Lektra Bolt

Hmm yea I see your point. Too much use of outside. Fixing.

Despise is a strong word. I think I'll soften that.

How's it look now?

Also added the possibility of her inventions melting (Overheating). I'd always wanted to include that part. Hope that's ok.

Okay I'll say it how you say it, since it seems like a cleaner way than how I had it

Wow yea I actually hadn't noticed the database change. Fixed that. Got questions on some things though.

Removed the entire line about stupid or idiotic. That was a leftover and something I recall being asked to clarify by Kay or whatever her current displayed name is.

I guess I'll just remove the parenthesis altogether, since I'm sure players will understand the sarcasm is random.

The going outside thing I really can't word any better. She is the type to not enjoy ANY outside activities, so how do you recommend I reword that to clarify?

The recasting time was requested in the past. The animation originally did not have a duration and actually was ambiguous. Lol make up your minds.

I THINK Corona (Fractured currently) and I got it. That is what I wanted to say, but Corona reworded it much better. THANKS Corona!

Is this acceptable to you Elo? Please tell me it's acceptable?

Well she had a history of lightning based inventors in the family and had been considering it already. Her family's magic specialty was activated by the strike. How is that not enough? I'm drawing a blank on what to add that isn't already stated. It's a logical conclusion from family history (inventing) and family element affinity (lightning). Why is this so hard for me? I'll see what I can do, maybe ask other people for ideas.

They really are burn marks though. The best I could do is call them lightning bolt burn marks, but they're still burns. It happened when the lightning strike was grounded and we're nixing them, but we should still identify them properly.

As for how I can't really think of more than what we got, so like gimme ideas that would work out please?

Perfect. Thanks! That would be a great RP.

Waiting on Elo to get back to me with some story flow issues I brought up to her by PM, but overall the issue above is resolved. Just the Backstory flow seems broken now. Like too much happening at once.

Should it really be noted there about the lack of marks? You and the others originally just said to remove from her description all mention of the leg lightning bolts, now I should add back that they're not there? I was led to believe that description supersedes the picture, so not having it in there was enough. Please make up your minds. Should I really put that there?

I'm gonna say not finicky and uninterested in finery, cause she is kind of still afraid to get her hooves dirty. Her own mess she's not afraid of, but like she wouldn't want to go dumpster diving, going to a place with a lot of dirty laundry thrown about, and wouldn't want to go through sewage or deep mud. How do I word this, exactly? Kinda unsure, now. Please help.

The Likes/Dislikes part I'm also unsure about. I'm definitely not suggesting she knows them personally, but as someone who is a fan of the Mane 6 and is aware of events in Ponyville prior to coming to town and EqE assuming everything in the show has already happened, she would know about these characters enough that they're respectable enough. Maybe not Derpy since except in SOL she doesn't speak, but other than that she would have enough respect for the named ponies to have a predetermined good impression of them. On the other hoof someone who's being stupid or silly would make her uneasy, being an intellectual, and compel her to tell them off. Someone like a random guard giving her orders is not something she would enjoy because of being largely independent. So please help me reword this.

And I'm completely stumped on the backstory rewrite. That's a pretty big rewrite and I'm not sure how to even get started with that. She has a history of inventors in the family and had been thinking about following her parents hoofsteps for a while, but with her magic specialty being realized by the lightning strike pretty much solidified that she should go ahead with it. Knowing this, how do I reword that? I'm not very good with rewrites, and that's pretty deep in her history.

Please help me.

Lol me? You know I'm hesitant to change anything for fear of the character straying too far from the EvE version. Unless I have to change more. If you all have no further issues with it, I guess maybe give me a day or two to see if I feel she's missing anything now, and call it fully done?

Maybe we should find a way to put the Magitek explanation into the form proper?

How's it look now? I kept object in some places cause it seemed to sound better, took out the original reference image for Sparky, and added that she treats him as male and sentient.

