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retrobakon

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What's up? Alright, so I'm currently in the works on this short story right, and I've begun drafting it. I need some peeps to read it and give me some feedback on it.

Title: Unquiet Quiet (the title of the first chapter is the title of the whole story)

Premise: A kid is home alone in the 80's (lel not during Christmas), the power goes out, and he has to turn it back on. And yep, there's a creature stalking him. I know it sounds very generic, but there's a lot more going on that I don't need to mention. 

In any case, the story's done, and I mainly need some feedback on the writing of it. Just let me know what you like, dont like, whatevs. I know it's short, but its a short story.

Chapter1.docx

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