ooc Age of The Machine [Post-Apocalyptic][Dark] (Always Open)

[Professor Annabella 330]

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It all started with the crowning of Queen Twilight Sparkle, after Celestia passed down her godly powers to her successor. With the ability to now raise the sun and moon at will, Celestia and her sister Luna slowly disappeared from existence as Twilight took her new place as the ruler of the country. She was a great ruler, who put more democratic laws into place, and built up a army so that Equestria no longer needed to depend on the Elements of Harmony. Threats were building outside the countries borders that made this action necessary, as long as Twilight remained a completely sane and fair ruler. Unfortunately time deteriorated Queen Twilight's sanity.

Years and years past, but Twilight didn't age due to the cursed immortality passed on to her. Her parents died, then her brother, then her friends, and their children, and their children's children. Meanwhile Equestria grew, but Twilight slowly descended into madness and paranoia. This was a flaw Celestia overlook. This flaw stayed hidden for awhile, Equestria grew rapidly. Cities grew bigger and technology advanced into something you'd see in our world. Slowly Equestria depended more on technology, and so did the military. Twilight over time, slowly focused more efforts on the military, and expanding Equestria's borders. Equestria became more of a military state than anything, with Twilight at it's head. When Equestria went to war with it's southern border, Twilight became a military dictator instead of a peaceful and diplomatic monarch like she once was.

Equestria wanted to expand their southern border, and went to war bringing everything they could. They brought tanks, artillery, machine guns, planes, you name it- but it wasn't enough. Twilight and her hunger for power wanted something more deadly. She aggressively pressured her top military scientists to make something bigger, something scarier, something that didn't risk more of her soldiers lives. The only answer her scientists came up with was; The Machine. Robots would be built using undeveloped Artificial Intelligence technology, all of which had the capability to kill the enemy. These machines ranged from bugs that could crawl around in tunnels and into small openings, to massive monsters that could be 50 feet tall with deadly gatling guns. In air, on ground, or in the sea, The Machines were a deadly force on the battlefield. Large factories were built with self automated systems that pumped out at least 100 machines a day to be shipped out south. The Equestrian blue sky was filled with debris from the war in the south, and the smoke from these factories.

The war was close to being won, and it came with ease, at the cost of hundreds of lives. The military state of Equestria, with Dictator Twilight at the helm, was near sucess. When things couldn't get any better for Twilight, the machines turned. Their undeveloped A.I.'s were much stronger than they thought. Soon the machines decided to kill not just the enemy, but ALL ponies. They went on a rampage, first killing soldiers on the battlefield, but then marching north back to Equestria. The army tried everything in their power to stop them, but their numbers grew as the factories also continued to pump out more evil machines without pony interference.

Twilight was soon defeated, along with the rest of the country. Everything was destroyed via corrupt machines and weapons turned against them. Missile codes were hacked into by The Machine, even after killing most ponies in the country, and destroying almost everything. Soon the entire country was barraged by it's own missiles, flattening and killing anything that remained (including hundreds of machines). Soon the country fell into a dark abyss... Surviving animals and ponies scavenge their new apocalyptic world, as quite a few machines still search the ruins for ponies to kill with their advanced systems. With all the factories dormant, the military gone, country non-existence, and Twilight dead... The country falls into a new age. The Age of The Machine.

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Welcome to Age of the Machine, a reboot of a 300+ Page roleplay from a site I roleplayed on in the past. It's a dark post-apocalyptic roleplay, full of action, non-stop suspense, and drama. If you aren't into these things, you may not want to join.

To keep these factors I listed off, this is a advanced roleplay. It's not marked as advanced because I feel that scares people off, and is somewhat pointless. Another reason why is because it isn't about quantity, but quality. I want this roleplay to not be the type of roleplay that is dormant because everybody is writing 5000 words for their next response. Please let your posts be interesting, and have detail. This will keep things moving and encourage people to post. This all also means that some may not be accepted, please don't take offense to this. When joining this roleplay, please be devoted to keeping it alive, and be the type of person who posts frequently instead of every few days. This roleplay is very important to me and will be to many others as well.

The Roleplay will be organized with objectives. At the top of every one of my posts, the objective will be posted. You must follow this objective in order to run smoothly, however when you follow is completely up to you. This will allow room for the roleplay to break into another group or allow more freedom. Please INFORM in the OOC if you wish to not follow the objective. The objective DOES have a purpose, so this isn't going to be too frequent of a thing.

