Benny

Unfortunately, I can't produce music. I don't have the equipment or the patience to learn how to use something like FLStudio. I, instead used Musescore, so I need two attachments (you also need two so you can read and listen, since there are no audible lyrics in Musescore. Anyway, I wanted to see how people felt about the song, how they react to the individual sections. Background of song: I wrote this song as an inspiration for my newest fanfic idea, where Fluttershy gets captured by Chrysalis and in the end becomes a "changeling queen", but instead feeds off of hatred. Also, the song has a character named Dirge: he's basically the last living changeling at this point in the story. The song is broken into sections 1) Overture: the queen (Chrysalis) is dead/dying. 2) Dirge's lament 3) Fluttershy emerges as the new "queen" 4) Dirge rebels 5) Fluttershy feels her new powers grow wit hatred 6) Fluttershy's imposing goals convince Dirge to stay 7) Closing: Flutteshy ends in a dark tone, signaling her ultimate goal of harming her friends. I accept all types of criticism, but I do like "professional opinions", too. (as in, you know your stuff and can teach me a thing or two about music) Please, like my Fluttershy, have no remorse or pity on me. Give me your undying criticism and anguish on any parts, big or small. I want your opinions! The Last Changeling, Birth of The Anti-Changeling.pdf The Last Changeling, Birth of The Anti-Changeling.wav

So I've started a new fanfiction, and I have a brilliant idea for how I want to develop my characters. So the story goes like this: Queen Chrysalis crashes and barely (as barely as barely gets) survives after "A Canterlot Wedding". She gets back to her castle and sends what few remaining changelings she has to capture Fluttershy and convince her to feed Chrysalis her love. Fluttershy reluctantly agrees. She meets a regular changeling named Dirge, who is a foil so he's more bold and disobedient (but he still loves his queen like everyone else). Throughout the fanfic, Fluttershy slowly loses her compassion and even helped invade Cloudsdale when she saw ponies she didn't like. (maybe the bullies who picked on her) Eventually, Chrysalis sends Fluttershy and Dirge to capture Twilight, so she may have her revenge. (note: Chrysalis never fully recovered, and has been slowly dying) When Twilight is brought to Chrysalis, the queen shows her the queen transformation room, where a large cocoon lies dormant. Chrysalis says this will be her revenge, making Twilight the new queen of the changelings. Fluttershy, however, gets really upset about that and steals into the cocoon herself. She anted to be the new queen, she deserved to be queen. Chrysalis tries to stop her, but dies in the process. Twilight leaves and Dirge cries over his queen. Fluttershy reemerges as an all-powerful version of a changeling: an Anti-Changeling. Her hatred had become her food, instead of love, and she wants to make everyone hate her at all costs. Dirge becomes her submissive slave who does her dirty work. Basically, the only thing I wanted help with is how to go about making Dirge a memorable foil, and also pulling off this foil role reversal at the end? (or actually more like halfway point) What can I do to make Dirge an opposite, but also a partner, to Fluttershy? If you need me to explain more, just ask me. I'm pretty bad at explaining things.

It really depends on if you want to be canon or headcanon. If you want to be canon, I suggest "bouncing" off of one of their famous songs. (Rarity had a nice song in minor called "Life is a Runway") If you want to be headcanon, think about the mood. I had one about changelings, so I changed the key signature and tempo often, to describe the feeling of being able to change. All in all, it depends on mood and, as Thunder Dash said, character. You need to really put yourself in the character's shoes to make it good. I find it the hardest part of songwriting/composing.

My preference for Composing software is Musescore (musescore.org) The software can playback music you wrote as well as play the notes you write on the staff. I've written many songs on it, and I love the rich sounds it produces for piano and voice. (I don't really use any other instruments

do you do pencil or digital? I'm looking for digital.

I don't know if you will even read this, but I'm bored and need to vent this idea. The Elements of Harmony were once in stone spheres, right? In a place where no light could enter. I think they were sealed there. Their original home was in the Everfree, but maybe that tree was their prison; that, and I've yet to see the Everfree in daylight. My theory is that the Elements were too powerful for anypony's good, rather meant for the exact opposite. I think that the Elements were used sparingly, as not to give them any more power than they already had. Celestia used them, and subsequently returned them to their hidden spot. Now to where I found humor in the fact that you think I'm plucking bits and piece out of my plot: Nightmare Moon, the PILOT VILLAIN, was more sane than Celestia ever could be. I just said that. Nightmare Moon wanted to destroy the Elements, and she almost did by cutting off it's power source: the sun. But the Element of Magic is the superior, hence why it can't even lie on an arm like the other 5. It revived the other 5 Elements and basically altered Luna's personality so she could no longer pose a threat. I'm not done yet. This kinda applies to the other villains, but all I have to say is that the Elements were used over and over again to prevent them from getting strong enough to destroy Equestria. This includes the release of Discord. But I want to touch on the fact that Star Swirl was in on the deal. His unfinished spell, which affected the Elements of Harmony, started switching around the 5 weaker Elements. I think that Star swirl wanted to weaken the Magic by moving it to one of the weaker crystals and breaking it. Then the other 5 would fall from being swapped, as well. Rather genius, if you ask me. And the finished version was even more appealing. All 5 Elements attacked the Element of Magic and destroyed her. IF Celestia hadn't intervened, Equestria would have been saved! F*** You Celestia! Final part, The Box of Harmony. That Deus-ex-Machina in a can that wiped Tirek off the face of Equestria. That was the remaining energy of the Elements that they gained from being in the open sunlight. Hasbro locked it, not the canon. So, the truth is either Star Swirl is a genius, or he's the most vile pony ever for having the skill to destroy the Elements of Harmony in one shot.