4HFan

Hi Damien!

 

I like Flash quite a bit, and am very glad that you've chosen to put him up for approval! Before that approval happens though, there are some things that I would like you to address.

 

The first is that his cutie mark story doesn't seem to quite fit him as well as it could. Surviving a lightning strike isn't really a demonstration of not giving up, mostly it just means he was lucky. If, for example, he were to keep going out in the rain because he loves it instead of being scared into staying indoors for every storm because of the lightning, that would be an example of tenacity, and in choosing to keep on with what he loves he could demonstrate his special talent and thereby earn a cutie mark.

 

Second, your character could use a bit of backstory beyond the earning of his cutie mark. Where is he now? What is he doing? Who does he live with? And where is he going, what are his goals and aspirations?

Alright, I think I got it, this should do the trick. And if it doesn't I will be happy to edit it again.

Thank you for taking the time to look over my character, I will be sure to make the changes you requested.