critique wanted FireTwilight sketch in Digital

[ChikaChan 7,320]

Sooo,what do you guys think? @w@ it took me like 15 minutes to sketch her! X'D

 

[twiia 1,842]

Sooo,what do you guys think? @w@ it took me like 15 minutes to sketch her! X'D

 

Firetwilight sketch.png

Looks great! Theres several details you're missing, but its just a sketch, so nice work!

[Teavvi 627]

Wow, looks really good as a sketch! I could never draw that good...

[ShadowEclipse 1,209]

So far so good. Nice sketch 

[ChikaChan 7,320]

@,I don't even know how to color it still sooo....does that count?   

[Teavvi 627]

@Princess-Moonlight, I don't even have any markers or crayons or anything like that at home. (Actually, I do but all I have is the color green...hehe) so...your still better.

[Vulcan 3,254]

I'm not sure if this just a styled choice, but in my opinion the neck is a bit too short and thick and the body looks a bit too long. The proportions  need to be worked on.

 

 

All in all I still enjoyed it  ^ ^

[Teavvi 627]

Oh, and also it's not any normal sketch. It's a miracle of miracles!

[ChikaChan 7,320]

What about this one? D: I made it last night o~o

 

 

 

[twiia 1,842]

What about this one? D: I made it last night o~o

 

 

Fire Twilight 2.png

 

Looks great! I like the detail in the eyes~

[LeftDuality 65]

Well. I guess Im too lazy to write. If you want to, I can offer you a redline on this one Are you intrested?

Edited December 15, 2016 by LeftDuality

[DEAD_ACCNT 46]

Good work on that sketch! 

[ChikaChan 7,320]

@@LeftDuality,If you want to ^^ I'm open for it >~> 

[Ando333 135]

The time it took for you doesn't matter. Try to do it well with proper pratice and speed will come automatically.

 

The anatomy is not well developed, as in:

There's no neck below and an arm is comming from the face almost.

There's no perspective, the front and back part of the body aren't well connected and don't show a proper perspective.

The wing of the back commes from a different place than the wing from the front.

The head is too little, you can see the horn comming from the very top of the head when it must come from the front, but both forehead and head in general aren't well developed. (Imagine the drawing without the hair/flame and you will see).

 

You need to understand the 3d shape and forms of what you want to draw in order for it to make sense. You are commiting a very common mistake in beginners that is symbolizing parts instead of knowing how they actually are. I explain these things in more detail and more things you need in my second post of this thread, in case you are interested: https://mlpforums.com/topic/161837-art-aid-thread/

Also, for dynamic and action drawings like the one you are trying to do, you should need to practice other fundamentals first too, like action lines and depth/perspective.

Edited January 15, 2017 by Ando333