I have a lot of experience running roleplays. Long ago in the past I learned a lesson about trying to be too controlling over the roleplay. So don't be intimidated. This roleplay will be the perfect balance of freedom and leading the plot.

As for details not filled in by the above, here's a short paragraph filling in some details; You're a survivor. You're OC survived the missiles falling, and the attack of the machines, during these 5 years. Your OC could have even born in the midst of the apocalypse. The Machines still roam the streets, not in massive numbers, but they are present. Machines have spread out evenly across Equestria.

-The bulk of them are the Enforcers, large 20ft tall machines that walk on 2 legs, and are equipped with one bright red eye that senses heat signatures and movement. They have a large M134 Minigun with nearly endless ammo. If that fails they'll step on you or ram into your buildings. They have a steel shell around their eye and gun and are almost completely bullet proof. Their weakness is their eye. If shot, it could make them blind. A even better shot at the eye, in the direct middle, could pierce it's motherboard and activate it's self-destruct. This is extremely hard. They are relentless, stubborn, and are mostly independent but have the ability to call a few buddies. Enforcers make up 80% of all machines.

-The next most present machine are Buggers. They come in many forms, but mostly all have one objective. They crawl around in the ruins, can dig tunnels, and have large colonies of other Buggers. If you spot one, there is no doubt there are more nearby. They are never found in the open, they are mostly in old buildings, or underground. They are the weakest machine, and can be killed with a few shots from a pistol. If you kill one, they let out a metallic scream that calls more buggers, which makes them extremely lethal. They have 6 sharp legs that stab and cut the victim. They aren't very clever, they were only made to raid bunkers. Buggers make up 10% of all machines.

-Hawks are deadly and should be feared and avoided at all costs. Large bird-like machines with 2 M134 Gatling guns on each large metallic wing, the ability to spread deadly chlorine gas, and possibly drop bombs (depending on if they have any left). They are extremely smart, can hack computers, figure out ways to sneak into the most concealed places, and don't have any mercy for any other machines or ponies. They kill for sport, and are the most advanced of all machines. They were the first to corrupt, and it's believed they started the turn of all machines. They make up 5% of all machines.

-The last 5% is made up of various prototypes, or machines in short supply. The rest can be discovered during the course of the roleplay.


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- Please be ACTIVE and CONTRIBUTE. At least in the start you should strive to interact with characters in every post. You should always be posting something to keep the roleplay moving forward. Comedy is nice and all, but avoid breaking the 4th wall or being a troll. Take it seriously, mostly, and be considerate to the fact that we don't want the roleplay to go dormant.

-Follow the simple laws of roleplay. Those are NO GODMODDING and NO MARY-SUES. Both of which are covered in An Enhanced General Guide to Roleplaying

-This is a roleplay that is Dark. Avoid too much comedy. Romance is okay, but don't let this take over most of the roleplay. Also, follow the rules regarding NSFW and violence (Funny enough, this is what KILLED the last Age of the Machine roleplay).

-These machines are extremely deadly, DON'T BE OVERPOWERED. Your OC should have a couple close calls! It's okay if you aren't the hero for once and you take a hit! It's no fun if there's no danger and suspense.

-Be aware of your grammar, and try to use it correctly. Make sure your posts are understandable, and most of all, tolerable. Your posts means nothing if we can't understand it. A few mistakes are okay, of course, but try to avoid it.

-This roleplay is for those with decent writing abilities and beyond. This is why you should have descriptive posts, that are interesting, and show quality.

- Length post should be decent. You shouldn't have too short of a post, since it's impossible to follow the last rule if it's a single line long. It also shouldn't be overly long. You aren't writing a book, and quite frankly, nobody wants to read your 5000 word post about your OC. Unless it's for something important to the plot, and is necessary, don't post too long of posts.

-All roleplays die due to one reason; the inability to post or lack of posting. If you go inactive and stop posting, someone will tell you, and when you're informed, you have to reply. If you don't reply you'll be kicked out of the roleplay, and a conclusion to your OC will be given in order to continue the roleplay. This rule isn't too strict, since people do have lives, but be ACTIVE.

-The roleplay's plot and direction is decided by the players, but lead along by the GM. Please do follow the Objectives. You don't have to respond immediately, but if you take too long and DON'T want to follow the objective, inform the GM. This should be a common thing since the Objectives do have a purpose.

