Cider Contest 4.0: Haiku Challenge

[Longhaul 6,470]

Oh, Trixie darling,
do you really feel that you
can beat Starlight now?

Starlight Glimmer: 8

 

[ChB 18,532]

15 minutes ago, Sherbert Music-Guard said:

Twilight Races ahead
To second place, all you lot
Seven ciders down

Sorry. First line has six syllables, when it should be five.

Twilight is at seven.

 

[Sunny Fox 5,929]

Rares sips her cider,
She will show you how it's done
With her grace and style.

Rarity: 7
 

[Lord Valtasar 12,685]

now demonstrating
her newly aquired powers
Trix casts an age spell

Trixie: 9

Edited August 5, 2018 by Lord Valtasar

[Dawnchaser 🌄 8,087]

Ah think haikus suck.
Has to be five seven five.
Who came up with this? 

 

Aj=10

Edited August 5, 2018 by Dawnchaser

[The Kaeya Simp 13,953]

Twi is trying to beat
AJ and everypony
else, eight ciders gone

[Sunny Fox 5,929]

1 minute ago, Dawnchaser said:

I think haikus suck.
Has to be five seven five.
Who came up with this? 

 

Aj=10

That would be the Japanese...

Haiku poetry,
Even when about ponies,
Brevity is king.

Rarity: 8

[Kevin Tang 2,422]

I will never understand foreign poem or in this case haiku. Rhymes work very different in English than they are in my native language. :/

[Lord Valtasar 12,685]

snips is old snails young
can't question her magic now
she will reign supreme

Trixie: 10

[The Kaeya Simp 13,953]

Twilight loves cider
She must win, she can't lose
Nine ciders away

[ChB 18,532]

17 minutes ago, Lord Valtasar said:

Trix wants a duel
with twilight to exile her
she will show them all

Trixie:8

Technically, "exile" has three syllables, not two. 

 

12 minutes ago, Sunny Fox said:

Rares sips her cider,
She will show you how it's done
With her grace and style.

Rarity: 7
 

"Style" has two syllables, not one. 

 

I'll let you both off the hook for now, but next time, please check your syllable count: https://syllablecounter.net/count

 

Thank you.  

[Longhaul 6,470]

Spells and pretty lights
won't win a drinking contest,
only what's consumed.

Starlight Glimmer: 9

 

[Dawnchaser 🌄 8,087]

I'm much funnier.
when i am drunk off my butt.
sadly, i'm sober. 

Aj=11

[Lord Valtasar 12,685]

4 minutes ago, ChB said:

Technically, "exile" has three syllables, not two. 

 

"Style" has two syllables, not one. 

 

I'll let you both off the hook for now, but next time, please check your syllable count: https://syllablecounter.net/count

 

Thank you.  

changed. but.. how so? sylables count by sound in haikus as i understand it

Edited August 5, 2018 by Lord Valtasar

[The Kaeya Simp 13,953]

Twilight's tenth mug
She is already drunk, do
not get in the way!

[Lord Valtasar 12,685]

Trixie put a dome
over the town to prevent
twilight's comming back

Trixie: 11

[ChB 18,532]

3 minutes ago, Lord Valtasar said:

how so? sylables count by sound in haikus as i understand it

It's often pronounced as "e-xi-le," but you have a point there. Other sources say it's 2 syllables, so perhaps it's debatable how many syllables "exile" actually has. My bad. From now on, I'll allow room for nuance in such cases. 

[Longhaul 6,470]

Not one to give up,
Starlight keeps herself going
and downs more cider.

Starlight Glimmer: 9

 

[Lord Valtasar 12,685]

this town shall suffice
she will rule with iron hoof
and will be adored

Trixie: 12

@ChB why don't you participate in your games?

[Longhaul 6,470]

It's a tough battle,
but Starlight will at least place
within the top five.

Starlight Glimmer: 10

 

[Dawnchaser 🌄 8,087]

Advice for those in,
a difficult position.
First, be flexible.

Aj=12

[Lord Valtasar 12,685]

she put up her flags
removed untrustworthy wheels
and made a grand throne

Trixie: 13

[DJShy 872]

Magic is the best!

Look, I can teleport now!

Wait, where'd the map go?

 

Trixie:14

[Dawnchaser 🌄 8,087]

If you're not being,
able to count to seven,
you can use fingers. 

Aj=13

Edited August 6, 2018 by Dawnchaser
Fixed

[Longhaul 6,470]

Trixie has help now.
Maybe Starlight should give up?
Nope! She carries on.

Starlight Glimmer: 11