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  1. Can anyone help me with my oc's backstory? And maybe with improving his design? He's a teenage griffon named Granite who's hobbies include carving stone statues and reading comic books. His birthday is on the 12th of February and he currently resides in Griffonstone with his parents Gerard and Gia and older sister Gemma. Granite's usually very reserved and prefers to keep his emotions to himself most of the time, which sometimes may give others the impression of being cold, and in some cases a little mean. But despite that distant exterior Granite deeply cares about his friends and family and shows it in his own distinctive way, by often going out of his way to help them in any way he can. He's also a free spirit who values his independence and won't let anything restrict him. In adittion to that, Granite can also be rather rebellious and stubborn. But aside from his negative traits, Granite respects the oppinions of others (even if they're wrong) and cares about the well-being of others. Likes: Comic books, sci-fi and fantasy novels (yeah, he's kind of a geek), stones, gems and most animals. Dislikes: Arrogancy, goats (long story...), getting up early and sunglasses.
  2. I'm having art auditions for my audio drama "Shadows of the Sun" If you or anyone else you know wants to audition Send in 2 pieces of your art with backgrounds to Skyartaudiodrama@gmail.com Name the file Art audition. If you pass you will need a Skype or Hangouts where ill keep in touch :). PS. Your art don't have to be perfect or the best. Audio Drama Info Genre - Fantasy/Romance (its a love story) Plot - Long ago before Luna and Celestia ruled, Equestria was ruled by a beautiful Empress. Her name was Empress Aaleahya. The ponies believed her to be the creator of the sun and universe. She was bestowed many gifts. The necklace she wore around her neck gave her the power of gods. She had many enemies that would try to take this power. These enemies lived in the border lands where they are ruled by a darker power, a queen named Elphina... When a unexpected pony tries to take the necklace will he follow through, or have a change of heart
  3. I don't know how to shade soooo,is this alright? ^^;;; maybe give me some advice on where I should shade there? >~<
  4. (Please note the main plot started off as a joke) Ok, so I made an OC called Mary Sue as part of a joke, A few months later I tried to put here in an Anti-magic dystrophy. I let that boil then desided to bring it back a little more, and this is what I got. A group of 4 ponies, known amongst them selves as Avatars, Are the next age and power change in equestrian history. These stories follow them in day to day life as they slowly accept they're Destiny of being the new gods of the new world, while waiting for this one to end. I have a few stories for this kinda mapped out I have listed them below, and am open to ideas(No, I am not going to add ylur OC to try to out edge you) The Avatar and The Artist: While out for coffee, Mary, the Avatar of Harmony, attracts the eye of an earth pony artist, and must hide her secret from them. The Twins and the Dress: Lynnet, The Avatar of Darkness and her brother Sol, the avatar of light, get in an argument about who looks better in a dress. The Tinker and the Demon: Gizmo, The Avatar of Entropy, Trys to ask his childhood friend out for a date, His inner Demons won't let him.
  5. I have decided to dip my toe into the world of fan fiction for the first time, and although this is far from finished (barely started) I would like to hear any feedback from anyone about this introductory chapter. Any critique at all would be welcome, is it too slow? Does it sound like something you'd want to read more of? Does the opening explain enough about the character or should I flesh him out a bit more? I know I haven't really touched on his appearance at this point, but do you feel that detracts from the story? Chapter 1 Vault Fifty Five Ardent Bastion was shaken back to reality by a heavy knock at the door, he sighed and placed the book he was reading on the desk. He had reached the climax of the story and he had hoped to have an hour with no interruptions so he could finish it, but it seemed that was not to be the case. "Come in." He said, reluctantly. The stout oak door creaked open, the aperture filled by the bulky form of Stalwart Shield, the Sub-Commander of the Royal Guard. "Commander Stalwart, good to see you." Ardent welcomed him with all the civility he could muster. "How is life on the surface?" "Got another one for you." Stalwart replied, straight to business as ever. He reached into the satchel he was carrying and removed a small object, placing it on the desk in front of Ardent. It was a small stone figurine, only a little bigger than a teacup. It depicted what appeared to be a demon or some other fantastical creature. Other than its nightmarish appearance it seemed otherwise unremarkable. "Has it been classified?" Ardent asked. "No, we weren't able to find out anything about it during the seizure, but the context we found it in was enough to cause me some concern, unfortunately the Augor is out of town and I don't want this thing lying around in the barrack stores until she gets back, "Come on Stalwart, you know as well as I do that scroll four hundred and eighty two states categorically that no artefact can be brought into Vault Fifty Five until it has been classified, I need to know how it might interact with the others before I can decide where to put it." "Just do what you have to do and make it quick, you know this place gives me the creeps." Ardent studied Stalwart for a moment, as a Sub-Commander of the guard he was one of the few ponies that was permitted to know of the existence of Vault Fifty Five, deep within the catacombs beneath the royal palace. He was a truly imposing figure, heavily muscled and a good couple of hooves taller at the shoulder than any other member of the guard, but the slightly pained expression on his face belied a fear that even this colossus among ponies was not immune to. Ardent knew