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  1. So I'd like a little help with Chima here and the head canons surrounding her, just to make sure I tied up any loose ends you know? Specific questions at the bottom of the post. My current favorite is my ponysona/self insert to my version of the canon. Think copying a google doc and adding your own stuff to it. She's more of a fun exercise with my creative abilities and pushing the limits of the lore we're given then anything else. Name: Chima Species: Changeling (Heir) Gender: Female Age: A thousand moons give or take (as an egg)/ barely a year Cuite Mark: Seed of Harmony Some of the species and their effects on her: (these are found when she meets the Young 6 who work these out by appearance alone. It can be assumed there are traits from other creatures, but these are the most notable) Dragon: The horns on her wings and by her ears as well as her stomach plating and tail. She also has the two small horns by her main one and the dragon magic in them makes her spells natural firey. She is immune to fire in the sense that it will not burn her. That said she still feels discomfort (sweating, dizziness, etc.) and famable parts of her will catch on fire, it just tends to go out quickly and won't burn anything away. Griffon: Her front legs are normal horse legs until you get to her plaws. They're like normal cat paws, if the dew claw was a talon. She can pick things up, but any thing requiring fine motor skills is a no go. Her wings are also longer and sharper like a griffon's. Hippogriff: All those long feathers on her wings, back legs, sides of her face and tail. She has difficultly flying because of them, and she mostly just uses her wings to glide and as a boost. Kirin: Kirin horn, tail hair and ears (with feathers at the tips). She can transform into a Nirik and when she does her feathers take on a more blue tone and her hair/fur takes on a more pink one. Pony: Her horn is curved back and thin like an oriental pony (Mistmane's people) and her mane is like a normal pony's. She also has crystal pony traits only show when she is in in the Crystal Empire. When in the borders of the empire she assumes a crystal from no matter what she shifts into Changeling: Despite her looks and abilities, she is a changeling, and has all the abilities of one. She can shape-shift, and feeds on love. She has a thin frame like most changelings, but her feathers and fur make her seem bulkier. Her irises and pupils are typical to a changeling, but much like with Chrysalis, they don't take up the whole eye. Nonspecific Traits: (the young 6 weren't sure where they came from) Her coat: When the young 6 find her they at first conclude she doesn't have any yak traits but Yona objects. She mentions that while Chima's coat is short like a pony's, it's much softer and thicker than all of their's except hers. Cloud Walking: They do quick tests to try and find some less obvious traits and find that she can walk on clouds. Not really a surprise given that most winged creatures are shown being able to do this, they just aren't sure which creature it's from. Personality/FunFacts: -She's shy at first but very eager to learn about everything she can. When shes meets new ponies she's very nervous about the impression she makes but is happy and carefree around the Young 6. -She fears becoming like Chrysalis and doesn't forgive what she did but she still feels love for her mother. She considers both the Spirit and Chrysalis to be her mothers. -Quite clumsy and very apologetic about it. Her tail and wings knock over a lot and when they do she'll curl up into a little ball and hide. -She loves to swim but is very slow and has to set her self on fire to dry in a timely manner. -Because of her thick coat and feathers she prefers the cold even if she can withstand high heat. -Her writing is attrocious. She can't quite get the hang of mouth writing and her tendency to set anything she uses magic on alight makes levitation a no go. She usually just uses her plaws as best she can. ------ So it all starts with my head canon on how changelings survive off love. Basically if friendship is magic, and love is a big part of friendship then love magic must be a thing. I'd say this is supported by a lot of episodes with the changelings in which love does actually manifest magic or make it stronger. So love is an actual type of magic and changelings siphon it from creatures they trick to take back to Queen Chrysalis, who then divides it between the rest of the hive. Because they are giving another creature's love, this doesn't count towards reform. I also think that this is how they maintain their ability to shape-shift. All creatures presumably have a slightly different kind of magic, like a magical fingerprint, and if this is in the love magic it's not unreasonable to say that this diverse range of magic allows changelings to mimic other creatures forms. In a sense, if that creature can love, then changelings can and probably have stolen that love at some point. So what if the exposure to this in their eggs is what gives them that power? What if direct love from another creature, and not the love filtered through grown changelings, could permanently affect the physical form of one still in the egg? When the changelings were first brought into the world I like to believe they weren't intentionally malicious. I assumed that they merely realized they needed love to survive and so giving love was too much of a risk. They wouldn't know right away that love wasn't a finite resource or that they could create it themselves, so their selfish nature came out of fear more than anything else. I mean Chrysalis has stated openly on more than one occasion that it is her duty to protect and feed the hive and that's why she's after