GuardianFenix

What you've got is all setup, which is good. From here your idea simply needs direction. My advice is simply to come up with an ending. Once you have, it will simply be a matter of getting from point A to point B. But overall, you have some good characters and I hope to see how they play off each other.

By the way, for a fan film based on MLP it's interesting you didn't make an idea about the Mane 6. You might be onto something very original if you keep persisting.

Well, apparently they become close friends, Jet realizes that his friend was brainwashed and ends up beating the crud out of Queen Chrysalis to get her back, destroying Rhyme's stage in the process, and Teary finds love... With who, I don't know yet.