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Oh boy, oh boy, oh boy.

 

No cliffhanger? :blink:

 

Oh well, wonderfull chapter anyways. Even more drama.

 

Oh god I wonder where this might go.

 

Heheh, not every chapter must end in cliffhangers :P

 

Read my blog post on my page for fimfiction.

 

I talk about every chapter I do, and why I did it in that way.

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Thank you.

 

Also.

 

Heheh, not every chapter must end in cliffhangers :P

Maybe, but I love cliffhangers. That feeling when you just want to know what thing happens next.

 

But still, it was a very great chapter indeed. I must compliment on your choice of words for specific acts in the story, makes the whole thrill of reading so much greater. The same smile as before is now glued to my face because of this amazing piece of story.

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Thank you.

 

Also.

 

 

 

Maybe, but I love cliffhangers. That feeling when you just want to know what thing happens next.

 

But still, it was a very great chapter indeed. I must compliment on your choice of words for specific acts in the story, makes the whole thrill of reading so much greater. The same smile as before is now glued to my face because of this amazing piece of story.

 

Oh trust me, the story is only getting better.

 

 

Applejack is next.

 

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Should I just post it here?

 

Haven't read more than untill this:

 

 

I began to smell the sweet scent of apples.

 

And I'm already jumping up and down in joy.

 

That chapter is building up to something awesome, I can feel it!

 

It can't be anything but great when

When Applejack is part of it!

 

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Should I just post it here?

 

Haven't read more than untill this:

 

 

I began to smell the sweet scent of apples.

 

And I'm already jumping up and down in joy.

 

That chapter is building up to something awesome, I can feel it!

 

It can't be anything but great when

When Applejack is part of it!

 

 

 

Applejack c:

 

 

And yes, you should post it here c:

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And yes, you should post it here c:

 

In that case.

 

 

 

Waking up in a new world.

 

Everything is looking normal, except it is not.

The feeling is off, something in the air.

A door knock and cheeks feeling hot.

Yellow of skin, pink of hair.

 

Bright world I see.

With a friend by my side.

Flap of wings, she looks so free.

Colorfull in person with a smile so wide.

 

Heart pounds for sparkling and shy.

Cheeks turning red.

Avoid their pain, have to lie.

Hugging, tears I shed.

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In that case.

 

 

 

Waking up in a new world.

 

Everything is looking normal, except it is not.

The feeling is off, something in the air.

A door knock and cheeks feeling hot.

Yellow of skin, pink of hair.

 

Bright world I see.

With a friend by my side.

Flap of wings, she looks so free.

Colorfull in person with a smile so wide.

 

Heart pounds for sparkling and shy.

Cheeks turning red.

Avoid their pain, have to lie.

Hugging, tears I shed.

 

I shall post this.

 

Everywhere.

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Very nice new chapter, I really like the way that you've captured Applejacks personality. Also the way of which the chapter builds up to the romance to come instead of jumping head first into it.

 

Once again, this smile of mine is carved into my face, your story never ceases to amaze me.

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Very nice new chapter, I really like the way that you've captured Applejacks personality. Also the way of which the chapter builds up to the romance to come instead of jumping head first into it.

 

Once again, this smile of mine is carved into my face, your story never ceases to amaze me.

 

C:

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Tell me what you guys think c:

I’ve never read any fanfics before, but you've done such a good job of promoting it that I thought I should give at least one a try. In my opinion the story and plot concepts are very good and definitely outweigh the grammar issues. I did read some of the comments on the fic site and Idk why they were so critical? I mean, like I said, I’ve never read any other fic’s so I’m not one to judge, but still it seems like their criticizing was a bit harsh. Anyway I loved the story and hope to see more chapters, good luck :)

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I’ve never read any fanfics before, but you've done such a good job of promoting it that I thought I should give at least one a try. In my opinion the story and plot concepts are very good and definitely outweigh the grammar issues. I did read some of the comments on the fic site and Idk why they were so critical? I mean, like I said, I’ve never read any other fic’s so I’m not one to judge, but still it seems like their criticizing was a bit harsh. Anyway I loved the story and hope to see more chapters, good luck :)

 

Oh trust me,it was bad when I first put it up.

 

Grendo has edited for me a lot.

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I just realized that you beat me to the fanfic I was going to write a month ago... Cept it was more violent than a love story.. and there were 4 people... touche *insert spellcheck and accents*

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I just realized that you beat me to the fanfic I was going to write a month ago... Cept it was more violent than a love story.. and there were 4 people... touche *insert spellcheck and accents*

 

Wait... what?

 

I... stole your idea?

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