Equestria. She snapped when they were all reformed but up to that point it was all about the benefit of her subjects. So I think that way back when, a Chrysalis who loved her people, even if she never gave that love out (If she gave all her love she could run out and starve, then who would protect them?), decided she needed an heir. Someone with her power she could raise to help protect her people or even help lead infiltration on a larger scale. We see how the old changelings are clearly incompetent on their own and the Canterlot invasion required her to leave the hive vulnerable to attack. She selected one of the normal eggs and began to feed it personally. She gave it larger portions of both love and normal magic even going so far as to cast spells onto it. There were probably changelings specifically charged with distributing love among the hatch-lings so they would grow, and this transfer of love from changeling to Chrysalis to changeling to egg (or maybe even more steps) might have helped filter out some of the species specific magic and prevent changelings from taking on traits in their actual form. Now while receiving the less filtered magic did have some effect on Chima I'm not saying that was the source of such extreme differences. That comes from Chrysalis's screw up. So, much in the ways that bees feed a different kind of honey to larvae that will become a new queen, Chrysalis was giving a different kind of magic to Chima, who she had named Sarynxis. Along with just straight up power magic and stolen love magic, she was also receiving the smallest bits of love magic unbeknownst to Chrysalis. Again, I don't believe she is expressly evil at this point, just incredibly focused on the protection of her people at any cost. If she had remained in the Changeling Hive I head canon that the metamorphosis would have happened before any major pony-changeling conflict. What happened instead was that Chrysalis began pouring way too much magic and the little barely formed changeling inside couldn't contain it letting the excess leak out wildly. I mean if a young unicorn can't control their magic how would a Egg? This manifested mainly in the egg repeatedly teleporting itself and other changelings, a fact that Chrysalis disregarded as harmless. Only one changeling, the one tasked with overseeing all of the egg care and a special talent for connecting to the eggs themselves spoke up. She warned the queen that the heir couldn't contain the magic and that she should focus on giving her enough love to hatch, but by this point it was too late. Even though Chrysalis listened and stopped casting spells not all the magic had leaked out. It was at this time that Changelings began coming in with more love than ever before. They had found Equestria and the abundance of love that came with it. Unfortunately for the heir, this love magic came with far more power magic attached that only served to push the Egg's capacity closer to the limit. The straw to break the camel's back was when one particular changeling had managed to trick Celestia into believing she was dreaming about her sister returning. The amount of love he gained was immense and upon his return Chrysalis fed it all to Chima, hoping this would be enough to hatch her. It didn't but the residual magic was enough to spark a burst so powerful that the Egg was teleported far from the Changeling hive, leaving no trace. Chrysalis couldn't sense her, The hatching managers couldn't sense her, not even the one who warned Chrysalis could sense her, and every party sent to find her failed. Chrysalis was furious and in that rage blamed every creature in sight, herself (even if she would never admit to it), the Changeling who brought the magic (he was banished) the hatching managers (all banished save for the one who warned her, she kept her in case she was able to sense the egg again) and most of all, Equestria. Her desire for revenge crossed with the clear gold mine of love that Equestria was lead her to launch her first attack on the kingdom, and then normal chronology follows. As for Chima, the burst of magic was enough to teleport her from land to land not just once but multiple times. Her egg was strange and unnerving, but in each place there was some creature that decided to pull her out of the cold and see what happened. These acts of love weren't enough to help her hatch, as an heir needed far more love than a normal changeling, but it did have a unique effect. As Chima was still in her earliest developmental stage, the direct, willingly shared love from the many different species heavily affected her form. This is where we see the mashup of traits. Her time on Mt. Aris gave her the longer feathers, her time with the Kirin gave her her Nirik form and horn, the time in the Dragonlands permanently changed how her magic works and so on and so forth. She still maintains her ability to shapeshift as a changeling and her increased power as an Heir but the thousand or so moons spent receiving direct love from so many species overwhelms the few she spent in the Hive. Somewhere along the line she pops into Ponyville, with the magic is running out and her getting closer to hatching. Deep in the Everfree forest, the spirit of Harmony notices this and uses it's power to direct her next teleportation to the tree. The spirit sees her need for care along with her potential destiny but also realizes the likely hood that she will not be protected should the ponies find her, given all the Chrysalis has done, and resolves to hatch her itself. Through this she forms a connection to the tree, seeing it's true from (head canon related to a species I made, not really relevant here) and learning how to understand ponish. As she is still in her egg, she's too young to learn anything complex so the