Skycoaster

Thank you for updating Stardream. Her back story is now easier on the eyes, as well as more uniform. Seeing bits and peices of the future through dreams are fine, as we do 100% know how the dream world works. I personally know that Deja Vu can happen. As long as it is kept something similar to this, I have no problem. Going on to the talent. I honestly can say talking to the stars to find out a pony's past has me a bit worried, even if it is with the user's permission. The potential exists for her to become overpowered. Currently you state that her powers are kept in check by not knowing what they are, or how to understand them. I can understand this, but I would need a guarantee that she would never fully understand them as long as she is used in Equestrian Empire before I would feel comfortable approving her. As for her "Early Warning System" I can also see this being a lot like Deja Vu. As long as it is similar, I see no problem there.

I have not found an Amusement Park or Coaster that I can say I hate. I just have ones I like more than others. I have ridden roughly 220 different Roller Coasters. My lowest rated coaster, Vacoma Boomarangs.

Hello EquestrianScholar, I will be doing your OC review for today. Stardream shows a lot of potential, but some changes are needed. First off, Personality, the opening line of the personality is very confusing. To the average reader it is hard to understand. I understand that you may have wanted to be artistic when writing it, but keeping it simple works best. Other than that line, the personality checks out from my end. Moving on to the back story. It was very difficult to read. There were a few grammar errors that would need to be fixed, as well as the formatting. Double spacing between the paragraphs would do wonders for the ease of the readers. As for her seeing hints of the future and talking to the stars, could you go into more detail on how it works and it's limitations. There's a fine line to be toed with her powers, but if you can keep them properly limited in scope, she should be fine once she's tidied up.

Hello there Gloomfury, and thank you for your interest in Equestrian Empire. So this section is for characters that fit within the canon of the show. That being said, this character will need quite a few changes before he fits well. First off, an image is required for all characters in Equestrian Empire. It appears that you may have had one that was a broken link. Just re-uploading it may fix that problem. Secondly, Exact age is not allowed as we do not know how long ponies live in Equestria. Please just leave it at stallion. Thirdly, the personality section is a bit lacking. For original character we would like to see an expanded personality. It's hard to describe who a pony is in just one sentence. Fourthly, the backstory is required to be at least three paragraphs. While you have pressed the enter key more than that, a paragraph is a group of closely related sentences that develop an idea. Lastly, Equestrian Empire rules specifically disallow overly dark backstories.

I love driving on long road trips. It takes your mind off the time it takes. I also get an adrenalin rush driving in cities.

Hello there, I just looked over your character for EQEmpire. To me, everything seems to be in order. I did enjoying reading the back story and enjoyed learning how he earned his cutie mark. Over all, well done.

@@Charcoal Embers, @@notten1, Libby By this time, I was about to begin my third glass of cider. In stead of levitating it though, I just stick my muzzle into the glass and begin to pick the glass up with my mouth and down it. I look over at the two mares and smile. "I...Ima going to go and get some.....things....Oh look It's Princess Luna..." *THUD* I hit the floor near the two. "Ima stay hear for a bit. You...You two have fun."

@@notten1, @@Charcoal Embers, Libby I watch the two mare's converse, though the mention of the name Caisem seems to enrage Mr. Grumpy's marefriend. "Um...well you and that stallion did scare me quite a bit back when we first met...but your a bit scary now." as I watch the bartender run into the back room. "My name is Libby, and I think I heard Prisha call you Line?" I said as the cider began to take effect. "I'm from stable 115, and I'm here to fallow in the hoofsteps of unicorns that could actualy doooooooo maggggggggggggggggiccccccccccccccccc. Not just levitation, but MMMMMMMMMMMMMMAAAAAAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGGGGGIIIIIIIIIICCCCCCCCCCC!" I smile and lean back on my stool, loosing my balance fro a moment. "Prishia there can teliport. I hope she can show me how. Maybe I can learn some of these spells," as I levate an old spell book dating back to the time of the second elements of harmony. "I found this hidden in the air shaft of my stable. Heyyyyyyy. You and Prishia want to read it with me?"

@@notten1, @@Charcoal Embers, Libby I looked over at the mare that had joined us from earlier, though she seemed upset and Mr. Grumpy was not with her and I sighed in releaf. I felt a bit safer, until she slammed her hoof on the bar. "....Um...are...you....ok?.....Where.......Mister....Grum...." as I realize who she was talking about and put my hoof to my mouth. "This is some good cider, You want some. I think I can get you some...Um hold on." I look over to the bartender "Um...Kind sir, would you mind getting my...friend...here a glass of cider please?" as I bat my eyelashes at him and smile. "Prisha's been showing me the ropes!"

@@Charcoal Embers, . Libby "You...You really think that...that's my calling? Being sex..sexy?" As I raises an eyebrow. "Well, it...it seems to work for you, but I don't know if I could." I said looking at the cider in front of me. I began to drink it. "This stuff tastes pretty good!" as I down the glass rather quickly. I look to the bartender and bat my eyelashes at him in an attempt to imitate Caprishia. I look over to her and smile, hoping I was doing it right.

Rollercoasters > Water Slides.

@@Charcoal Embers, Libby I look up to my friend and sigh. "I...I know Prisha. From what I've seen this place is horrible. I know you have my safety in mind, but I guess I just try to find the goodness in people. I..I know that's going to get me killed..maybe. I..I just don't want to be heartless like Mr. Grumpy. I'd rather die than not have any compassion. I could not live like that." I smile at her. "Maybe you could show me how to be a little tougher?"

@@Charcoal Embers, Libby I look up at my friend and smile. "About what?" I smile. I hope I had not done anything to make my only friend outside the stable mad. "I..I didn't do anything wrong, did I?" I look at a drink and smile. "You don't suppose I could have one of those do you?" I smile as I look as the Cider. I had head about it, but had never experienced it myself.

@@Charcoal Embers, Libby Libby fallowed the orange mare as closely as possable, attempting to keep up. She lost sight of her for a moment and quickly began to hyperventilate. "Caparisha!" as I than get one more glimps of her mane. "Oh...as I quickly trot up to her and lean into her so I don't get separated again from my best friend in all of Equestria. "I..I thought I lost you bestest of bestest friends! I'm going to stick to you like glue." as I beam a huge smile at her as we near the bar. I felt safe with Caprisha, and never wanted her to leave me alone in the wasteland.

@@Charcoal Embers, @@Aerodynas, @@notten1, Libby "Waaaa....Wait up! I don't know where I'm going! Caprisha, I'm..." as I look and see the other two in the group frozen. They are bright red. "Um....Caprisha! Don't leave me!" I trotted after the mare, making sure to keep my eyes on her for fear alone of getting lost before I do catch up with her, tugging on her tail with my magic, giving her the puppy dog eyes. "Don't leave me!"