sad A Canterlot Wedding-The Alternate Ending

[Wardaddy 470]

Probably not, but if it's made clear that he soon realized his mistakes, I'm sure he'd make an excellent mentor to the new Captain-in-training, probably because he'd be like: "I don't want you making the same mistakes I made." It's important that we learn from our mistakes, and I do like to imagine that sometime from now, even if Shining Armor doesn't get to be captain again (then again, he and Cadance now rule the Crystal Empire), I'm sure he'd be commended for learning from his mistakes and even given a new high guard rank.

 

I don't know if it's terrible planning on Celestia's part, but honestly, it's not really a big deal for me, personally. Besides, I would consider it bad luck that Celestia lost to Chrysalis who fed off plenty of Shining Armor's love for Cadance, but at the same time, I'd regretfully consider it karma for Celestia for not taking Twilight's concerns seriously, which brings me to my next point: the message that she delivers at the end about learning to trust your instincts, which may I add is a rare message to send, is a lesson that Celestia herself may have just learned. Ultimately, this motivates me to write my own story in which Twilight's peers deeply apologize to her for not taking her concerns seriously and admit that it was irresponsible on their part and Twilight warmly forgives them.

 

I know that in your story, Twilight's real upset with her peers right now, but I should greatly hope that she'll find it in her heart to reconcile with them and even forgive them.

But of course! I could never intend for Twi to stay mad for a long damn time. It just wouldn't sound like her, and that would be bad writing. At some point in my story, Twilight will forgive her friends, Shining Armor and Celestia included, but for now I'm gonna drag her hurt and pain out, dishing it back on the Mane 5, Celestia and Shining especially, when their respective times come.

 

I didn't quite understand what you meant at first, but now I do. It would be a great lesson for Shining to learn, and there's no doubt the rewards would come, and come big. Promotion, a chance to teach his successor not to make the same mistakes, and of course, renewed peace and love with his LSBFF. Happiness all round, says I.

 

Yeah, it's quite possible Celestia may have learned this lesson herself, and in the midst of her apology, she brought it up with Twilight, to say that she should have listened to Twi at the time, and that not even she is perfect, nor is she the immortal, all-powerful sun goddess she was made out to be. And yeah, it was purely karma biting Celestia in the flank. She failed to heed the advice of her student, and thus she had to pay for it. By the way, when will you start on that fanfic? I'm looking forward to reading it.

[BlueEyedPegasus 59]

But of course! I could never intend for Twi to stay mad for a long damn time. It just wouldn't sound like her, and that would be bad writing. At some point in my story, Twilight will forgive her friends, Shining Armor and Celestia included, but for now I'm gonna drag her hurt and pain out, dishing it back on the Mane 5, Celestia and Shining especially, when their respective times come.

 

I didn't quite understand what you meant at first, but now I do. It would be a great lesson for Shining to learn, and there's no doubt the rewards would come, and come big. Promotion, a chance to teach his successor not to make the same mistakes, and of course, renewed peace and love with his LSBFF. Happiness all round, says I.

 

Yeah, it's quite possible Celestia may have learned this lesson herself, and in the midst of her apology, she brought it up with Twilight, to say that she should have listened to Twi at the time, and that not even she is perfect, nor is she the immortal, all-powerful sun goddess she was made out to be. And yeah, it was purely karma biting Celestia in the flank. She failed to heed the advice of her student, and thus she had to pay for it. By the way, when will you start on that fanfic? I'm looking forward to reading it.

Alright.

 

I'm glad you think so, and I also have this imaginative idea for the new high rank Shining Armor could achieve after training his apprentice: Secretary-Captain of the Royal Canterlot Guard! Yeah, I thought it up myself! Now you're probably wondering: "What would Shining Armor's duties be this new high rank of Royal Guard?" Well, what I have in mind is while he's still ruler of the Crystal Empire along with his wife Princess Cadance, whenever the Royal Canterlot Guards aren't powerful enough and need his help, he will come to give them orders and see that extra protection is provided as he did before! That way he can still remain a Royal Guard! Doesn't that sound exciting?

