critique wanted Need help editing and/or revising fanfic.

[BrawnyCharger 511]

I'm currently writing a fimfic that is 4 chapters long and I've just completed the first chapter. I don't want to reveal anything about it on the board just yet. But I would like to help edit the fic and have any suggestions as to what I should change about it. If you would like to help me, please PM me and I will send you a copy of the fic.

 

It is a docx file so you may need a word processor that can read a docx file.

 

You can post any constructive criticism here on the board without revealing anything.

 

Thanks. I'd appreciate the help.

[Hazard Time 1,127]

I'll include my review of your first chapter as an attachment.

 

Just so that you know, anything I say that may come off as abrasive is not meant to be taken personally.  Your fan fic does have promise, but it needs a lot of work.

Fan Fic Peer Review.docx

[BrawnyCharger 511]

I'd like a second opinion on this please if possible. I'm 2 chapters in and heavily updated the 1st one.

Edited August 11, 2016 by BrawnyCharger