why, he knew that Stalwart could hear them. Even here, at the end of the long corridor that led to the massive obsidian door to Vault Fifty Five, dark things whispered promises of riches untold and powers beyond the wildest dreams of the pony that should free them from their confinement. Whispers to which Ardent Bastion was deaf, the result of a flaw that had afflicted him since he was a colt, a flaw which made him uniquely suitable for his employment as the custodian of this cursed place. "I'll figure something out." He relented, "Just ensure the Augor is informed as soon as she returns." "I'll tell her personally." Stalwart replied gruffly, then quickly about turned and left the vestibule, slamming the door with rather more force than Ardent felt was entirely necessary. He couldn't blame him for his rush to leave, the few ponies that were allowed down here didn't like to spend any more time than they had to. Vault Fifty Five did not appear on any map of the palace and its catacombs, and was not listed in any registry. It was a containment facility, deep within the mountain, which was used to house magical artefacts that were deemed too dangerous to be allowed to remain in circulation, artefacts that nevertheless should not, or could not, be disposed of more permanently. Many of these artefacts had minds of their own, well... not minds perhaps, but a will, a sense of purpose, a desire to be used. They didn't like being imprisoned here in the vault, and they were quite vocal about the fact, offering bargains to any who would listen to free them. Ponies that had spend too much time here had been driven insane by the constant whispered appeals, and some had even succumbed to the will of the strong magics held here. Ardent felt a slight sadness that he himself could not hear them, back when he was a colt he had got lost while wandering in the Everfree Forest, he had stumbled into a patch of Poison Joke, a peculiar plant that bestowed a unique curse on any pony that touched it. In Ardent's case his curse had been, for want of a better term, a reversal of his magical ability. He had been reasonably adept at spellcasting, but after his exposure he had lost his ability to cast spells, and any magic he came into contact with was grounded and dissipated through his horn much like lightening is earthed through a lightening conductor. He was left with nothing more than a slight ability to magically manipulate objects, as long it wasn't anything heavy, however it took considerable exertion on his part to do so for any length of time. There was a readily available cure for Poison Joke of course, and Ardent had been bathed several times in this remedy, but due to the nature of the joke the weed had chosen to play on him, the magical concoction had not worked, its healing magic also being dissipated into the aether. This curse had had also given him a blessing, from a certain point of view. He was by no means immune to all magic, but he was very resistant to it, and during his training to join the Royal Guard this had not gone unnoticed, and upon his graduation he had been assigned to Vault Fifty Five. This place was inherently hazardous, awash with barely controlled magics, containment breaches were common and had led to many accidents in addition to the emotional and mental stresses that the previous custodians had been subjected to. He picked up the figure and walked down the dimly lit corridor, stopping only to insert his key into the convoluted mechanism that opened the huge vault door, he turned the key and the huge obsidian slab slid up into an unseen recess in the roof. The vault consisted of a central corridor with staggered openings to either side, each of which were interspersed with alcoves in which the various artefacts were stored behind magical null fields. There was an empty side corridor towards the end of the vault, near the laboratory where objects could be examined without having to remove them from the vault. Ardent kept this corridor as empty as possible for precisely this purpose, the artefact should be safe there until such time as the palace Augor was able to examine the item and attempt to divine what kind of hazard it may present. He walked down the corridor, his hoofsteps echoing against the blank stone walls, the torches flickering in their sconces as he passed casting shadows that danced around on all sides. On reaching the selected location, he touched his horn to the pale blue ripple of the null field and felt the curious sensation as the field dispersed around him. He placed the figure on the pedestal and took a step back, the field reasserted itself like water pooling on a transparent surface. He decided to check the laboratory before leaving, this room was very different to rest of the vault, the whitewashed walls reflected the bright lighting, all the way around the room there were workbenches covered in instruments and apparatus, many of which Ardent could only guess at the function of. When in use this room would be heavily shielded, even more so that the great vault door, an attempt to muffle the voices so that the Augor could work not in total peace, but at least a slightly less uncomfortable environment. However, the room wasn't used very often, the Augor preferred to take the objects to her own laboratory in the basement of the palace when possible, she was extremely resilient, but even she had her limits to much exposure to the vault she could handle. Satisfied that everything was in order, Ardent left the vault and returned to the vestibule, sitting down on his chair and picking up the book again, letting out an audible snort as he realised he had forgotten to place his bookmark when he had been interrupted. As he hoofed through the pages his mind wandered slightly, he hoped that Sapphire Rose would examine the object in the vault's lab on her return. He didn't get much company down here, and her presence was infinitely more pleasant than that of Stalwart Shield. He found the page he had lost, and settling himself further into the cushions he offered a silent prayer to almighty Luna for an hour of peace.
