What do you think of this scene from my fanfiction?

[TheUnknownPhantom5 67]

Scootaloo was getting more, and more annoyed with these Cutie Mark Stories.

" Ugh! These namby-pamby stories aren't getting us any closer to our cutie marks! They're all about finding who you really are and boring stuff like that." She complained.

"Well maybe that's the true way to earn a Cutie Mark. You know patience and". Apple Bloom began to say only for Scootaloo to interupt her.

"Apple Bloom I'm only going to say this once so listen closely. "The club was my idea remeber, I asked you to join because I felt sorry for you, so do me a favor and Keep Your Mouth Shut unless you can think of something useful you stupid farm girl!"

[Venomous 18,813]

@TheUnknownPhantom5

Moved to AK Yearling’s Writing Resources

[They call me Loyalty 1,941]

I can almost hear the voice of scootaloo. Up until the "stupid" part, which feels unearned. But then, again. There is not much context given.

[Evil Pink One 12,954]

6 hours ago, They call me Loyalty said:

I can almost hear the voice of scootaloo. Up until the "stupid" part, which feels unearned. But then, again. There is not much context given.

I agree.,. And how did this happen?

[TheUnknownPhantom5 67]

Can someone please tell me the differance between AK Yearling's Writing Resources, and Written Fan Works, and how will I know what belongs in what?

[ZiggWheelsManning 7,297]

The last line in the fanfic sounds angry.