Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 5, 2016 Share July 5, 2016 (edited) 1x1 with Meson Bolt, branching off of prior RP, FoE: Aftermath. Title is a work in progress. RP: https://mlpforums.com/topic/154071-foe-aftermath-after-the-fact-1x1-with-meson-bolt/ Edited October 17, 2016 by Kronos the Revenant Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 5, 2016 Share July 5, 2016 ...Well, here's my character link, just in case you need it: https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/foray-4amul3r109-r9193 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 5, 2016 Author Share July 5, 2016 Alright, no need to really have it confirmed for use, really. But, since we're gonna be doing this anyways, might as well: https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/kronos-foe-r9358 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 5, 2016 Share July 5, 2016 Right, ahh... you gonna create the actual RP page? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 5, 2016 Author Share July 5, 2016 Eeyup, here it is: https://mlpforums.com/topic/154071-foe-aftermath-after-the-fact-1x1-with-meson-bolt/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 13, 2016 Share July 13, 2016 Eh, not to be rude but... mind explaining what just happened? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 13, 2016 Author Share July 13, 2016 The part of Kronos' brain that's a computer did something to him similar to what PTSD does to a soldier. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 13, 2016 Share July 13, 2016 That's not much of an explanation... What caused it? Is it actual PTSD or just something like it? And why did you have that happen at that moment? If I don't get some info, I can't really have Foray react accordingly. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 14, 2016 Author Share July 14, 2016 It's just something like that. Here's the best explanation I can give you: Kronos' brain is 1/4 computer, which mainly stores all forms of memory in his system. Every once in a while, a traumatic memory from his past comes up, causing Kronos to have a "PTSD" episode. In a way, it's something like PTSD. It usually happens if he or someone else mentions anything having to do with a traumatic event or if something somehow gets him to inadvertently remember something traumatic, such as his own recollection of his own memories, which rarely ever happens. That being said, this'll be one of the rare times that that'll happen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 14, 2016 Share July 14, 2016 Right, ahh... Just a suggestion -- if you're trying to write a character with something similar to post-traumatic stress disorder... I'd research a bit more about it and how to implement it better to your character. Here's a couple good links: http://writeworld.org/post/37760448322/writing-ptsd-and-other-mental-disorders http://www.nimh.nih.gov/health/topics/post-traumatic-stress-disorder-ptsd/index.shtml As far as I know (and I don't know a lot, but...) PTSD doesn't invoke headaches or losing consciousness. And I stand by what Foray said, he was overly-dramatic about it... and it kinda looked like he was just vying for sympathy Sorry if I'm coming off as harsh, but this is a common writer's mistake and it's super annoying. I know because I've annoyed several people with one of my own mentally-unstable characters before, so... yeah, I'm not perfect. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 14, 2016 Author Share July 14, 2016 Well, I didn't say that he has PTSD exactly, per say, but rather, remember, he's a cyborg who's cybernetics have been altered from the conditions of the wasteland, so, in a way, this is probably his cybernetic parts malfunctioning and working a different way, thus causing these spastic episodes Kronos is having. I'm not sure if that makes any sense whatsoever, but that's probably a more definitive definition I can give for that behaviour Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 14, 2016 Share July 14, 2016 Yeah, the point is it's super obvious he wants attention/sympathy. I just want to help you not do this again, since you'll likely embarrass yourself. Like... seriously, be glad this is a 1x1 RP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 14, 2016 Author Share July 14, 2016 Yeah, okay. I gets it. Still, i figured that that would've become an interesting thing about him, but you pointed out some things that seems out of place. Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 14, 2016 Share July 14, 2016 Eh... PTSD (and all mental disorders) are only interesting when they make sense. For example... well, Foray's irrationally afraid of both Leviathan Power Armor and radroaches, simply because she's watched both of them kill someone close to her (and almost kill her too). Random mental breakdowns based on some computer malfunctions, however, is a much less interesting disorder. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 14, 2016 Author Share July 14, 2016 Yeah, i guess so. Still, it's a thing about him being in the wasteland for so long that he's like this. I thought that it'll make sense for someone like him........am I trying way too hard to make him seem interesting? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 14, 2016 Share July 14, 2016 Having mental breakdowns isn't something that just "happens", even if it's a result of him wandering the wasteland. They have to be triggered by something. Again with Foray, she has to either see a Levi or see (or hear) a radroach to freak out. If say, something damaged his computer and he's still shaken up about it, then if he sees something similar to that thing, it would be triggered, that'd be better. And yeah, you probably are, actually. Characters should be interesting and likable because of their personality, likes, and dislikes. If you're relying too much on powers, weaknesses, or backstory to make your character interesting, you might wanna check the first three. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 15, 2016 Author Share July 15, 2016 Hmm, okay, i see what I've been doing wrong this whole time. Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 22, 2016 Share July 22, 2016 Go ahead and post again. Foray's not really doing much right now, just keeping the fire alive and waiting for him to return -- not enough to meet 200 words. ^^; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 22, 2016 Author Share July 22, 2016 Oh, okay. I'll just fast forward him a couple of hours. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 July 29, 2016 Share July 29, 2016 Sorry for not being active, I've been dealing with family issues and stuff, and roleplaying on the phone isn't exactly appealing. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 July 30, 2016 Author Share July 30, 2016 It's okay. I started a Borderlands-esque RP with some other members, so i was pre-occupied. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 August 14, 2016 Share August 14, 2016 It's okay. I started a Borderlands-esque RP with some other members, so i was pre-occupied. Hey, uh... I may have found a way to easily continue RPing. If you're still interested... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 August 15, 2016 Author Share August 15, 2016 Hey, uh... I may have found a way to easily continue RPing. If you're still interested... Still am, buddy. Just posted not too long ago. :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meson Bolt 2,647 September 7, 2016 Share September 7, 2016 So ah, yeah... two questions. First, where do you want the story to go, and secondly, are you pushing for Kronos and Foray to be in a relationship? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kronos the Revenant 1,971 September 7, 2016 Author Share September 7, 2016 (edited) I'm just gonna go wherever you want the story to go and whether or not a Kronos x Foray thing should be going on should be up to you. I mean, in the Borderlands RP I'm in, Spectre is thinking about shipping his character with Kronos as well, and it's another guy. So, basically, it's up to you where the story goes in terms of plot and relationship Edited September 7, 2016 by Kronos the Revenant Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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