-What the GM says, goes. He/She created the roleplay, hence, he/she has the final ruling on any affairs. At the slight chance the GM disappears, it is acceptable that the co-GM or a willing player can reboot the roleplay and use this very OOC. Even the GM must follow the Activity rule.

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-Your Character will be accepted by the main GM or any CO-GM'S he/she assigns. They will inform you on this thread if you're accepted.

-Your Character can be the following races: Unicorn, Pegasus, Earth Pony, Donkey, Deer, Griffon, Hippogriff, Zebra, and etc. However, Alicorns aren't allowed. Some races can be talked over, but they have to be canon and believable.

-In order to join, a test must be conducted. This is a simple test, all it does is assume if you're suited skill-wise to join. You have to write a paragraph as a backstory to what happened to your character leading up to the apocalypse. Since the missiles fell and factories became inactive has been 5 years. Depending on your characters age, if they can remember or were part of the events before the attacks, it should be in this backstory. How they survived up to the current point should be legitimate, while still following the rules (Your character doesn't seem to be a mary-sue or looks overpowered). Here's a example of this versions GM's OC: [THIS CAN BE REMOVED IF THIS ROLEPLAY IS RECYCLED]

 

Anna is a extremely intelligent pony who had been studying at Canterlot University since she was 14. She was on the road to becoming a skilled biologist until Professor White picked up on her talents, and recruited her as his assistance at 20 years old. He was a powerful pony who had access to The Machine project, and took a large part in it. When the Machine’s began to turn, he had access to a bunker that’d be used to try and solve the problem. Since Professor White took a liking to Anna, he had invited her and her husband to this bunker. When the mission to stop the machines turned up unsuccessful, this bunker was instead used as a shelter. For the 5 years leading up to the roleplay, Anna stayed underground. Life underground was tight and hard, but Anna got through it while continuing her research on trying to stop the machined despite how hopeless it seemed. Her husband was quite abusive to her at the all this time too, which didn’t help her efforts very much. Eventually the bunker began to run dry of resources, and ponies started to turn savage. Professor White was killed in the midst of the distress of running completely dry, and it was at that point she tried to escape the bunker. Of course, her husband nearly killed her in his own madness. Anna didn’t have many options; he jumped and attacked her, so her only option was to use her pistol to shoot him. After that… Anna escaped into the apocalyptic lands with only a few bruises and scratches. She soon took refuge in nearby Manehattan. All would be well, since Anna was so clever, but she soon figured out she was pregnant. Her only option was to wait it out, but Anna survived via the help of some mysterious strangers she refuses to talk about. She now has a settlement in the middle of Manehattan, with her baby, which will be explained in the roleplay.

-Also post a link of your OC's profile page on MLPForum if you have one. Otherwise, please post a picture of your OC or a short description of what they look like. You'd also be required to post personality traits, physical or mental traits, and anything you think other roleplayers should know

-Your first post should include what your OC is in procession of, where they are coming from, their health status, and if they are being followed or not.

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Current GM's: Professor Annabella

 

Roleplay Thread: https://mlpforums.com/topic/136531-age-of-the-machine/#entry4048433

[OPEN]

Edited August 25, 2015 by Professor Annabella

[Chaton 3,765]

When will this signup close, as I have some things IRL I need to finish before I consider joining more roleplays.

[Professor Annabella 330]

When will this signup close, as I have some things IRL I need to finish before I consider joining more roleplays.

It'll never close

[Chaton 3,765]

It'll never close

 

Well that's good to know.

I'm not quite sure if I'll have the time to commit to something like this, but I'll post my OC so that when I do find out if I'll have the time (in the next week or so) I know if I need to modify my current OC or use a different OC altogether. https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/scarlett-fidelity-cps-r8402

 

Though if I do join I will make these modifications if allowed:

 

She is a very powerful unicorn, but her magic is quite unstable and is likely to burn out often. When it does, the magic keeping her appearance due to her changeling side will vanish and she will take on an albino-like look.

 

She will spend most of her time solely as a Medic, never using her magic around other ponies unless she absolutely needs to.

