RedLlama

Hello! Me and a few friends of mine are working on a project, It is sort of like an interactive novel. It involves a script so my friend made one. He likes it a lot, I however am not as enthusiastic. So I would like you to read it an give us feedback, and I beg you to be 100% honest, whether you like it or not. Feel free to make suggestions as well. The word document is attached below (It is a bit long) I need this feedback, so if anyone could at least say "good" or "bad" it would be appreciated. Bump, please say something. Please. my little pony (6).docx