 

I don't know when I'm gonna get started, but I know I will soon. In the meantime, I have some other stories on Deviantart to take care of first.   

[matt0044 3]

So apparently, somebody mentioned me here because I have an opinion that opposes you guys. Well now, how about you say it to me directly (assuming you have deviantart accounts)?

 

Part 1: http://matt0044.deviantart.com/journal/In-Defense-of-A-Canterlot-Wedding-Part-1-349179048

 

Part 2: http://matt0044.deviantart.com/journal/In-Defense-of-A-Canterlot-Wedding-Part-2-360382581

 

Part 3: http://matt0044.deviantart.com/journal/In-Defense-of-A-Canterlot-Wedding-Part-3-362084371

 

Part 4: http://matt0044.deviantart.com/journal/In-Defense-of-A-Canterlot-Wedding-Part-4-update-363859840

 

I recommend looking at the comments below such as this and this.

 

And don't gloss over them, actually read them, think about what they have to say and then respond.

 

Thank you,

Matt

Edited October 5, 2013 by matt0044

[MorganaRarityRainbow 89]

I am so totally digging this! This is so freaking awesome! I absolutely love this! This is so intresting and suspenseful I love it!

[Grigora_Keshet 1]

update as soon as poable pls this is so leaving me in suspence it is one of the best fan fic i have ever read remember to do the updating as soon as you can

[Wardaddy 470]

update as soon as poable pls this is so leaving me in suspence it is one of the best fan fic i have ever read remember to do the updating as soon as you can

Yeah, np. Sry it's taking so long. I've been busy, what with work and all. There's that, and there's trying to figure out what to write next. Thankfully, right now I'm free, so I'll get started. Stay tuned!

Chapter 3-Chasing Shadows

 

Having pulled themselves together after the emotional beatdown by Twilight, the Mane 5, Spike and Celestia awaited Shining Armor and Cadance's return, hopefully with the purple unicorn by their side. Unfortunately, their hopes were quickly dashed when the two returned empty-hoofed. Despite his panting, Shining was the first to speak. "We looked everywhere......she could have been.......even the guards.........haven't seen her" "This is becoming very serious" Said Celestia with grave concern. "What are we gonna do princess?" Asked Applejack worriedly. "I can.......issue........an alert......to the other garrisons..........if you want.......Princess". Said Shining. Surprisingly, Celestia did not respond. She was frozen in place, her expression showing signs of great horror and dreadful worry. At the present moment, she was using her magic to look for any trace of Twilight within the castle or the castle grounds, only to find nothing. "Everypony......." Said Celestia, her voice wrung with horror. "Twilight is not in the castle, nor is she within the grounds. I fear she......may have left Canterlot".

 

The hall had once again gone quiet. Everypony inside it was equally as horrified as Celestia. They had hurt Twilight to the point where she couldn't even linger around Canterlot, and this made them feel worse. They were now faced with the reality that they had driven Twilight off, and at this point, she could be anywhere. "Shining, I want every guard on or off duty to take on the following orders. Order number one is to bring the wounded to the hospital. Number two is to comb the city for any Changeling stragglers and to set up a watch on all borders surrounding the city. Number three is to keep watch for a purple lavender unicorn by the name of Twilight Sparkle. If she is found, she is to be returned to Canterlot for immediate debriefing, unharmed". "As you wish ma'am". Replied Shining. "And Shining," Said Celestia, directing her next order at Shining personally. "Twilight Sparkle's parents should be informed of this development as soon as possible". Almost instantly, Shining felt his heart leap into his throat. This would mean telling his mother and father, Twilight Velvet and Night Light, of the events that took hold during the rehearsal, and he knew that it wouldn't end well for him. Still, they had to know that Twilight had run off, and that came first. "Yes Princess. Of course". Said Shining, the smallest hint of fear intertwining the firm tone of his voice. With that, the captain left to gather his fellow military commanders, as well as the available troops in Canterlot, for the forthcoming mission briefing. For her last issue of orders, Celestia turned to face Cadance and the Mane 5. "Cadance, I need you, the girls and Spike to go to Ponyville. If Twilight's gone anywhere, it's Ponyville that she should be. I will have the district military commander wait for you at the station. His orders are as follows: Locate a purple unicorn by the name of Twilight Sparkle and return her to Canterlot unharmed". "Yes Aunt Celestia". Said Cadance, who then motioned to the girls and Spike to follow her out. Now on her own, Celestia said to herself "Wherever you are Twilight, I hope you can hear this. We are all sorry for what happened at the rehearsal, and I hope for no bad blood between us after this. Please come back safe. We're all sorry, and we all miss you........."

