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Voltex Pixel - Farewell

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Voltex Pixel - Farewell

"Never say Farewell with a sad tone because Friendship is going to be forever."

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3 hours ago, C. Thunder Dash said:

Would you like some feedback on this?

Yes.

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2 hours ago, Voltex Pixel said:

Yes.

Ok...

You have conflicting styles in this piece. You start out with an acoustic guitar that does not change progressions, fade out and bring in the EDM stuff. The EDM doesn't reflect the mood of a farewell. You need to really work on expanding your ideas and explore different styles that go along with your intro. For this style, soft rock, soul, or even orchestral chill would go with your opener. However, your chord structures need tons of work, as they staled out early too. 

Kudos to using a solid 4 chord progression but...you had a mismatched chord and the progression itself staled out, knowing you were in the key of C Major. 

Here's what you had

I-V of V-IV-I

Here are some suggestions

I-V7-IV-ii

I-ii-IV-V

vi-IV-I-V

ii-IV-vi-V

You can also do round progressions such as these

I-IV-ii-V-iii-vi-ii-V-I

I-V-ii-vi-IV-vi-ii-V-I

Unfortunately, as I said earlier, the EDM section needs to go. 

All in all, I have to unfortunately say this piece needs a complete redo. You need to venture out from your comfort zone sometimes, because you will be able to work with a lot more and be flexible. Don't be discouraged by my feedback, for no one is perfect but we can strive to be the best we can. If you need help on how to get out of your comfort zone, my inbox is always open. 

 

 

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