critique wanted Anyone want to edit/critique scripts for me?

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I'm writing scrips for an MLP fanmade episode project of mine, but sometimes you need another set of eyes to look at said scripts.  That's what I need.  So I am requesting the assistance of anyone who would like to edit/critique the scripts I'm doing.

So far I've got one complete, so if you wish to have a look and give me feedback, let me know and I'll PM you a copy of the script (I feel oddly uncomfortable making the raw script public, but if I need to provide a public copy for this section, then I will do so).

(Also, I'm sorry if this is in the wrong section due it being about a script and not a fully-fledged descriptive story).

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I can probably find time to do it. What kind of feedback? Grammar, plot holes, etc?

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1 minute ago, BronyNumber42licious said:

I can probably find time to do it. What kind of feedback? Grammar, plot holes, etc?

Pretty much any of that stuff.  I'm rather new to all of this, so anything I can learn from would definitely help me.  I'll send you a PM of the script.