 

Meanwhile, Twilight had arrived back at Ponyville. There were no other thoughts other than the single decision to return to her library ,where she'd spend the rest of her days in solitude. Her position as Celestia's student was over; there'd be no lessons about friendship for her to tend to, nor would there be any special tasks that the Princess would hand unto her. It was just her now, and as the situation stood, she deserved to be alone. Slowly, she walked through the crowd of happy, good-spirited ponies going about their respective businesses, not noticing that that commanding officer of the Ponyville Royal Guard garrison, Claymore, was making his way towards the train station, flanked by a small column of his guards. Neither Claymore nor his guards noticed Twilight either; they had their eyes fixed on the station and were too focused to pay attention to anything else. Twilight perked up her ears to listen to the guards, after hearing Claymore say something to his adjutant about Princess Cadance and the Element Bearers coming to Ponyville on important business. She was quick to guess that Cadance and her "friends" were coming for her. Of course, it would be Tartarus before that happened. Twilight continued on to the library, doing her best to not catch the guard's attention.

 

Moments later, Twilight reached the library. As quickly as she could, she drew the curtains, slammed the door and bolted it shut, before going upstairs and lying down on her bed to deal with the thoughts that plagued her mind. The rehearsal, the attack by the Changelings, the tongue-lashing she gave Celestia, Shining Armor and the Mane 5 earlier; it was tormenting her to no end, and sadly, the most she could do was wish that none of this had happened. If it weren't for Chrysalis, and the evils of her deception, none of this would've come about. "Oh Celestia....." Said Twilight to herself, her voice beginning to crack as tears welled up in her eyes. "Why?". Once again, the pain became too great. Twilight broke down, sobbing out every tear she had left in her head. After a while, she finally drifted off into slumber, never thinking of the events that were to come next.

[Grigora_Keshet 1]

thank you!!!! i understand that you dont have time i am having a hard time finding time to make ocs for one of my friends so she can make her story

[rst64tlc 11]

You know, I was just looking for a good old 'Twilight get betrayed at the Canterlot Wedding' story, or just the 'Betrayed Wedding' MLP Ver. and I got to say this is some good stuff. I just finished reading

 

'Faith and Doubt' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/51867/1/faith-and-doubt/prologue-whispers-in-the-dark

'Grave' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/47701/1/grave/friendship-is-a-lie

'A canterlot Wedding -Aftermath' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/49776/1/a-canterlot-wedding-aftermath/prologue-dreams

 

I just became a sucker for these TBCW stories (Twilight get betrayed at the Canterlot Wedding). But i have to ask, what is Twilight going to do now, she's free from the burdens of 'friendship', no longer Celestia's student and isn't exactly on friendly terms with her brother, so what now?

 

*Fixed*

Edited November 3, 2013 by rst64tlc

[draph91 9]

You know, I was just looking for a good old 'Twilight get betrayed at the Canterlot Wedding' story, or just the 'Betrayed Wedding' MLP Ver. and I got to say this is some good stuff. I just finished reading

 

'Faith and Doubt' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/51867/1/faith-and-doubt/prologue-whispers-in-the-dark

'Friendship is a Lie' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/47701/1/grave/friendship-is-a-lie

'A canterlot Wedding -Aftermath' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/49776/1/a-canterlot-wedding-aftermath/prologue-dreams

 

I just became a sucker for these TBCW stories (Twilight get betrayed at the Canterlot Wedding). But i have to ask, what is Twilight going to do now, she's free from the burdens of 'friendship', no longer Celestia's student and isn't exactly on friendly terms with her brother, so what now?

