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"Will You Live Through Nightmare Night?" (Jazz/Orchestra)


Michael Picher

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I like the transition from the creepy and mysterious feel to the jaunty and sort of playful disney like tone you had there. However, your vocals could be improved a little. You can't go too cartoony on the vocals, or else it'll distract your listener from what you're trying to convey. Also, that pipe organ in the beginning felt interjected, especially since it was so full and bright. I honestly, would've used the same progression, but just fill that space with arpeggiated piano runs using the i-iv-V progression, leading up to that glissando on the xylophone.

 

All in all, it's a good piece, but watch your vocals.  

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I like the transition from the creepy and mysterious feel to the jaunty and sort of playful disney like tone you had there. However, your vocals could be improved a little. You can't go too cartoony on the vocals, or else it'll distract your listener from what you're trying to convey. Also, that pipe organ in the beginning felt interjected, especially since it was so full and bright. I honestly, would've used the same progression, but just fill that space with arpeggiated piano runs using the i-iv-V progression, leading up to that glissando on the xylophone.

 

All in all, it's a good piece, but watch your vocals.  

 

Thanks for the feedback , this helps me a lot! 

 

I'm not much of a singer, so I thought I could make up for the fact by doing different voices, though I might have laid it on a bit to thick in a few places. The organ at the beginning is also something I'm starting to agree feels a bit out of place. We live and learn. Next piece will be even better.

 

Then again, if I get more feedback throughout the day, I'll upload a version 2.0 tomorrow.

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Thanks for the feedback , this helps me a lot! 

 

I'm not much of a singer, so I thought I could make up for the fact by doing different voices, though I might have laid it on a bit to thick in a few places. The organ at the beginning is also something I'm starting to agree feels a bit out of place. We live and learn. Next piece will be even better.

 

Then again, if I get more feedback throughout the day, I'll upload a version 2.0 tomorrow.

 

Hmm, then maybe if you want...we could work together in the future. I'm a pretty decent singer, but not professional. 

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