You used "said" way too much, and I;m trying to change that, but it's hard when I'm not 100% sure what you had in mind. So when I'm done, do re-read it, because there was a bit of word repetition in there that could NOT stay.
Alright, just make sure to watch out for the punctuation and tense especially. I can't do it, as I've gotten very little sleep in the past several days, and cannot focus well.