Would you like me to lay out my headcanon for Magitek now? I laid it out above pretty much. We are definitely on the same page that it's based on perpetual motion, though just for a very long time.

There's the directives spoken during casting being "code" in terms of what we have for computers, and mana/electricity flowing inside to magically carry commands around some wires with responses being "coded in" for the things she needs Sparky to do. This is as dummed down as possible since he's not going to be sentient here. Just acting on presets.

Oh shoot that didn't go through cause my browser crashed. Should be up by the time you see it.

I'm not really a fan of using magic, even electrical magic, as a power source. Based on what we've seen it's not used as such, except by Flim and Flam who kind of break the mold. But they had to keep feeding the SSCS to keep it going. We have not seen other actual magic powered stuff, and things just do things because the spell does what it says it does then ends. Magitek is powered by the initial enchantment and maintained by ambient magic in the atmosphere in perpetual motion (Where things need to move, like gears), which is why I didn't originally have a duration on it. I can see that as being too advanced for a strict canon setting which is why I didn't have a problem with having a duration. But I did mean a machine that is enchanted to move the broom in sweeping motion. How do you want me to reword that, exactly?

Really, inanimate machine? Sparky has directives to follow and is animate, though not sentient. Maybe this is just poor wording and I'm having trouble understanding it, but if something is inanimate then it doesn't do anything. Like a carpet lays flat. The fact that Sparky has functions and does things means Sparky isn't really all that inanimate. Non-sentient sure, but not inanimate either. Am I just not understanding what you mean here?

Taking out the disclaimer and extra stuff then if you think it's unnecessary. Not asking for special treatment.

The distance thing was because Kay asked for one, but distance is hard to gauge in RP where it's not visual but all text and I try to keep it within reasonable distances. I think line of sight is appropriate? Like as far as she can see.

I'm going to say objects in her form, but might change to using the word machines later as RP develops. I just don't recall the word machine ever appearing in the show, and even Hooves didn't use the word expressly. What do you think of that? Constructs just seemed appropriate to a magical world like this.

Ah you're right about not having to justify. This is a leftover from EvE where stuff is looser and justifications are necessary. Removing that then.

I found a new working pic for the inspiration of Sparky, but do you think I should just take it out entirely now that Sparky has art? That's kind of a leftover from when Sparky had no art.

How's it look now?

Abel that's a professional art.

Elo, at the time I had just added her OCD. Sorry about the false positive. But we've been talking in PM and I've updated her spell list as well as I could by what we discussed, and added the privacy request. I think we just need to figure out what's acceptable for Magitek.

Also took out scanning from Sparky.

That's fine. I'll get it as close as I feel possibly can without her input, but I'd like it when she's available. I've been surprisingly busy lately.

Elo has said I should mention I mean to give her complete immunity to lightning after that storm, which means she can channel her lightning without hurting herself and walk through thunderstorms unharmed. And yes, it always comes from the horn which lights up, but I'd like her to be able to emit the lightning from any part of the body. I thought it a minor detail since not having it is like saying the Human Torch burns himself when he uses his powers. Really don't think an immunity to lightning is too much to be protected from one's own powers and natural versions of such powers.

Thank you Elo!

I would like to see Kay's take on her making hard lightning constructs like Green Lantern and the house stuff before I go ahead with that. Not trying to argue, just would like to know if you guys are in agreement is all.

The magic out of the body thing is probably not worded clear enough. I mean to say that it's always her horn magic and her horn would glow when she uses it. What I mean to say is I would like her to be able to direct her lightning magic through her body without ill effects to emit from any point she wants, or even cover herself with it so touching her would literally be shocking and protect from some blows. I can't figure out how to reword it to say this though. Help please?

I'll get to work rewording the privacy, but I'll need some time to think on it so it won't be immediate sorry.

I think it's as good as it's going to get for now without asking for clarification. These things are in no particular order.
 
I've updated her history to mention more of her family as well as kid to foal, and fixed the schooling. Reworded some other things too as you asked. How's it look now?
 
