"Nero's Room" Short fan fic, moderately gory, not extremely

[Nero Amentia 2]

The tag below should open a Windows Word Starter thats a story about a unicorn named Nero whom lived in a dull town called "Pony Vile" 

Do please rate and tell me any errors I may have made. 

Nero Amentia.docx

[Pixel Mouse 84]

Very poetic. I really just skimmed through it and didn't check for many errors, but it seemed very well written to me. It used some forms of language that some people might not understand.

 

“My dear boy, do you understand what you ask? Though I must agree with would be a pleasant task. Let me ask you now simply and fast, yes I shall as long as you last.”

 

 

Maybe at some point you will write the whole story? Given that the town had the name "Pony Vile" I wonder if burning it to the ground maybe wasn't the worst idea... Well, it certainly was a backfire on Nero. He wanted that dullness removed and burning it did just that, but not the way most would expect dullness to be removed.

 

An excellent cinimatic short!

[Nero Amentia 2]

Thanks! This is just one of the many stories I plan on writing, in the future I already have an idea for a sequel. My teachers tell me im great at making short stories so I appreciate you guys reading it.