  6. I am really unsure about all the topics I could have put this under but I hope I got it right! Anyway, here is a little something I drew by following a template that I found. Here is the template if anyone wanted to try it out!
  7. This is an art showcase for my visual canon character art. Please offer critique! Note: please do not post any art that you have created, as this is a personal thread for my art. However, enjoy the thread and grade my art! First piece:
  8. Tell me what you think! By the way, I did draw this, so I can insult it. So can everyone else.
  9. My new drawing of Twilight Sparkle! I've posted the sketch and the final outcome! If you'd like, please give me advice on how to improve this drawing.
  10. Hello! So I adopted a new oc and for once having trouble picking a name for her, I wish it was easier! Anyway I don't mind two worded names but it we could keep it a one worded name that would be great lol !
  11. I've struggled to find a good name for my OC and is the only thing that's needed to complete it. I need someone who could suggest me names and I should share you about my OC. A Big, Gentle and Quiet Male Hippogriff pony who likes to eat sunflower seeds (...like an actual bird), he likes ponies to accompany him and make them happy while is scared to say just about every time and is the reason of his Quiet attitude (He's also not good at speaking and will only speak if necessary) and being alone. He is grey coated with blue/cyan mane and tail, bright blue eyes. He has a box with big wings on it and streaks of air as a cutie mark, he had a gift of Strength and Endurance which when he finally realized that at still when he was a colt; he started lifting something heavy to him and flew in circles over and over and finally the cutie mark appeared. He works as a Heavy Lift, Long Distance Express Delivery pony Base Image of my OC
  12. Here's an OC I adopted back in July. I hope you like her. Meet Drizzle Drop! I haven't figured out a Cutie Mark for her yet, if she'll have one. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- AGE: 18 GENDER: ♀ SEXUALITY: Straight SPECIES: Pegasus RESIDENCE: Ponyville OCCUPATION: Cook at Hayburger RELATIONSHIP STATUS: In relationship ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Drizzle Drop was born on a dark, stormy night while her mother was in the hospital for a broken leg and wing. Drizzle is a pegasus pony who dreams of being an archaeologist and an explorer, like Daring Do, as she's a fan of the books. She currently works at Hayburger and saving up so she can go to an archaeology school in the future. Drizzle also has a boyfriend in Cloudsdale who also has interests in archaeology and ancient history. Once your first meet Drizzle, she's a bit of a quiet mare, but you'll see that she's full of energy and passion once you get to know her. Her boyfriend knows this all too well. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ✔LIKES✔ Rainy weather, especially if it's raining hard and thundering Archaeology & ancient history Hayburger food (always gets lunch there on the days she doesn't work) Video games ✘DISLIKES✘ Those who don't take one's feeling and opinions into consideration Being bored The fact that video games are expensive (Who doesn't relate tot his?) Sleeping without her winged wolf spider plushie, Sglider ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- So, how do you like Drizzle?
  13. I'd like to write a real tear-jerker scene in my fanfiction Starswirl's Return, how can I go about pulling this off successfully?