Spirit mostly just communicates feelings of love and care to her. She hatches and remains by the tree's side. (I mean no one ever, and I mean EVER looks behind that thing). As an Heir the length of her life stages are another thing that varies greatly from changeling drones, with heirs spending more time as eggs and advancing to the age of the CMC/Young 6 within a matter of days. Avoiding spoilers she is eventually found by the Young 6, and Ocellus is the only one able to communicate with her. This is another head canon of mine; that changelings are born able to speak a language of hisses and such but must be taught ponish. Chima can understand and think in ponish, but cannot speak it, at least not at first. The Young 6 are told by the tree to only introduce her to the princesses and other ponies if they really believe she will be safe and so they agree to keep her in the forest until they think out a plan. She got her cutie-mark when the tree did the thing (the first one) and represents her destiny; to join the young 6 and truly unite the many species and kingdoms of Equestria, she is essentially a walking seed of harmony that will grow off the magic of the elements that manifests through the Young 6 to become what the tree was. In my personal universe she catalyses Chrysalis's reform but that requires a lot of S9 spoilers and is still very work in progress ------ So here's what I need help with; -Are there any lore points I'm directly contradicting? Especially with my head canons because those are integral to making her work. -Are there any things I'm missing? Like is there something that my head canons fails to explain or gaps it fails to fill? -Any ideas for her character? Other species that could come through in her personality or actions? Ponies she would get along with or dislike/fear? -Where should I post her, if anywhere? I understand that it's highly unlikely anyone will allow her in a role play regardless of how much I insist she won't be a power play, but does that mean I can't submit her to the Character sheets?
  2. So I made my first Alicorn OC and was wanting a little feedback on her looks and the small things I got written up as a bio before I keep working on her! Name: Queen Amaranthine or Lady Amaranthine Title: Former Queen of the Isle of Avalon Nicknames: Ama, Warrior-Princess, Our Lady Talent: Fighting, Leading, Strategy Age: 25 Mother: Queen Madainn (Alicorn) Father: King Steelheart (Unicorn) Half Brother: King (Prince) Ferrum Note: She is ninth cousins with Princess Tia and Luna and Candace. Likes: Training, Fencing, Tracking, Spell-Work, Flying, Fighting Practice, Classic Plays, Sweet Drinks, Pastries, Cooking, Fish Dislikes: Dresses, Balls, Fancy Things, Courting Stallions, Dances, Wool, Pushy Beings.
  3. I'm writing a story about a pony's ascension to alicorn status, but I'd like to do it in a compelling way that's not going to annoy the reader/viewer. So far, he's in a Gary Stu situation. Destined to be the first (and currently only) alicorn prince, son of Starlight and Sunburst, well-acquainted with several main characters, and is the apprentice of Luna (who has had to come out of retirement to teach him.) He is not going to rule over Equestria, but he will instead fill Luna's role of helping ponies deal with their nightmares. Perhaps he'll have to deal with a larger threat, or he could become an alicorn simply by learning how to do his task well. I'm not sure which route will be received the best! I was thinking on writing him as someone with depression. Maybe he doesn't want to accept his destiny as the guardian of dreams, and would instead prefer to do something else, like bake cookies or do standup comedy. Maybe he's a chronic procrastinator, or the type of character who compulsively makes everything into a joke to cope with stress. Luna is very serious about her work, and it would cause conflict if her apprentice wasn't interested in or motivated to do the tasks she deems sacred. And, as the only pony who has ever guarded dreams, I'm sure she sees herself as the absolute expert. Alternatively, he could be overly enthusiastic about his new position, and screw things up by making all nightmares into silly, funny dreams instead of dealing with the root of the problem. Maybe he has some sort of nightmare fear of his own that he can't get rid of, and he over exerts himself trying to help others to avoid his own shadow. Once again, not sure which direction is best. Kinda leaning towards him being a bit rebellious, too. His mother and father (and Twilight and "Aunt" Trixie) are all very much intelligent overachievers with important jobs. Maybe they hold our protagonist to strictly high standards, and his dream guardian destiny is only compounding upon his stress. He has big horseshoes to fill, and perhaps he feels intimidated and/or constricted by it all. What tips, critiques, and general feedback do you all have? I really want to sharpen this story and have a well-developed protagonist!
  4. Edit: I'm not actually asking for critique - though, sure, comment anything you like - I just thought you had to chose either 'no critique' or 'critique wanted', and now I can't get rid of it. Hey, I just thought if that if I'm gonna be active on here anyway, I might as well take the time to post some artwork. Also, if you want to avoid the stringent feedback rules here and tell me what worthless garbage I really am, I invite you to my Derpibooru account. Most of my stuff centers around fanfic ideas I had long ago but never made anything out of. What follows is a bunch of OCs from those stories - and I also tried my hand at turning one of the many scenes I've imagined into a comic page, albeit poorly. Pacing is hard. Pony deities from before the tribes united. A classic dysfunctional adventuring party.
