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I've seen a lot of really good and really bad OC's here. So I decided to share my opinion. I'll be judging of if I can see it being in the show, colors, and cutie mark. Stuff like that. Also Anything that isn't in the show won't be critiqued. Since they'd end up with a bad review. Reindeer OC's are allowed though.

So yeah start posting.

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https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/choco-delight-r4723

 

Here. Have a look at this OC I made a couple years ago. 

Yay first critique! Keep in mind I suck at writing my thoughts XD

 

She's so adorable! And I really like her story. I also like how you decided to keep her weight realistic since she eats lots of sweets. x3

A+ for her <3

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Yay first critique! Keep in mind I suck at writing my thoughts XD

 

She's so adorable! And I really like her story. I also like how you decided to keep her weight realistic since she eats lots of sweets. x3

A+ for her <3

 

Hey thanks for the critique! Could you perhaps do one more? 

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Hey thanks for the critique! Could you perhaps do one more? 

Of course I can! I'll do as many as you want x3

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I really love the story! Though Having some of the mane color the exact same yellow as the coat doesn't loo good. Other than that I like him.

Yea...I was experimenting with various shades, but the pony maker I was using didn't have many options...

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Sorry for not replying sooner. My motivation ended up going down the drain ^^'

Pretty black pone. Like I said with Golden Spike though... None of the mane colors should be the exact same shade. Other than that I like how she looks.

You've got to be really careful adding canon characters into backstories. It's highly frowned upon.

Other than those two things I like her.

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I like the colors but alicorns are very highly looked down upon unless there's a really good reason that they became one.

He comes from far beyond Equestria and lived in a village of about 20 Alicorns but left to go his own way.

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Well, here's my OC, Layla Shade:

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/layla-shade-r9691

 

She's very... outlandish, so I'm curious to get your opinion of her. XD

My opinion is you should really stick with one race instead of having a hybrid...

Here's my OC, Astera Nebulous.

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/astera-nebulous-r9690

 

I haven't figured out 'everything' about her yet, but I am close.

Alicorns are a bad idea. Especially with those powers. And it really shouldn't also be a bat pony :c

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My opinion is you should really stick with one race instead of having a hybrid...

Well, that's what I would have done if I wanted a more normal OC, but I actual prefer odd, unique characters. (I've actually gotten a lot of praise for Layla's outlandish nature). Also, my close friend NightmareLuna800 and I wanted our OCs to be related and so I sort of had no choice. XD

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Alicorns are a bad idea. Especially with those powers. And it really shouldn't also be a bat pony :c

For some reason I saw that coming, lol. Anyway, well, I just have a fondness for Alicorns, although I do like others too, don't get me wrong. And if you want the truth on the bat pony part.. It's just cause I like bat ponies. :P

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Here is my OC, her name is Thallia, named after the chemical Element Thallium. Thallium is a super toxic metal witch was used to murder people, but you can identify it really easily in a corpse by it's typical green emission spectrum, therefore my OC is green ^-^ Thallium also comes from a greek word which means "green leaf".

 

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I noticed that you previous critiques were rather mild. But please, don't be afraid, give it to me really hard!  :=:

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You've got me curious, so I'd like to know your opinion on my first pony OC (but far from my first Roleplaying character).

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/eqw-characters/_/unapproved/glacies-frost-r438

Blue pone! <3

Love the looks omg

This is probably my favorite pony OC now tbh. I really love it! And it was a good idea on limiting his magic. It makes him seem more real. I love him! <3

Here is my OC, her name is Thallia, named after the chemical Element Thallium. Thallium is a super toxic metal witch was used to murder people, but you can identify it really easily in a corpse by it's typical green emission spectrum, therefore my OC is green ^-^ Thallium also comes from a greek word which means "green leaf".

 

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I noticed that you previous critiques were rather mild. But please, don't be afraid, give it to me really hard!  :=:

Oh hey I've seen you around before. 

Green and pink huh? She still reminds me of Fluttershy a lot. I think it's the mane color. But she's still really cute!

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Blue pone! <3

Love the looks omg

This is probably my favorite pony OC now tbh. I really love it! And it was a good idea on limiting his magic. It makes him seem more real. I love him! <3

Thank you for the kind words. If you've any other thoughts on the history or his personality, please let me know. I'm always looking for ways to improve.

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Blue pone! <3

Love the looks omg

This is probably my favorite pony OC now tbh. I really love it! And it was a good idea on limiting his magic. It makes him seem more real. I love him! <3

Oh hey I've seen you around before. 

Green and pink huh? She still reminds me of Fluttershy a lot. I think it's the mane color. But she's still really cute!

W...w...what? You have nothing negative to say???? I was really hyped right now to see some really harsh criticism, but this is kinda dissapointing honestly. You know, I get so many compliments on my drawings, and it's not like that I don't appreciate them, but I would really love to also get some criticism sometimes.

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Sorry for not replying sooner. My motivation ended up going down the drain ^^'

Pretty black pone. Like I said with Golden Spike though... None of the mane colors should be the exact same shade. Other than that I like how she looks.

You've got to be really careful adding canon characters into backstories. It's highly frowned upon.

Other than those two things I like her.

It's alright and yeah I know, her coat was meant to be a very dark grey instead of black, but it came out darker than I had hoped when I had drawn her.. As for her mane and tail, it was meant to be black with silver streaks, I might redo her at some point with making her coat a lighter grey and her mane a darker grey. As for her backstory, I know what you mean, while she was 'adopted' or 'taken in' by Luna, she has her limitations and refuses to become an alicorn, seeing what ascension can do to a pony.

 

Other than that thank you for the critique!

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