 

the second story is called Grave, Friendship is a lie is the name of the first chapter, I just thought you wanted to know that  

[Wardaddy 470]

You know, I was just looking for a good old 'Twilight get betrayed at the Canterlot Wedding' story, or just the 'Betrayed Wedding' MLP Ver. and I got to say this is some good stuff. I just finished reading

 

'Faith and Doubt' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/51867/1/faith-and-doubt/prologue-whispers-in-the-dark

'Friendship is a Lie' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/47701/1/grave/friendship-is-a-lie

'A canterlot Wedding -Aftermath' http://www.fimfiction.net/story/49776/1/a-canterlot-wedding-aftermath/prologue-dreams

 

I just became a sucker for these TBCW stories (Twilight get betrayed at the Canterlot Wedding). But i have to ask, what is Twilight going to do now, she's free from the burdens of 'friendship', no longer Celestia's student and isn't exactly on friendly terms with her brother, so what now?

Thanks for taking the time to read this. After reading the numerous other ACW fanfics floating around the interwebz, I felt it was only right and just that I add my own insight into what could've happened after the rehearsal. And considering how bad I felt for Twilight, it was no surprise to me. Having read "Friendship Is A Lie", I've gained more inspiration, which I will mix into this still-budding work.

 

As for what Twilight will do following the events that opened this fanfic, for now I will have her spend her days in exile, feeling unloved and unwanted. This will allow me to use her like a ghost, teleporting in and out of wherever the Mane Five, Shining Armor and Celestia may be, reminding them of how they treated her on that fateful day. At the same time, I will focus on the Mane 5, Shining and Celestia, and how they deal with the fact they were nearly responsible for the death of their sister, student, and dearest friend, the one who brought them all together. If I were you, I'd take a seat and stick around, because I promise this will be the ACW fanfic to top all others.

[rst64tlc 11]

the second story is called Grave, Friendship is a lie is the name of the first chapter, I just thought you wanted to know that  

Oh, thanks for pointing that out, ...wait...Grave as in the US name for Gospel for the second season of Megaman NT Warrior?

 

Thanks for taking the time to read this. After reading the numerous other ACW fanfics floating around the interwebz, I felt it was only right and just that I add my own insight into what could've happened after the rehearsal. And considering how bad I felt for Twilight, it was no surprise to me. Having read "Friendship Is A Lie", I've gained more inspiration, which I will mix into this still-budding work.

 

As for what Twilight will do following the events that opened this fanfic, for now I will have her spend her days in exile, feeling unloved and unwanted. This will allow me to use her like a ghost, teleporting in and out of wherever the Mane Five, Shining Armor and Celestia may be, reminding them of how they treated her on that fateful day. At the same time, I will focus on the Mane 5, Shining and Celestia, and how they deal with the fact they were nearly responsible for the death of their sister, student, and dearest friend, the one who brought them all together. If I were you, I'd take a seat and stick around, because I promise this will be the ACW fanfic to top all others.

I'm glad I help inspired you more now and I really looking forward to this. I really wish there was a place were we can any and all ACW fanfics or any that ties into them, that way it can help a lot of Bonies find different sites and inspire them to do more things.

 

Now for the story questions:

 

1.) The " have her spend her days in exile, feeling unloved and unwanted. This will allow me to use her like a ghost" part, so is she 'self-discorded'?

 

2.) I can understand about the Mane 5, Shining and Celestia, but what about Candance, Spike, Twilight's parents? 

 

3.) Will Celestia, by any chance, try to take some drastic measures to met Twilight? (like sent the Royal Guards to trap her).

 

Thx for replying.

Edited November 3, 2013 by rst64tlc

[Wardaddy 470]

Oh, thanks for pointing that out, ...wait...Grave as in the US name for Gospel for the second season of Megaman NT Warrior?