  5. I'm not good at shadows and I'm working on their heads being bobbles but any advice? This is one of my OCs named Cinnamon Swirl...ignore her little tail, I cant decide to go small or big. The darker color is the one I drew previously and posted on here. I wanted her to be lighter in color.
  6. I wrote this before on the topic: Mary Sue and Why We Hate Them, but I feel I could get more advice here: To be honest, one of the reasons I never got around to fully writing any potential fan fiction is because I'm afraid I made my OC Ponysona, Will Guide too much of a Gary Sue. I mean, being able to use Pixie Dust from the World of Disney to temporarily fly seems a bit OP. Plus although I use the Beast's Magic Mirror so that both Will Guides can talk to the others. (One Will physically outside the mirror, the other whose face appears inside the mirror), I'm tempted to have it break the story and spy on the villians right away. I try to handwave why I couldn't just use my abilities to solve all the episodes' conflicts so quickly by saying I'm magically restrained from using my Disney Magic to its full potential since it comes from another world and so its function work differently. But I don't know; it sounds like a lame excuse when I say it like that. As for Character Flaws, well, Changeling Will Guide starts off feeling he needs me as Unicorn Will Guide to even exist, but learns to stand more on his own. To the point, we could part ways for a while without him feeling too insecure. Also, there's a part of Changeling Will Guide that wants Chrysalis to accept him, but she never did and never will. As for myself as Unicorn Will Guide, I feel there's not much change to my character after my "big intro episode". I remain more or less the same person. The only big things I've done since then is successfully get Spike's Egg from his doomed parents to Celestia during the S5 finale Time-Traveling Trip and rediscover my Changeling Soulmate. I would spend parts of the rest of the show after Season 6 as a Big Brother Mentor to C. Will. Other than all that, I feel Unicorn Will Guide is just me making wish fulfillment. So in short, I'm not sure if my OCs avoid falling in the Mary Sue Traps. Other than me, who would want to read about my characters' experiences in Equestria and maybe even the Equestria Girls World? Maybe even C. Will's experience in our reality if I decided to go that far?
  7. After many years of being a member of the fandom and avid reader I decided to begin my first dive into writing by putting together a short story. I'm fairly thick skinned so any and all criticism including subjective opinions are appreciated. Fimfiction link
  8. So I'm new to drawing and using digital paint. I dont have a tablet or computer so I use my phone. Any tips or anything please. I use Medibang but I dont know how to really use it. I want to be better. ... This is one of my OCs named cinnamon swirl. I'm not 100% on her hair style or big eyes. She isnt a filly....shes a free spirit and does funny stuff...shes eating a cloud lol also not related. I accidentally posted topic somewhere else and wanted to delete it. How do I delete a topic? I cant find an option. Thank you
  9. (Hopefully this is the correct place to ask such a question) I was wondering if anyone had any tips in creating a truly villainous villain, one that people dread the protagonist running into rather than just another obstacle. Might anyone have any tips on achieving such a character?
  10. M'm lady Fluttershy I just notice some grass error I made
  11. Hello ! I recently remade an old drawing from 2015 and I would love to have some critiques so I can improve my art even more! I know I'll never be a renaissance painter but I'm really proud of how it turned out, still I feel it can be improved. I know I messed up on Sombra's back legs :x
  12. Ok, so this is a dual (maybe triple? :P) purpose thread: First is to show off my OC's updated look/show progress after 2-3 years as well as get a critique on the finished work: Old version: New version: The second (or third) thing, was I need some advice on a WIP. I can't seem to get Luna's eyes not to look all herp-derp, was hoping for some advice on how to address that:
  13. Here is a drawing I did of one of my main ocs. (Also, this is what my other one was supposed to do.)
  14. I have some ocs that I drew, and I was wondering if anyone would like to tell me their opinion on them. Also I have them on insta,( I will comment the username in the comments in about an hour.) but I will post to this mostly. Thanks for looking!
  15. Hello, Im making an OC and need some help with the particulars from you fine folk Im not too sure on the name, which at the moment is Shifting Sands, as well as the cutiemark which can be changed pretty easily Im not really sure what the cactus represents, or her overall place in the universe (im still only on season 2) And her anthro form needs some clothes. Same render but with a hoodie Ah I don't know how to add topic tags so Ill just make it clear I want critique please!
