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Solid

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  1. Very interesting story, took me a while to realize that the characters are all in fact animals 0.o

     

    Some grammar aside, I think the biggest issue here is excessive information/action. Such as when Kunni placed a paw on Alexander we know Kunni is comforting Alex, there's no need to add the "comforting him." May seem like a negligible issue but it adds up and could be a bit annoying.

     

    Overall I'm impressed, this story has a lot of potential with its creativity and unique background, you just need to do some twinkling with the expressions and writing style and it will be a great story. Keep it up :3

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