 

I'm glad I help inspired you more now and I really looking forward to this. I really wish there was a place were we can any and all ACW fanfics or any that ties into them, that way it can help a lot of Bonies find different sites and inspire them to do more things.

 

Now for the story questions:

 

1.) The " have her spend her days in exile, feeling unloved and unwanted. This will allow me to use her like a ghost" part, so is she 'self-discorded'?

 

2.) I can understand about the Mane 5, Shining and Celestia, but what about Candance, Spike, Twilight's parents? 

 

3.) Will Celestia, by any chance, try to take some drastic measures to met Twilight? (like sent the Royal Guards to trap her).

 

Thx for replying.

In a way, I guess she is self-discorded, only in this case she's not greying over, because in my opinion, that can only happen if Discord had any direct involvement in turning Twilight against her element. Right now however, it's safe to assume Twi is currently discordant. 

 

As for Spike, Cadance and Twi's parents, the latter will be involved in the next chapter, as Shining will have to break the news to them of their daughter's disappearance, and his link to this development. Cadance will, meanwhile, not only lead the Mane 5 in their search for Twilight, but she will have to battle with her doubts about her future husband as well. He loves her very much, and she knows it, and knowing this, he can be forgiven and the two will marry someday after this. However, after hearing of how harshly Shining dismissed her own sister, is she sure that she's found her dream hubby?

 

Now Spike...........Spike will be going through a very difficult, traumatic phase in his life. As we all know, he is Twilight's personal assistant, diligent, loyal and helpful, to the point where you could call him Twilight's little brother. However, he also abandoned Twilight at the rehearsal, and now that he knows his actions could've cost what could be affirmatively called his big sister her life, he instantly takes on irrevocable guilt. For now, he will accompany Cadance and the Mane 5 in the search for Twilight, however he, too, must battle his inner demons. He was Twilight's personal assistant, for Celestia's sake, and he nearly left her for dead. Considering the fact that he's also a baby dragon, a child, it takes a terrible toll on him.

 

The situation is very much the same for the Mane 5. After leaving Twilight in the coldest way possible, they each begin to question their right to be Twilight's friend, and deep inside them, seeds of blame and conflict begin to blossom. It gets worse, however. They also begin to question their respective responsibilities as the bearers of the Elements of Harmony. As Cadance said, they were chosen because they each carried the traits the Elements represented, and on that fateful night, none of them stayed true to their Elements. Loyalty, Kindness, Laughter, Honesty and Generosity.......none of these traits gave Twilight a reason to smile. They all walked out on her, along with the Mane 5, and it is because of this that the Mane 5 each begin to question their roles as the bearers, and as Twi's friends. Not only is this bad news for Celestia, but it is also bad news for Equestria, as deep within the shadows, Chrysalis and her Changelings begin to regroup and prepare for the next attack, the Changeling Queen hell-bent on getting her revenge.

 

Lastly, Celestia will only take drastic measures if Twilight takes them first, e.g. attacking her guards or endangering Equestria in any way. However, she will find difficulty in issuing drastic orders, should this happen, as she needs Twilight to come back to Canterlot unharmed. Attacking her will only drive them further apart, as will attempting to apprehend her. And as previously said, Celestia wishes for no bad blood between herself and Twilight. Taking drastic measures against her will end in exactly that.

Edited November 3, 2013 by Firebolt Blitz

[rst64tlc 11]

In a way, I guess she is self-discorded, only in this case she's not greying over, because in my opinion, that can only happen if Discord had any direct involvement in turning Twilight against her element. Right now however, it's safe to assume Twi is currently discordant. 

 

As for Spike, Cadance and Twi's parents, the latter will be involved in the next chapter, as Shining will have to break the news to them of their daughter's disappearance, and his link to this development. Cadance will, meanwhile, not only lead the Mane 5 in their search for Twilight, but she will have to battle with her doubts about her future husband as well. He loves her very much, and she knows it, and knowing this, he can be forgiven and the two will marry someday after this. However, after hearing of how harshly Shining dismissed her own sister, is she sure that she's found her dream hubby?