  14. Hello Everypony! I normally don't do this sort of thing but I recently finished writing a Fallout Equestria Fanfiction that explains the fate of Gilda after her legendary showdown with Rainbow Dash. It has had a good response but not a lot in the way of constructive critisism. Not only that I was hoping to get some feedback on whether I should expand this story into a full fiction instead of just a one shot story. Anyone who's interested I'll leave a link down below. Thanks everypony! https://www.fimfiction.net/story/384686/fallout-equestria-audio-logs-of-gilda
  15. So, this idea needs a lot of work and any plot holes or anything like that are because this is only starting to form. So, I was thinking, I really want the show to end with a big, game-changing finale in a similar vein to shows like Gravity Falls and Avatar: The Last Airbender, so me and my 8-year old sister have been discussing what the last ever MLP episode would be if it were up to us. It would be a three-parter, because there really is a lot to our idea. It would take too long to explain the plot, so I'm gonna go over each featured character and explain their arc. However, I will say the basic plot is that it is revealed that Celestia and Luna actually have a brother (let's call him TBA because we don't have a name tbh), who was meant to return from his banishment at the same time as Nightmare Moon (there's a twist - it's revealed that Luna turned evil because of TBA's power to do so and NOT because of jealousy). It has been four years at the time of this finale since Luna returned, so everyone is on red alert. Well, of course he does so (he's an allicorn and harbors extremely powerful magic and manipulation powers) and it's up to all these characters to stop him. Twilight Sparkle: - Helps to defeat TBA. Her and the rest of the Mane Six attempt to use the Elements of Harmony but they are useless against him At the end of Part 3, she becomes the new Princess of the Moon, taking Luna's place (read on and it'll make sense). Applejack: - It is revealed that there is an afterlife in the MLP universe and in that scene, she gets to finally see Pear Butter and Bright McIntosh again. Rainbow Dash: - Has been giving Scootaloo flying lessons for several months and with the help of Tirek (more of that later), she performs a sonic rainboom with her at one point. Fluttershy: - When TBA announces his plans to enslave other dimensions as well as Equestria (there may be an Equestria Girls link!!), Fluttershy immediately heads to Discord's and a romance between the pair is developed across the parts. Discord helps defeat TBA. Pinkie Pie: Don't know really. Rarity: She is forced to reject Spike when he finally confesses to her, but they remain friends. The CMC: We finally see them fight alongside The Mane Six They are the ones who fetch the Elements and there is a possible Timberwolf fight scene in the Everfree Forest when they do so. Princess Celestia: Is killed by TBA. Now, this sounds CRAZY, but hear me out: we see both Luna (who is also killed) and Celestia in the afterlife sequence, so they aren't completely gone. Princess Cadance: Becomes the new Princess of the Sun. Flurry Heart: All I'm gonna say is she is the key to defeating TBA. Tirek: Queen Chrysalis helps him break out of prison and they go to exact revenge on both Starlight Glimmer and the Mane Six; however, after Chrysalis is enslaved by TBA, he decides to join forces with the Mane Six. His power is what enables Cadance and Twilight to take Luna and Celestia's places, and enable Scootaloo to finally be equal to Rainbow Dash in flying!! Starlight Glimmer: Becomes the new Princess of Friendship!!! OTHER NOTES: Starswirl the Bearded is also the KEY to defeating TBA. I don't know how yet but there has to be something about him in there. G1 and G2 characters like the Seaponies Wavedancer and Seawinkle will make appearances.
