When Music Returned - Made by me

[Cirrus 3]

Hi, this is my first fanfic, so please tell me what you honestly think, what you think needs changing. I need some constructive criticism. Here is the link:

 

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/21217/When-music-returned.

 

Thanks for reading it! And don't forget to like or dislike it at the site! It's in the incomplete stage, and only one chapter is finished, but more will be added soon!

[Rainbow Danger Dash 145]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=F_e9rPCGVRE

[Dave247 568]

There's defiantly potential, mystery of the unknown of always something that gets people interested. And how could you not have your OC fall into a portal to nopony knows where with Twilight?