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fan fiction Two short poems to test the waters


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The Mask

 

 

Smile

Hop

Smile

Laugh

Smile

Giggle

How a mask holds

When it is fixed by society

When madness

is the same a sadness

Has that mask cracked

What holds it in place

Are you a victim

Do you feel hate

Half inside

Buried beneath

the Place the other half lives

One little crack

Creates the perfect hole

Is the smile real

Does it reach beyond the eyes

Does it come from the soul

Can two parts never be one

Both are victims

One shared fate for two forces

Both wish for kindness

Both wish

To smile

To hop

To giggle

To laugh

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The Forest

 

 

The trees talk through the wind

The quiet one walks through

Alone but surrounded

The quiet on walks through

The trees tell tales

The quiet one walks through

Dragons defeated by the kind

The quiet one walks through

Unchangeable by the confounded

The quiet one walks through

The wind dies

She sighs

She walks through

Quiet courage radiates

Panic dissipates

She walks on

No need for praise

No want of fame

She walks forward

She moves between the trees

There is no sound

She is the only thing to move

She reaches the edge

Journey over

She moves on

silently

Like a butterfly

Quietly braving

The world

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Well I hope you don't think they suck.

 

Any advice is welcome :)

 

--Rebel

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They are both really good, I especially like the second one, but it could do without some of the stronger words and phrases like "No need for praise", "No want of fame", and "braving". All in all, great work! Edited by Ice
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