Can I actually use Telekinesis to have her bend or cut metal for use, or would you rather she used her tools more?
 
Since we're making her more about the electricity which is really supposed to be a family magic specialty and not so much her actual talent (But whatever), I changed the percents of how her inventions work. Is that okay?
 
Is it okay I still gave her a lot of control over the electricity she makes? It's based on a cross between the superheroes Static (Creating, directing, and shaping) and Green Lantern (Also shaping, but this is where I based temporarily solidifying from). I would like her to have this as her combat magic, as she is meant to be a character that could use her element to take care of herself or protect others if fights arise. In EvE I RP her as most commonly conjuring a pair of swords out of electricity to swing as weapons, but I usually don't limit it to just those. Also as I state in her profile, it's a hit at parties to create stuff out of electricity for people to enjoy, so I don't really wanna change that too much. I'm sure Pinkie would like that once EqE gets a Pinkie again. Speaking of which, who's gonna welcome her to Ponyville?
 
I am having trouble coming up with a way to reword where her History leaves off. How would I make her less of an outcast but make sure she has privacy? In her "offscreen" times, times when she's not in active RP, Lektra needs her privacy to be able to run her little enchanting business.
 
How advanced can I make Lektra's house, for future reference? Can it be made of metal that conducts so she can manipulate it after enchanting it to be able add rooms and stuff? Is she allowed to have a generator? Solar panels? They haven't been shown to exist, but just making sure the answer is no. How about a metal scrap pile in her backyard to pull from for building stuff?
 
If the enchantments aren't permanent, ponies would need semi annual maintenance on their Magitek to have the spell redone for the item to continue working as intended. She would be need to either travel to them or have them come over to her. Is this fine?

Wow. Wow is what I can say right now to start. Really wish character pages had notifications.

Thank you Kay and by extension Eloquence, even though she hasn't posted. I love you guys. This is very detailed how I like it and entirely reasonable. I'll get on it. I knew even before I got to the bottom that it wasn't up for debate, and I already have ideas on how to reword things. I actually have a new pic by Trees to upload, though it would still need edits made cause it's for the EvE version and that one does have the hoof marks. Or if Hunter takes a while (He's' busy right now) we can just have it noted that they're not there. Trees was so happy and grateful about the advertising I did for her at Ponycon 2015 that she did this backpack-less Lektra with Sparky for free.

I'll need a bit of time to get on this, and I think I will need to ask some clarification on things as I'm going about it. I'm in the middle of an extensive Twilight form for Hypn's RP and I don't want it to suck. It eats my creative juices because I respect the character a lot and want to do her justice, so I might take a while to even start on editing here. I do swear I'll get on it though.

Also I'm sorry if some stuff sounds crazy and the TMI. Part of how my own disability manifests is I just passively display my symptoms. I'll try to fix it up. It's both in RP (Though I try to minimize it if I play a character I didn't design with it) and IRL, and to list out the symptoms would be hard since even I don't know all of mine. They just happen and I was diagnosed pretty much ten minutes into talking to my doctor so he saw it and I'm mostly cluseless, which is why I say it will be RPed out as well as possible, cause most times I won't even notice while others do. The most noticeable thing is that I don't immediately understand things that are clear to others, and it has to be explained to me in greater detail. This is also one of the reasons I have a lot of detail myself. I write how I would want it explained to me, so I can get wordy. The other thing is I'm more numb to the feelings of others and don't immediately react (or sometimes not at all) to things that would usually make people very emotional. If I list it out and then don't play it out I'd pretty much be a liar and I don't really want to do that. So yea the best I can say is it will come up on it's own and it's there. Thanks for letting me keep it as is.

Sure Hunter. Thanks. I'm waiting for the mods to get back to me about the backstory parts, but that's a good start and I appreciate it. PM it to me to upload here? I'll of course credit you.

Finally, a mod reply.