  16. Name: Elias Benmansour Nature: chaotic neutral age: (human equivalent) 35 Species: nonpony (snow leopard from abyssinia) Height: 5'2" Weight: 210 lbs Accent: South African Apparel: black pants, black tank top, heavy brown overcoat. His magical abilities are naturally moderate so he relies on numerous high level enchantments and mystical objects in order to perform more advanced techniques. He specializes in magical circles, runes, wards, exorcisms, and elemental magic. He doesn’t use a lot of magic unless he has to as he knows the consequences of overextension. Preferring to con, bluff, and bulls**t his way out of situations of which he is not in control. His raw power is boosted and focused through numerous tattoos under his fur (achieved by shaving down to the bare skin and letting it grow back over naturally). As well as rings, bracelets, and other jewelry. Personality: He’s cynical, snarky and pragmatic. A reluctant anti-hero who has little patience for false hopes and rampant idealism. A silver tonged trickster, he is not above using or sacrificing others for the greater good (also occasionally for his own selfish motives, justifying this by weighing his own value in the fight against evil over others). He will do anything and trick anyone in order to keep mystical balance or save his own hide. In his eyes, the ends definitely justify the means. His hard and seemingly uncaring exterior is a front for his own deep insecurity and heavy guilt stemming from his past deeds. These past actions currently motivate him to try to atone for what he believes are stains on his soul. This motivation frequently leaves him prone to reckless behavior that all too often results in him gambling with his own life and most of the time the lives of others as well (Like transferring a demonic pestilence onto an entire city in a magical game of chicken). Or bouts of overprotective borderline mania whenever one of his few friends is in danger. Willing to go so far as to make disadvantaging pacts and deals with less than savory beings in order to keep them safe. His personality and behavior often has a divisive effect on others. The abundance of charisma and persuasiveness allows him to make friends easily. However those who spend any extended length of time with him tend to either despise him completely, or become his friends but have a good handful of things that they will never trust him with EVER. Ironically with many of his associates it’s a mixture of both. He never seems to have a simple relationship with anyone as it inevitably turns into something more layered and complex. Backstory: Elias was born in Abyssinia to a poor family. His father was a librarian and owner of a small book store in order to support the cubs. His mother left after his younger brother was born due to their father’s meager earnings and tendency to absorb himself in literature at the expense of his family. When he was 10 and his brother, Flint was 9 his father came into possession of a book on magic theory. Elias was instantly intrigued, soon he studied every book he and his brother could get their paws on (both by legal and illegal means) about all aspects of magic, both light and dark. To try and help their financial situation the brothers turned to using magic on the streets. Either as performers, or con men. They made friends with another street hustler, an ocelot named Julia. She ran away from home at a young age and had since been picked up as a beggar/street rat by a ruthless puma called Marco. Elias, instantly smitten, spent his days teaching her magic and trying to get her out of Marco’s care. One day when Elias was 17 and Flint was 16, they were making their usual nightly routine on the unsuspecting drunkards of a pub on Julia's beat when they heard a loud crash and screaming coming from an abandoned building. They ran into the house to investigate and what they saw was horrifying. Julia, fed up with Marco's treatment and abuse of her, had accidentally summoned a demonic entity while trying to place a curse on him. Elias and his brother, hatched a plan. He summoned his own, stronger demon in order to defeat Julia's. But in the resulting battle Julia was killed. Because she was killed by the entity Elias had summoned his soul was damned to tartarus for murder. However, in an effort to appease the demon, Flint stepped up and offered the monster a deal. He would give up his own soul and be sent to tartarus in exchange for Elias' life. The monster agreed and a deal was struck. Despite Elias vehemently protesting and refusing to accept the agreement. He watched as his only brother was dragged into an eternity of torment for a mistake he had made. Since that day Elias has poured himself into magic and dedicated his life to exorcising demons. To hopefully, one day be able to bring his brother back from tartarus. (Not my art I take no credit.)
  17. Name: Elias Benmansour Nature: chaotic neutral gender: male age: (human equivalent) 35 Species: nonpony (snow leopard from abyssinia) Height: 5'2" Weight: 210 lbs Accent: South African/British Apparel: black pants, black tank top, heavy brown overcoat. His magical abilities are naturally moderate so he relies on numerous high level enchantments and mystical objects in order to perform more advanced techniques. He specializes in magical circles, runes, wards, exorcisms, and elemental magic. He doesn’t use a lot of magic unless he has to as he knows the consequences of overextension. Preferring to con, bluff, and bulls**t his way out of situations of which he is not in control. His raw power is boosted and focused through numerous tattoos under his fur. As well as rings, bracelets, and other jewelry. Personality: He’s cynical, snarky and pragmatic. A reluctant anti-hero who has little patience for false hopes and rampant idealism. A silver tonged trickster, he is not above using or sacrificing others for the greater good (also occasionally for his own selfish motives, justifying this by weighing his own value in the fight against evil over others). He will do anything and trick anyone in order to keep mystical balance or save his own hide. In his eyes, the ends definitely justify the means. His hard and seemingly uncaring exterior is a front for his own deep insecurity and heavy guilt stemming from his past deeds. These past actions currently motivate him to try to atone for what he believes are stains on his soul. This motivation frequently leaves him prone to reckless behavior that all too often results in him gambling with his own life and most of the time the lives of others as well (Like transferring a demonic pestilence onto an entire city in a magical game of chicken). However, he will never intentionally risk the lives of his few family or friends. Willing to go so far as to make pacts and deals with less than savory beings in order to keep his friends safe. His personality and behavior often has a divisive effect on others. The abundance of charisma and persuasiveness allows him to make friends easily. However those who spend any extended length of time with him tend to either be extremely loyal and trusting to him or they despise him completely. Ironically with many of his associates it’s a mixture of both. He never seems to have a simple relationship with anyone as it inevitably turns into something more layered and complex. still thinking of a backstory right now and would appreciate it if anyone gave me suggestions. Aything I should change, elaborate on, add? (note, the image is NOT my art. I take no credit and if any of you know who drew it I would appreciate knowing so I can give a citation.)
