EpicApplejack

The Doll House is simple enough that if the story is good. It will stick in their mind. An example of how this works can be found by simply asking one's opinion on "Cupcakes" . The other two however are poetic and sound nice, but that's not what we are going for here, are we? When people go through the vast list of fanfics, yours will stand out; it will be simple. Nopony will think it will be too taxing to read and then BAM! You've got yourself another view. P.S. I'm not very much into grimdarks, but love a good read. Let me know when this is finished if you don't mind, because I most likely won't find it among what I usually read. ~Duece

The wind was whistling through the various cracks of his lonely shack. Dim lights shown through the suffocating blizzard out the frozen windows. "What is going on this early?" Winter thought to himself as he drifted into consciousness. He had nearly fallen back asleep when he heard the sharp rapping of frantic hooves on his door. shooting straight up in his bed he called for identification as he slipped on the vest he inherited from his father. It wasn't much for warmth, but it was better than nothing. Realizing it was his friend's voice on the other side of the door he opened it. "Have you heard the news?" the azure pony gave no time for an answer, "They've discovered dragon eggs! Now peacekeepers are organizing groups of ponies outside of Sydden's hall to make the journey to Central Fdor!" "Why so early?" Winter asked as he began walking towards Sydden's Hall "Why not!? I mean these are dragons we're talking about, dragons!" The two ponies arrived at the towns hall along with around 100 of the Hold's inhabitants; which is a lot for Sydden considering it was barely more than permafrost hills and caverns. The group was stopped in mid conversation when Sydden himself burst from the hall's doorway. "Citizens of my glorious hold," his voice boomed through the blizzard, "I've called you here on this brisk morning for a very important message to the ponies. Dragon eggs have been discovered, and they are being cared for in The Central Fdor! I have received word from my advisers that we are to send ponies south in order to find the six destined dragon keepers! As you all know, we are short handed here in the north, and anypony that works a necessary industry must stay in order to keep the hold running! The designated are prohibited from leaving their duty! That being said, come dawn, this group of soldiers shall escort those who remain south for evaluation. Now disperse! Decide who shall go! And may the elders protect you on your journey!" The sun rose, and Winter waved goodbye to his friend for the last time. The gargantuan gates opened, and the quest began.

Welcome Ragestar, great to have you with us. I bet Crimson will be a wonderful rider from Halik's Hold.

Welcome to the land of Yv'nerre Alex, we are glad to have you with us. Can't wait to see the OC come up

Yeah... I wonder why, haha. Anyways, heres my OC. http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/winter-chills-r2559 I'm sure that Winter will have a grand time fighting to help save all of Yv'nerre.

Haha, I'm in and I have got dibs on Sydden's hold. The Coldest of the holds. However, I suppose we'll learn that later

I REALLY LIKE HER MANE!!!!! She is most definitely shmexy... lolz thats some serious eye candy that you got yourself there So much detail!!!!

Winter was helpless, he had been witnessing the entire fiasco from the back of the cart since it began. Noon's observations earlier made him proud for her, then the fight escalated. "Why can't I just get BETTER ALREADY?!" the wounded pony thought to himself.

Alright, I just want to begin with for those who are coming in this thread and are all for tulpas thats fine, as long as you don't freak out when I say I for one think they are a bad idea. For the rest of you, I need some advice to give to my friend. She is planning on making a tulpa and just about everything I say about it she shrugs off. Please help, I feel that it would be in her best interest to abandon such a pursuit. Keep in mind that I was initially in love with the idea of Tulpas and nearly made one myself, so I've done many hours of research. Thank you everypony. LaT /)*(\

When the cart stopped, it caused Winter to wake from his nap. He began to sit up and stretched as he heard the conversation behind him. The fact that the newcomers looked like con artists posing as doctors startled him, so the injured stallion ducked down as best as he could in the cart, hoping they wouldn't see him as a potential patient. "I don't think I want any of these guys working on me" Winter whispered to any of his friends that were close enough to the cart to hear him.

OOC: Alright start walking people, my OC is sleeping and I need to wait at least half an hour so this thing is logical. I thought we could all post more during the weekend! we are all waiting to get to the good stuff here. Anyways, I'm through ranting, so lets get to RP-ing!

