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Wow, someone suggested I should request some Youtuber named Silver Quill to review my work. Probably a high compliment in the deeper parts of the fandom, I imagine. XD
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I'd some references of him, though I tend to steer clear of the fandom on Youtube by principle. Their activity there is... Yeah.
The review from my fic:
"Wow...Once again, you just taken me by surprise. Not only did you have an amazing plot twist that makes sense rather than a "happen off screen" moment, but are going to see how Jack handles while his friends are in danger. And I'm really glad that the story is connecting as we go along. Every little detail has been accounted for. Whither your process is to come up with things as you go along or have these prepared before hand, it's still always leaves that feeling of satisfaction yet still wanting more. I remember when I found this it was at the chapter 128, and when I almost got there chapter 129 came out, I read all those chapters in a row, and now thanks to you i'm planning on making one based on this. It's probably going to be the basically the same premise, but with my OC. I had this idea where someone else, a random guy, also gets into the world. (For your story not mine) And that he also has a magic unique to him...or her. (that too is for you to use) However, mine is probably going to be an element (Different Elements, not of harmony and that [BEEP]) of Insanity or something. But back to Jack. So far, this story had always taking me by surprise, and a lot of people says this is "cliche", but I never found it boring and I read the whole thing through twice! Also, make one where he gets into EQG, but days before the movies start. And not having feelings for Twilight until a later chapter. It would be fun to see what he does in that situation instead of being in MLP. I'd image he'd be with Sunset considering what he said in the most recent EQG chapter. But that's for you to decide! Perhaps you can work on it when your finished with this one? Anyways, keep up the great work and- Actually, before I go, I'd like to mention that this is my favorite story as a whole, and my favorite chapter so far is probably this one...or the EQG ones. I mean, I like'd the movies so...What!? You like Michel Bay's Transformers movies! But i'd probably like them too-Wait, this is about you not me! But like I said, This is my favorite story as a whole...It's better than it.*LE GASP* That's right, I said it! But anyways, jokes aside, I feel like the only improvement in your story's is that we always get a situation, but never see him just hang out with someone. It'd be nice to just what he does when he visit's someone. Perhaps a chapter where he goes to everyone, of his friends like Derpy and Lyra (INCLUDING RAINBOW AND PINKIE), and not until the end where Twilight feels left out, because of a misunderstanding of Jack saving best for last? Anyways, thanks for reading this, if you did,and keep writing my favorite story! Take your time, i'm not rushing you. To be honest, i'm surprised this doesn't get any attention on Youtube! Try and get some Brony Reviewer like or Silver Quill to review it! Anyways, thanks for reading this, and, as always, I look forward to hearing from you! (Try and get the reference! And don't worry about the fans or the channels themselfs, they'll make sure you don't get hate. and Silver Quill are amazing people!)"
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