a few minor things, and I mean minor. There are a few typos and a few things with how it is worded. I would change "Even when he was home" to "Even when he was not in school"

Also, if you could clarify is Crowbar his birth name or just a nickname given because of his Cutie Mark/Always carrying one around. 

Overall, I like him. 

Second approval, but only with the condition that was discussed through PM. The staff of EQE and Pony Roll Play reserve the right to require further edits to the character if not played according to her limitations. She is approved, but will be monitored. 

Thank you for updating Stardream. Her back story is now easier on the eyes, as well as more uniform.

Seeing bits and peices of the future through dreams are fine, as we do 100% know how the dream world works. I personally know that Deja Vu can happen. As long as it is kept something similar to this, I have no problem. 

Going on to the talent. I honestly can say talking to the stars to find out a pony's past has me a bit worried, even if it is with the user's permission. The potential exists for her to become overpowered.

Currently you state that her powers are kept in check by not knowing what they are, or how to understand them. I can understand this, but I would need a guarantee that she would never fully understand them as long as she is used in Equestrian Empire before I would feel comfortable approving her. 

As for her "Early Warning System" I can also see this being a lot like Deja Vu. As long as it is similar, I see no problem there. 

Hello EquestrianScholar, I will be doing your OC review for today.

Stardream shows a lot of potential, but some changes are needed.

First off, Personality, the opening line of the personality is very confusing. To the average reader it is hard to understand. I understand that you may have wanted to be artistic when writing it, but keeping it simple works best. Other than that line, the personality checks out from my end.

Moving on to the back story. It was very difficult to read. There were a few grammar errors that would need to be fixed, as well as the formatting. Double spacing between the paragraphs would do wonders for the ease of the readers.

As for her seeing hints of the future and talking to the stars, could you go into more detail on how it works and it's limitations.

There's a fine line to be toed with her powers, but if you can keep them properly limited in scope, she should be fine once she's tidied up.

Hello there Gloomfury,  and thank you for your interest in Equestrian Empire.

So this section is for characters that fit within the canon of the show. That being said, this character will need quite a few changes before he fits well.

First off, an image is required for all characters in Equestrian Empire. It appears that you may have had one that was a broken link. Just re-uploading it may fix that problem.

Secondly, Exact age is not allowed as we do not know how long ponies live in Equestria. Please just leave it at stallion.

Thirdly, the personality section is a bit lacking. For original character we would like to see an expanded personality. It's hard to describe who a pony is in just one sentence.

Fourthly, the backstory is required to be at least three paragraphs. While you have pressed the enter key more than that, a paragraph is a group of closely related sentences that develop an idea.

Lastly, Equestrian Empire rules specifically disallow overly dark backstories.

Hello there,

I just looked over your character for EQEmpire. To me, everything seems to be in order. I did enjoying reading the back story and enjoyed learning how he earned his cutie mark.

Over all, well done.

He hath been updated!

Removed Image, updated to new Image.

Solar is finally ready for review.

All updated and good to go.

Just waiting on my Cutie mark image, and I should be good to go. Anything you can think of now while he's a work in progress? I'd like to here what your thoughts are of him.

Just a quick question. Will you be removing the "Ready" that we put on the names of our approved OC's?