Let me just state for the record, that I do want to get her into the section, and I'll work with you if you work with me. But there's some things that can't be changed and art is one of them. I'd have to re-commission the entire art just for EQE. You realize the silliness here? I can't draw, and redoing the art would require going to my artist for a new one. This costs money. It wasn't free art.

Firstly let me just say, I'm terrible at rewrites. I gotta know exactly what's asked of me.

How about I change kid to child? Or how about foal? The word first is a leftover from when she had a player sibling on another forum, but she does have NPC siblings. Their names are Speed Bolt and Flash Bolt. They're both younger than her. Should I include them in here? Get back to me on which word you'd like me to use, please.

How would you like me to change her schooling to say she had a lot of it? She is studious and I wanted to make sure this was reflected. As you say, we don't know much about schooling.

How would you like me to reword the first paragraph? I bring up the company as early as possible.

The lightning patterns on the legs is a direct result of her being struck by lightning. It's burned hair/skin and those parts of the coat grow like that because it's a burn. It's the same as with the gray parts in the hair. I'm trying to make sure that it's visible she has damaged hair follicles, because you don't walk away from something like that completely unscathed. It's also extremely subtle, compared to say, having off-color spots or blotches all over the body which the rules say not to do. I didn't do that. It's subtle and fits her overall color scheme. This isn't meant to be any form of Rainbow transformation. In fact I created this character before Rainbow Power was even a thing.

Where I mention Pinkie/Derpy, I'm not suggesting she knows them. She knows OF them, and Derpy probably not at all. This is purely for future interactions in case it ever comes up. Anyway she's a tolerant character, and Pinkie is a well known pony who has helped save the world multiple times. It's impossible to dislike someone like that. She is friendly and likeable. Although Derpy hasn't been met yet either, if Lektra does meet her, having a disability herself she would tolerate her as well. It's simply meant to future proof for eventual encounters. How would I reword this?

The wanderlust only happened because she got tired of living in one city all the time and wanted to learn techniques and magic from other inventors in the world. It was a one time occurrence where she just got tired of staying in one place and isn't typical. She is very much a shut-in, most of the time. How would you like me to reword this so the 2 year trip makes sense to you?

Lektra's electricity is not usually used in her inventions. It's one of her magics as a residual effect of being struck by lightning. It's also a family trait, and all members of the Bolt family have some sort of affinity related to electric elemental, or thunder in the case of her father. Electric Elemental magic is in the rules as allowed. EQE allows 3 magics, and my character has 2. Well within the rules. What exactly is wrong with this?

I think you're not understanding how Sparky and stuff she makes works, as a whole. It's not cybernetic. She takes a piece of scrap metal, shapes it, and then enchants it. Magic makes the invention do what it does, whatever it's purpose. I'm not using magic as a power source here. The flight mode has VERY clear downsides. It's just flight, and it's only about 50% as fast as the average Pegasus. It also does not grant cloud walking or weather manipulation, nor does Sparky grant any sort of Earth Pony strength to her. Alicorns have all three races powers, she does not. It's simply weak flight to be able to get around on her own better than walking. Where you get the idea I was going for Alicorn I'm not sure.

It seems I confused you with her talent as well. Her talent in engineering doesn't work on it's own. It includes magic because the things she makes would otherwise be useless and nonfunctional. A piece of metal enchanted to make heat for it's owner wouldn't be doing anything of the sort if not for the magic making it a heater. A propeller like device similar to what Tank has wouldn't work without the magic counterpart. Her talent is Magitek, not simply magic or metal. The masters she trained under taught her how to enchant metallic objects. It's not out of nowhere. The Lightning magic was granted to her from being struck by lightning activating her family trait. The properties of the storm were a catalyst. Her talent is enchanting metallic objects she shapes based on engineering designs she creates, and one doesn't make sense without the other. It's one talent, because her stuff doesn't work otherwise.

I'm willing to work with you if you're willing to work with me. I'd really like to get her into EQE. Also thanks for saying you like her. I think we can figure this out. Eventually.