Edited August 21, 2015 by Vinyl Scratchy DJ

[Professor Annabella 330]

Well that's good to know.I'm not quite sure if I'll have the time to commit to something like this, but I'll post my OC so that when I do find out if I'll have the time (in the next week or so) I know if I need to modify my current OC or use a different OC altogether. https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/scarlett-fidelity-cps-r8402

Uh if this OC isn't fit for this RP than I don't know which one is. She's perfect, just follow the guidelines and write a short paragraph when you have the time. I'm not going to tell you what kind... That'll require you to read the roleplay

[Chaton 3,765]

Uh if this OC isn't fit for this RP than I don't know which one is. She's perfect, just follow the guidelines and write a short paragraph when you have the time. I'm not going to tell you what kind... That'll require you to read the roleplay

 

I've already read it, hence the reason I applied. If, hopefully when, I join could I use those modifications I specified? Though really the only modification there is a state of mind. I'm sure I can think of some tragic event that caused her to stop using her magic.

[Professor Annabella 330]

I've already read it, hence the reason I applied. If, hopefully when, I join could I use those modifications I specified? Though really the only modification there is a state of mind. I'm sure I can think of some tragic event that caused her to stop using her magic.

I skimmed through your backstory and I'm wondering why you want to get rid of your magic. Is it because you're afraid it's overpowered? This is a modern world, magic is outdated. It's still pretty useful though. Imagine magic like swords. Swords are somewhat outdated to guns, unless you're extremely talented with them. Then swords could be even BETTER then guns because they aren't hard to maintain. This is what magic is like. Keep in mind though that machines have jammers that can stop a unicorns magic, and anti-pegasus weapons that can shoot down or paralyze pegasi.

 

As long as magic is her only weapon, it's okay. If it gets to be a little too much, I'll inform you.

 

I also wanted to ask you, if you do join, would you be okay with recruiting a few people? If you get a few more players in here, Id consider making you a co-GM. If this happened, I'd set up a PM in which you could have a say on the roleplays affairs. This would require you to be committed, however. As you can tell, I worked very hard on this RP. I don't know what it is, but I was expecting people to be flocking in... But they really haven't. Maybe I just posted it at the wrong time? Anyhow I could really use help with it.

Edited August 21, 2015 by Professor Annabella

[Chaton 3,765]

I skimmed through your backstory and I'm wondering why you want to get rid of your magic. Is it because you're afraid it's overpowered? This is a modern world, magic is outdated. It's still pretty useful though. Imagine magic like swords. Swords are somewhat outdated to guns, unless you're extremely talented with them. Then swords could be even BETTER then guns because they aren't hard to maintain. This is what magic is like. Keep in mind though that machines have jammers that can stop a unicorns magic, and anti-pegasus weapons that can shoot down or paralyze pegasi.

 

As long as magic is her only weapon, it's okay. If it gets to be a little too much, I'll inform you.

 

I also wanted to ask you, if you do join, would you be okay with recruiting a few people? If you get a few more players in here, Id consider making you a co-GM. If this happened, I'd set up a PM in which you could have a say on the roleplays affairs. This would require you to be committed, however. As you can tell, I worked very hard on this RP. I don't know what it is, but I was expecting people to be flocking in... But they really haven't. Maybe I just posted it at the wrong time? Anyhow I could really use help with it.

 

People can be, what's the word, intimidated, by such large roleplay posts. Having got an A in psychology I can tell you that the length of your post would definitely scare some ponies off, you almost scared me off in fact. I will try and recruit, and the idea wasn't to remove Scarlett's magic. I tend to link all the rp's I'm a part of into my OC's story, and in one of the RP's I am in I used Scarlett's magic a little too much. My idea was that in an alternate reality the magic backfired and ended up hurting a bunch of people, so Scarlett stopped using her advanced magic.

[Professor Annabella 330]

People can be, what's the word, intimidated, by such large roleplay posts. Having got an A in psychology I can tell you that the length of your post would definitely scare some ponies off, you almost scared me off in fact. I will try and recruit, and the idea wasn't to remove Scarlett's magic. I tend to link all the rp's I'm a part of into my OC's story, and in one of the RP's I am in I used Scarlett's magic a little too much. My idea was that in an alternate reality the magic backfired and ended up hurting a bunch of people, so Scarlett stopped using her advanced magic.

To be honest, I'd think the veterans would just understand that I'm trying to make the roleplay as understandable as possible. In reality, I'd be a hypocrite if I said I read every OOC of every RP I ever joined. If someone wants to take a gander at the OOC, and decide not to read it all, that's cool with me as long as they don't go breaking rules left and right. They better be ready to edit posts if they don't do things right too.

 

The long OOC may scare people off, but not trying to be biased or anything, but I only want good and dedicated roleplayers for this? I hope I don't sound like a ass for saying that.