  16. I want to start posting art again, but I want to start a new thread instead of continuing my old one from years ago. The old thread can be found here. Check it out to see how much I've improved! I think I'm finally getting to a point where I like my art style, but I still need to work on poses and expressions. I haven't finished a ton of art this year, but I've been pretty active in the past week or so, so hopefully that will change. I'll go from oldest to newest and show my favorite art from this year. This was an adoptable design I sold. I love browns and golds, especially together. Another adoptable design I sold. A sketch of a character I'm designing for myself, Caius. I'm having a hard time picking colors for him though. A commission of a pretty character named Moonstruck. <3 A YCH commission featuring a character named Acacia Blossom. A portrait sketch commission. Another YCH commission, I love this character's design. And these last two were done yesterday: My bat pony OC, Kari. And Cecilia, my half demon pony. A height comparison between the two, Cecilia is average and Kari's short:
  17. I lost track of me previous thread so here is a new one of my new art So start the piece that I made once I got my computer back Yeah I designed Script Chime a bit Next is this comic I made based on how interactions with me and my friend usually go Another simple piece I did of my precious Elusive Shadows These three are all request I took a while back the second one is my favorite I did fan are of Parlay which turned out really great the entire thing could have been crap due to the clothing This actually happened to me...I'm not even joking I love the chick who did that by the way My friends can be so evil sometimes I joined a redesign contest and made this I did this simple piece. I mean Script is still edgy right? I did this collab with one of my friends and after doing the outline I let her have a blast with coloring the oc before I gave it to her I did this ponysona meme I wanted to do for a while This is where Script found her bracelets if you want the full story look here Did another piece with Ocean Mist and Dove Petal Please reference the Audition Room comic and finally in honor of Pride Month! I can now have Script Chime spreading gayness like a bisexual chem trail. Anyway I love how this turned out since this also means that this is the first planned and well done piece of Script's new design. I actually love this and this will probably be up there as one of my favorite pieces I've made. Happy Pride Month to everyone!
  18. Well, i have had a potter for a while actually... but now i'm cutting out ponies on an industrial level! Original art work by Midnight Premier Oc and vector work by me (StickerBomber <da>)
  19. So I have been making pony art and have posted them as status updates but I just decided to have an actual topic for myself for these things similar to my cutie mark topic. Here we are first down the runway is the first piece I did once I got my computer back Happy Script Chime! Speedpaint for this one here Next is a dark side for Script here named Elusive Shadow well one rendition of her anyway Next up is a demon edgelord who is the boyfriend of a roleplay character give it up for Shaded Fang Alright I'm done with the "fashion show" gimmick anyway next are to characters who love each other dearly this is Delightful Sweets and Cunning Claws! Moving on is the darkest yet supposedly happiest moment of my life. The day I earned my cutie mark Next is kind of sad. Its two characters once enamored with each other getting the punishment for that love. For something on a lighter note here is something based off a person at my job. She has this aura of just cuteness and the constant inability to hate her on her side so I drew this out to show how I felt Speedpaint for this is here And finally the most recent work Flank Sinatrot singing. Yes that's a pun and no I don't feel ashamed. I love the music he sang and I had wanted to make the piece for a long time and I finally got the time to so here we go The speedpaint for this is here Hope you like this!
  20. I bring you my new song. As always feedback welcome.
  21. Hey everyone! Here is my drawing of Celestia. I included the sketch and flat colours so you can see the process.
  22. Okay, first im some months without make this kind of art, because take much time, but im very excited to back and bring this again I really need all the feedback to improve my arts, and if are good what i should do next?
  23. Well much years i dont make a post, i working on new stiles of draw, sooooo all feedback is good for me
  24. By accident I did two pieces with the same concept of space and the pose is also almost the same, (pose was requested both times so it is like really coincidence) but this is the best time for a side by side! I dont draw ponies that often. I can still count my pieces on both hands. So I am glad there is some improvement. Yet I am still not there hahaha
  25. Preface: I don't know English well, I partially used a translator. Moderator, if I broke any rules, I apologize. I read the rules, tried to follow them. About a month ago I decided to learn how to draw and started with a pony.I would like to learn how to draw a pony well.Please criticize the drawings, tell me what are the flaws and mistakes. Who is good at drawing ponies, give advice. Latest work: Head: Body: Await the critics. Update 30.03.2019 I would like to share with you my achievements and demonstrate that if you try to do it differently, the main thing is the desire to learn. Will show you the work in the beginning of my drawing (never drawing ). At the beginning: After 1.5 months: