video Looking for Critique

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Hello! I, again, ask for your help.. please 

 

Basically other than a singing channel I have a gaming channel that I've been kinda neglecting by accident. I was hoping some of you could leave some critique, as harsh or as kind as you want, on how I can improve 

 

You can look through the channel but the main types of videos I'm planning to do in the future are ones like this: 

 

All you need to know is I only have movie maker to edit... yea I know it's sucky but It's all I can get my hands on 

 

Thank you for reading and, if you did, thank you for leaving feedback, all is appreciated