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'AppleJack: The Sun' - A poem dedicated to AppleJack

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I read that anything with text goes into this category. I hope poetry counts as Fan Fiction. :unsure:
"The Sun"



Sweet coat of honey, with warm amber bristle;

Figure divine, angel's hammer and chisel.

Spoiled eyes and envy, cast swift harsh dismissal;

Venomous words cause their beauty to fizzle.


Some call you simple, outlandish or uncouth;

Can one be so blind, to not see honest truth?

Faithful and strong, such an admirable youth;

An eye for an eye, and a tooth for a tooth.


Three scarlet apples, ripe and ready to reap;

Mountains and valleys, some gentle some steep.

Picked fruit of the tree, nourishment fills holes deep;

Soft sweeping melody, will send me to sleep.


Emerald lens, glistens softly in the light;

Mirror of beauty, what a glorious sight.

Its impossible, yet this moment feels right;

How can the sun shine, through the thick dark of night?


Thread of bright soft gold, soaking wet in the rain;

Your pure burning soul, will warm me once again.

The scent of straw, pervades from your tail and mane;

Being one with nature, in bone, blood and vein.


Pure stark white marks, upon your golden visage;

Gazing upon you, inspires great courage.

Six bright jewels, such a beauteous assemblage;

Beacons alight, guide lost ships to their berthage.


You the sun shining, keep the darkness hiding;

Bearing good tidings, with five ponies riding.

In me confiding, secrets speaking or writing;

Memory abiding, beauty residing.

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:3 WUNDERBARE!!!

 

Wow... that was... actually very gripping and ambient! I love how every so often you go that bit deeper like, "bone, blood and vein". That really does it for me ;)

 

Plus, it rhymes... we need more of that on this site XD Nice to see that you have employed it to create a vision or mental image... to the point where I've actually had to close my mouth... perhaps that's just me being over-reacting, I don't know XD

 

I need more!! MOAR!

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:3 WUNDERBARE!!!

 

Wow... that was... actually very gripping and ambient! I love how every so often you go that bit deeper like, "bone, blood and vein". That really does it for me ;)

 

Plus, it rhymes... we need more of that on this site XD Nice to see that you have employed it to create a vision or mental image... to the point where I've actually had to close my mouth... perhaps that's just me being over-reacting, I don't know XD

 

I need more!! MOAR!

 

Thank you so much Ballistic! ;) And yes both the third last and last stanza's are very powerful (at least to me). Doubling the rhyme rhythm in the final stanza was to finish strong, and the descriptive metaphors and similies in the lines prior were a build up to that.

 

Yes! Rhyming is fun! :lol: I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for the kind words. :)

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