[Feedback really needed] Symphony of Steel.

[yisetab28 89]

I am currently still working on the first story of my alternate timeline, but I've become a little stucked due to lack of feedback. I mean it's nice upvoting my story, downvoting is also nice to a certain extent, but not without feedback. So, could you guys here provide me with some basic feedback on how "Symphony of Steel" is and where the story should be headed?

 

(Story link:http://www.fimfiction.net/story/256918/the-30th-tiger)

[yisetab28 89]

No one? Can someone at least tell me if the story is good?