"Against The Rules" Rainbow Dash human fic

[Dashabel 384]

I started writing my first official fanfic, but it's not getting a lot of feedback on fimfiction.net, so I just thought I'd show all you guys as well. You're not as harsh as the story-beaters on that website, I'm sure....

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/103191/against-the-rules

I'd be reaaaaally grateful if you could comment on my story, either here, or if you have an account, on fimfiction. Should I continue writing it? I really want to but is it really that bad?

[Timberwolf102 1]

I can't wait to see what happens to her! It looks so exciting! I can tell it will be a exciting fanfic, and I almost fell to the floor when she go[scentence removed due to spoilers]. Yes, you should continue writing it.

[appledan20% 6]

i read your story and i really liked it. i hope you will continue it. kind of sad though cause it reminds me of some of the dreams i have which are very vivid. way to vivid . i wish that was me turning from human to pony.