"Understood," Winter replied to Appledoom's advice. "Thanks, I'll keep that in mind" He said to Aurea as he received the canteen of water. "I hope Appledoom doesn't get in trouble for any of that cider." Winter thought while reflecting on his actions. The white stallion squirmed a little in the makeshift splint and figured Aurea was to be the medic. After pondering the subject for a few moments, he decided he had better take it easy if he were to get better soon. On that note, he laid back and fell asleep.

"Deal," Winter replied to Noon's advice, hugging her tightly. @, Upon hearing Appledoom's request, The bruised stallion decided that his pride couldn't get in the way of the party's progress, and after no small amount of hesitation, Winter climbed into the cart. "I hope you know I've never been fond of hitchhikers..."

@, "Ooof!" Winter grunted as Noon embraced him, and the pain was much less present either do to the cider or Noon's love. The stallion decided it was the latter. "Yes I'm awake, and its great to see you again too, " A look of concern crossed Winter's face, "You're fine right? The tornado left you unscathed? I don't know if I could bear seeing you hurt."

@, "Thanks Appledoom," Winter exclaimed as he prepared to drink some of the hard elixir. He's never really had much alcohol before but under the circumstances it sounded pretty good. As he swallowed decent amount, the effect hit him instantly. His aches dulled and his nausea slipped into a light dizziness that almost made him feel like laughing. Before he knew it, the canteen was half empty. "Still you seem to amaze me bro, you cook and you brew! once again, hehehe, I need the recipe." (I'm so excited, and I just can't hide it, I'm about to lose control and I think I like it!)

(OOC: Oh boy, I can't wait for what's in store. Mwahahaha... and by the way, Kudos guys, we have a great RP going here. @, The White stallion eased into consciousness and was surprised to see Noon nearby, last thing he remembered was walking back with Chetnik, he was oblivious to anything that happened during his seizure. Winter was about to ask his partner what happened, but was interrupted by Chet's set of rules, "Sounds good to me!" The newly rested pony called out, "but one question, who will be the medic pony?" (Keep in mind, Winter was unconscious for Aurea's multiple diagnosis.) @, Winter stood again, nauseas but sure-footed, and limped over to Appledoom. "Hey, ahem, do you mind if I take swig? A little homemade painkiller would hit the spot right about now."

"agh, how much farther?" Winter asked Chetnik, but the question was soon enough answered because the band of ponies appeared as they trudged over a small hill. "This (gasp) should be (gasp) close enouuuuuu..." Winter collapsed mid-stride. His eyes rolled back into his head, foam appeared at his lips, and the entire moment became a blur for him as he began to seize.

"Chet? Aurea? Boy am I glad to see you two..." Winter grimmaced through excruciating pain. Then suddenly his eyes widened, "IS NOON ALRIGHT? FOR THE LOVE OF LUNA, PLEASE TELL ME SHE'S SAFE!" As the pegasi nodded, a wave of relief flushed through the beaten pony, and with the strength he gained from the wonderful news Winter decided on Chet's idea. "I can make it," Winter smirked confidently, "There's no good reason for us to await for the others here. Now lets get a move on..." Winter proceeded to limp in the direction the pegasi came from.

(OOC: I came back. Told you when I would too...) It was late afternoon and the light in the sky was dimming. Winter lied seemingly lifeless on the ground. When suddenly his body tensed and he awoke with a shriek, "NOON!!!!!" He stood up and frantically looked in all directions for his lover as the shock hit him. Though immediately following his fright, Winter fell to the dirt again, writhing in pain. He had been badly beaten, two ribs broken, his back left leg was crushed, bruises from head to hoof, and whiplash put the worst kink in his neck he's ever had. Winter again rose to his hooves, this time much more slowly. There wasn't anypony in sight. "Celestia give me strength," He whispered, as the suffering pony stumbled forward and fell once more. The filthy pony screamed at the top of his lungs out of anger and pain alike. As rage filled him, he rose again, "I will not die out here..." Winter grumbled through grit teeth. lifting his injured hoof from the ground, Winter limped toward the setting sun, determined to find his friends again.