  18. Hi, there. I just want to tell you about my OC Peppermint Freshener. She's a recolor of Twilight Sparkle (the princess, not Sci-Twi). Peppermint owns three motorhomes, all which she names Big Mint: Big Mint, Big Mint ll, and Big Mint lll. This is her. Her motorhomes Big Mint as of 2017 after Peppermint became a lesbian. Big Mint is a 2003 New Flyer D40LF for Manehattan Transit. The bus got retired in 2012 and left for rust at a bus graveyard in Fillydelphia. This is where Peppermint met Big Mint for the first time in 2013. After buying the New Flyer, Peppermint's family had it restored, upgraded into a C40LF, and converted into an RV in 2014. 4 years later, Peppermint became part of the LGBT community. Less than a day after joining the community, Big Mint had a makeover (see above), which we see now. Big Mint ll is a 2016 Novabus LFS built in March 2016. Originally going to be part of Translink Vanhoover's fleet, it was rejected by the transit authority. The LFS then got sent to a bus graveyard too, in Detrot, where it was awaiting purchase by another transit authority. Fortunately, Peppermint's father, who is a motorhome tycoon, made a deal with the graveyard and Volvo (the parent company of Novabus), resulting in the bus being purchased by the Freshener family. It was stored until Christmas, when it was converted into an RV, and given to Peppermint in May 2017, where the LFS is currently right now. Big Mint lll is a 2015 Scania (often mistaken by Peppermint as a Mercedes Benz because of its engine) Comil Doppio imported from Brazil. Built by Scania in Europe, the Doppio was shipped to the Sao Paulo Transit in Sao Paulo, Brazil. It only ran for a year until the company went bankrupt. After that, it was shipped to a bus graveyard in Key West, Florida in August 2016. Luckily, Peppermint's rich parents, who were on vacation in the Key Islands, came across the Doppio one month later in September. The bus was purchased as a gift for Peppermint's 20th birthday. It was converted into an RV, and stored until the day before the young Freshener's birthday. Unfortunately, the flatbed truck it was on broke down, and it was days before the truck was repaired and continued its journey to Canterlot, where it is now with Peppermint as a belated birthday gift. Peppermint becomes a lesbian One faithful night, during a garden opening in Canterlot, Peppermint met a girl who was a punk and a lesbian too. Peppermint decides to learn more about the girl's lifestyle, and that's when she joined the LGBT. Soon, Peppermint got her nerves to get her own girlfriend, whose name was Cobra Serpentess. Cobra Serpentess, Peppermint's new girlfriend. Cobra after being consumed by Equestrian magic after stealing the geodes from the Mane 7 in 2019. That's all, folks. What do you think of Peppermint?
  19. I'm in the process of designing a dragon OC for MLP roleplay purposes. I have a general idea of what I want to do but hearing the thoughts of others always helps me get creative. So here's what I have so far, if you have thoughts or ideas to help me add to it then I would appreciate it Name: Knasher ( Knash ) Species: Dragon Age: 23 Still working on a color scheme but as of now I am interested in a metallic scheme or something involving cool colors along with the concept of blue, black, or purple flames for him to breathe. Size is just above the height of Celestia on all fours but about 25% longer and bigger in mass. On two legs he's about twice the height of Celestia. As of now he's sort of a neutral-good character. He's not evil but he is pretty indifferent to anything that doesn't directly impact him negatively. He's always been pretty neutral to most anything which made his fellow dragons ostracize him for his serene behavior, and eventually they migrated without alerting him and he never bothered to try catching up. He doesnt particularly care about the opinions others have of him nor does he take great interest in their lives unless he's gotten to know them. Any day another dragon would spend fighting or terrorizing another, he would spend napping or lava bathing. That's not to say he's completely undragon-like. He likes to gossip and occasionally spreads a rumor that's sure to start some drama for him to sit back and watch. Seeing others pegged against each other amuses him and he doesn't care if they find out about his deception because of his size and abilities as a dragon. That said, his main object of entertainment is ponies since they stay stationary and he can observe them year round without them pushing him to be more ferocious as his kind would. He only offers assistance if it somehow benefits him or someone he at least considers an acquaintance begs enough. ( He has a weakness for gems and jewels ) If he's comfortable enough around someone or if he has the energy, he can be rather cocky and teasing. More of a suave, often likeable, douche personality. He's often mock flirtatious. That's about all I have for him so far. If anyone has any ideas for background or some suggestions for design and character it would be a big help. This is a drawing of what he looks like as of now.
