breaking from the norm(read it, you'll hate it)

[Rainbow Dash 1,471]

so here is my fan-fic it has a lot of swearing so i had to post it someplace else.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/82808/1/a-break-from-the-norm/chapter-1-sweet-apple-acres
 

It is the first chapter of many.  i might have to change the length of it. I dont know if it was too short or too long. anyways please enjoy it

[longgone 873]

Interesting story. Hah, I kept imagining Mordecai was the jaybird from Regular Show! But yeah, I'll be interested to read the next chapters.

[Friendship_Cannon 1,676]

sounds quite interesting, belonging to the story... not bad.

It could be a bit longer, though, what happens seems to happen in a rush, it could be worked out a bit to make it more authentic. About the grammar, you should maybe check that again, that just should be correct. The language... well, sorry bro, I don´t approove how much cursing and vulgar language is going on, but maybe that is just me...

solid work so far.