 

Try to find people you think would be fit, and explain to them it's not as complicated as it looks. I'd appreciate it very much.

[Chaton 3,765]

To be honest, I'd think the veterans would just understand that I'm trying to make the roleplay as understandable as possible. In reality, I'd be a hypocrite if I said I read every OOC of every RP I ever joined. If someone wants to take a gander at the OOC, and decide not to read it all, that's cool with me as long as they don't go breaking rules left and right. They better be ready to edit posts if they don't do things right too.

 

The long OOC may scare people off, but not trying to be biased or anything, but I only want good and dedicated roleplayers for this? I hope I don't sound like a ass for saying that.

 

Try to find people you think would be fit, and explain to them it's not as complicated as it looks. I'd appreciate it very much.

 

I completely understand where you're coming from, and I have decided I would like to join. I'll write the paragraph later, maybe tomorrow because of current events but I would like to join. I'll make a post later with the paragraph and any modifications I might want to make to Scarlett.

Small Question: Can the back story be in character, like a proper roleplay post in the form of a prologue?

[Professor Annabella 330]

I completely understand where you're coming from, and I have decided I would like to join. I'll write the paragraph later, maybe tomorrow because of current events but I would like to join. I'll make a post later with the paragraph and any modifications I might want to make to Scarlett.

 

Small Question: Can the back story be in character, like a proper roleplay post in the form of a prologue?

If it includes how they got to where they are now, then why not? Maybe you could use it as your opening post too. Kill 2 birds with one stone.

 

I just don't understand why people won't join.... I worked so hard...

Edited August 22, 2015 by Professor Annabella

[Wicked Funky 2,955]

I'd like to join with my OC Jasmine, I belive she is quite fit for this RP

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/jasmine-r8758

 

(Sorry for poor drawing, But at least you can get the concept )

 

 

[Professor Annabella 330]

I'd like to join with my OC Jasmine, I belive she is quite fit for this RP

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/jasmine-r8758

 

(Sorry for poor drawing, But at least you can get the concept )

Pretty OC! Very fit! It's also a great drawing... Just please read the "How to Join" the only thing you missed is you have to write a paragraph (just a short one, not going to be picky) about your character during the 5 years the apocalypse has been going on? There's more details above, including a example.

 

Please don't be scared off by this. I REALLY need people.

[Wicked Funky 2,955]

Professor Annabella, on 22 Aug 2015 - 10:00 PM, said:

Pretty OC! Very fit! It's also a great drawing... Just please read the "How to Join" the only thing you missed is you have to write a paragraph (just a short one, not going to be picky) about your character during the 5 years the apocalypse has been going on? There's more details above, including a example.

 

Please don't be scared off by this. I REALLY need people.

I did read it, So the backstory I have written in her character profile from the data base isn't enough?

[Professor Annabella 330]

I did read it, So the backstory I have written in her character profile from the data base isn't enough?

Well... I needed just something short for the role play you know. I mean like what happened in this specific apocalypse, with the robots and all.

[Wicked Funky 2,955]

Oh, I missunderstood sorry

 

Let's see....

 

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Jasmine stepped out of her abode merely concisting of a few iron pipes and concrete blocks, She closed her eyes and took a deep breath inhaling the polluted air feeling the strong scent of gunpowder and smoke. She let out a big smile before stretching her wings. Jasmine stared at her razor sharp steel feathers reflecting the small amount of light comming through the smoke clouds, She sees a spot of dirt on one of the feathers and without hesistation decides to lick it away. As she tried to remove the spot she cuts her tongue without even flinching, The taste of blood fills her mouth and she let's out a small giggle bofore happily trotting away.

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So yeah, I just wanted to write something that kind of reflected the random and a bit deranged part of her. Maybe a bit boring example but I hope it's enough, Just tell me if you want me to write something else ^^

Well... I needed just something short for the role play you know. I mean like what happened in this specific apocalypse, with the robots and all.

[Ochre_Dust 329]

Having seen the list of permitted races, I hate to be that guy, but the set-up is just screaming a changeling character to me. They seem like a race that'd end up having a vested interest in ponies surviving, as I doubt the machines can provide love.

 

So could something be worked out for a changeling character?

Edited August 22, 2015 by Ochre_Dust

[Chaton 3,765]

If it includes how they got to where they are now, then why not? Maybe you could use it as your opening post too. Kill 2 birds with one stone.

