I laughed at it, then I told PinkiePie about it and she gave me a bad look before stuffing a cupcake in my mouth((Pinkie is my imaginary friend/roommate...deal with it))
Awww, that kills all the fun
But seriously, it's not bad, just do whatever, let the critiques roll in and see what you may do for improvement from there
PinkiePie is...and always will be((until I break the forth wall and marry her)), the princess((and one day the queen)) of comedy
((but I'm joking about marrying her, I'm taken!))