  20. This is the biggest sketch I've done and is one of the rare times I actually colour things in. I would appreciate critique for this drawing. What I can do better and what not
  21. So, Im remaking all of my OCs. My ponysona is problably the most drastic one, from having a dark blue coat and blonde mane to a pastel orange-ish coat and a cinnamon mane. Yeah, it looks really plain, for now. But ignore his design, focus on his colors. Are they too basic? Too plain? Just give me your opinions on his colors, and if you can, good color palletes.
  22. This pony is, well.... just an idea currently, I need to figure out a colour scheme, a name, Gosh. I even need her personality sorted! As far as I know she's a pianist, and that'll show in her mane style - and hopefully - her colours. Name wise I was thinking something like: D Minor - Tappy Keys - F sharp - Perky Notes - etc. Unicorn, or earth pony, that is the question - I'm still unsure about her species... yet, personally I'd like her to {maybe} be some sort of 'Little or no' magic unicorn. Which means she's pretty much either has useless, or weak magic. Colour scheme - Maaaaaybe no colour?! I'd like to think a Grey-Black-White pony suits a pianist quite well. I'd Definitely like her to have pink eyes, though. Bah! What am I thinking! I'll let y'all decide what I do with 'er! {Also, a friend of mine says she looks masculine.... does she? } Sorry for the terrible photo quality, I can't be bothered to fineline so you'll have to deal with this image for now.
  23. This was hard, but I made a lot of improvements to my OC, Neon Tetherlight, and I'm pretty proud of 'em, BUT, I have no idea for a cutie mark. I mean, I do have some ideas but... I'll need help. I'm just not that good at getting that 'perfect design' I was thinking of... I would be grateful if you could gather up some ideas for a cutie mark. Anything would be fine. I'll also give a small description about him- He is an ambiverted unicorn that works for a prestigious software and hardware company called ManeFrame. (Pun intended, and you could also help me with that. :P) His dream is to spread the knowledge of technology to each and every corner of Equestria. He mainly works in the secret wing of his company that is developing a machine that uses magic to power an A.I called . And, there has been some amount of progress, the only problem is that the magic that they are currently using isn't strong enough to keep the A.I conscious for long. Enough about his job. Let's get into his head. Neo is a Stallion of few words, and only speaks when beneficiary, but when he is around his friends, he is like a high school Filly, talking about other pony's secrets that he has no business knowing. He likes being around his friends, but doesn't make it obvious. His relationship with his sister though, is a whole other story. He and she used to get along well, but their different views on the world separated them and made them go their own ways, But that doesn't mean he doesn't like spending some sibling time together. He also has a tendency to get into fighs even if they could be easily avoided. No one knows how he does that though.. Now fears... He is scared of the ocean. Like the deep blue part of it, and he's afraid that the waves will drag him into it. (Even though it's not exactly possible with him.) He is vulnerable to jump scares and anything that looks a bit too scary. He has stage freight but if he's performing something in front of his friends, he's fine with it. And now for talents! Uhh... He is exceptionally good at programming and can work with any kind of basic motor. He is pretty good at gaming and had won in a lot of competitions as a colt. He is kinda like a 'Jack of all spades' with sports. Not excellent in anything, or too bad at something. And cooking is out of his league keep that in mind. (*cough*) I will add a bit more of his bio after I've gotten an idea of his cutie mark. Remember, whatever I've written here is rough and I will make improvements. And thanks in advance! Image014.tif
  24. So, I was hoping I could get some feedback on an OC I have. I might or might not write a story for him, but I really wanna discuss and expand on him and his world. As well as the interactions he could have with the other characters and how he perceives their world. If anyone would be willing to hear me out on him, I'd really appreciate it.