 

I just don't understand why people won't join.... I worked so hard...

 

I think my idea worked.

Also, I'll get writing. I can't promise anything amazing, but I'll do my best.

Having seen the list of permitted races, I hate to be that guy, but the set-up is just screaming a changeling character to me. They seem like a race that'd end up having a vested interest in ponies surviving, as I doubt the machines can provide love.

 

So could something be worked out for a changeling character?

 

Scarlett is part changeling. No idea how to incorporate this but

Well... I needed just something short for the role play you know. I mean like what happened in this specific apocalypse, with the robots and all.

 

I just realised. Scarlett prevented her future (Fallout Equestria) from happening, and now one just as bad -maybe worse- has come around.

 

Tough break.

[Professor Annabella 330]

Having seen the list of permitted races, I hate to be that guy, but the set-up is just screaming a changeling character to me. They seem like a race that'd end up having a vested interest in ponies surviving, as I doubt the machines can provide love.

 

So could something be worked out for a changeling character?

Well it makes sense, but like unicorns and pegasi, the machines probably have a measure that prevents them from disguising/flying when they attack

 

I think my idea worked.

 

Also, I'll get writing. I can't promise anything amazing, but I'll do my best.

 

 

Scarlett is part changeling. No idea how to incorporate this but

 

 

I just realised. Scarlett prevented her future (Fallout Equestria) from happening, and now one just as bad -maybe worse- has come around.

 

Tough break.

Nice to hear you're involved. Could you help me with Cruki's OC. I'm not so sure how I feel about some of her attributes... Edited August 22, 2015 by Professor Annabella

[Omar 692]

This seems like an interesting roleplay. I don't know if I'll be applying for this since I'm not exactly sure if ready for an advanced roleplay, but I'll definitely be thinking about it.

Edited August 23, 2015 by Omar

[Gloomfury 243]

Hey, i'm pretty interested in joining. I just waited for a bit till others ask to join. I wan't to use my OC Trench Club. And I read though the sign up part of the first post. I'll write my paragraph later tonight or tomorrow.

 

And I won't lie, I have a pretty short attention span. But when I get into something I post like the second someone posts me back. But if things slow down I may get board and lose interest.   

[Chaton 3,765]

Well it makes sense, but like unicorns and pegasi, the machines probably have a measure that prevents them from disguising/flying when they attack

 

Nice to hear you're involved. Could you help me with Cruki's OC. I'm not so sure how I feel about some of her attributes...

 

I'll take a look before I start my paragraph. What about it are you unsure about?

Though now that I look at it:

 

Jasmine likes the taste of blood, Hers or anyones else.

 

I'm not sure how to respond to something like this.

[Wicked Funky 2,955]

Vinyl Scratchy DJ, on 23 Aug 2015 - 10:02 AM, said:

I'll take a look before I start my paragraph. What about it are you unsure about?

Though now that I look at it:

 

Jasmine likes the taste of blood, Hers or anyones else.

 

I'm not sure how to respond to something like this.

So, What should I change?

 

And yeah.... Just Another evryday thing you know .3.

[Chaton 3,765]

God I keep postponing this. My paragraph and official signup will be done within the next hour or two, I have something to do first.

[Professor Annabella 330]

Hey, i'm pretty interested in joining. I just waited for a bit till others ask to join. I wan't to use my OC Trench Club. And I read though the sign up part of the first post. I'll write my paragraph later tonight or tomorrow.

 

And I won't lie, I have a pretty short attention span. But when I get into something I post like the second someone posts me back. But if things slow down I may get board and lose interest.

Yes, please do join. If you want to avoid boredom or things slowing down, then you may want to invite a few friends that you know are good role players who do keep things interesting. You've been here much longer than I have

 

God I keep postponing this. My paragraph and official signup will be done within the next hour or two, I have something to do first.

Uh, well you're not really being rushed seeing as the roleplay hasn't even started yet

 

So, What should I change?

 

And yeah.... Just Another evryday thing you know .3.

There's one thing you have to change; your grammar. Now I'd hate to be a jerk, but in the actual RP, I want you to make sure your posts are wholesome and with detail. The paragraph you wrote had both of those things but... You really need to work on grammar. Spelling, sentence structure, no matter how interesting your character is, your grammar will still be distracting and annoying if really bad. Just keep it in mind. Edited August 23, 2015 by Professor Annabella