slice of life Good Morning Scaredy Breeze

[Kivil 1,721]

I just finished writing a fanfiction for my new oc Scaredy Breeze. I just want to know what you think about it and I want to know if I should continue writing fanfics.

 

Here is the link to the fanfiction

[Perradial 114]

Hi!

Here are my notes:

• Story goes nowhere, does nothing. It has barely any conflict. To make this particular story work, draw it out and give details. Party of One is a good example. (One thing that makes the plot to the story even more important is the fact that this is an OC fic.)
• There is no apparent point to SB being a breezie. The story would be of the same quality were she a pony.
• Characters are two-dimensional, bland, Mary Sue-ish.
• Very, very rushed. 
• Grammar/spelling errors.
• The POV switches are very distracting. Maybe use breaks like *** or something. But don't just say that you're switching which character you're talking about; show, don't tell.

To be frank, this was really not a good fic, since it, as I said, goes nowhere and does nothing. I understand this is your first fanfic, and that's okay. These are common mistakes, and they can be fixed.

 

And don't say, "I want to know if I should continue writing fanfics." Write if you want to write! If you do want to, then you say, "I want to know how to get better at writing."

Edited February 14, 2016 by Tintinnabulation