 

Now Spike...........Spike will be going through a very difficult, traumatic phase in his life. As we all know, he is Twilight's personal assistant, diligent, loyal and helpful, to the point where you could call him Twilight's little brother. However, he also abandoned Twilight at the rehearsal, and now that he knows his actions could've cost what could be affirmatively called his big sister her life, he instantly takes on irrevocable guilt. For now, he will accompany Cadance and the Mane 5 in the search for Twilight, however he, too, must battle his inner demons. He was Twilight's personal assistant, for Celestia's sake, and he nearly left her for dead. Considering the fact that he's also a baby dragon, a child, it takes a terrible toll on him.

 

The situation is very much the same for the Mane 5. After leaving Twilight in the coldest way possible, they each begin to question their right to be Twilight's friend, and deep inside them, seeds of blame and conflict begin to blossom. It gets worse, however. They also begin to question their respective responsibilities as the bearers of the Elements of Harmony. As Cadance said, they were chosen because they each carried the traits the Elements represented, and on that fateful night, none of them stayed true to their Elements. Loyalty, Kindness, Laughter, Honesty and Generosity.......none of these traits gave Twilight a reason to smile. They all walked out on her, along with the Mane 5, and it is because of this that the Mane 5 each begin to question their roles as the bearers, and as Twi's friends. Not only is this bad news for Celestia, but it is also bad news for Equestria, as deep within the shadows, Chrysalis and her Changelings begin to regroup and prepare for the next attack, the Changeling Queen hell-bent on getting her revenge.

 

Lastly, Celestia will only take drastic measures if Twilight takes them first, e.g. attacking her guards or endangering Equestria in any way. However, she will find difficulty in issuing drastic orders, should this happen, as she needs Twilight to come back to Canterlot unharmed. Attacking her will only drive them further apart, as will attempting to apprehend her. And as previously said, Celestia wishes for no bad blood between herself and Twilight. Taking drastic measures against her will end in exactly that.

thanks for answering my questions Firebolt Blitz. I'll just kick back and relax until the next chapter. Peace. (love the cupcake)

[Wardaddy 470]

thanks for answering my questions Firebolt Blitz. I'll just kick back and relax until the next chapter. Peace. (love the cupcake)

You're more than welcome, and please, do stick around. Things are only just hotting up, as the search for Twilight begins. Meanwhile, Chrysalis rallies her Changelings in preparation to attack Canterlot once more, and in the deep caverns that run below the Neighagra Falls, a broken-hearted, lonely purple unicorn lives out her days in exile, using her teleportation spell to haunt those responsible for her pain, reminding them of what they had done, and who they had done it to.

[draph91 9]

In a way, I guess she is self-discorded, only in this case she's not greying over, because in my opinion, that can only happen if Discord had any direct involvement in turning Twilight against her element. Right now however, it's safe to assume Twi is currently discordant. 

 

As for Spike, Cadance and Twi's parents, the latter will be involved in the next chapter, as Shining will have to break the news to them of their daughter's disappearance, and his link to this development. Cadance will, meanwhile, not only lead the Mane 5 in their search for Twilight, but she will have to battle with her doubts about her future husband as well. He loves her very much, and she knows it, and knowing this, he can be forgiven and the two will marry someday after this. However, after hearing of how harshly Shining dismissed her own sister, is she sure that she's found her dream hubby?

 

Now Spike...........Spike will be going through a very difficult, traumatic phase in his life. As we all know, he is Twilight's personal assistant, diligent, loyal and helpful, to the point where you could call him Twilight's little brother. However, he also abandoned Twilight at the rehearsal, and now that he knows his actions could've cost what could be affirmatively called his big sister her life, he instantly takes on irrevocable guilt. For now, he will accompany Cadance and the Mane 5 in the search for Twilight, however he, too, must battle his inner demons. He was Twilight's personal assistant, for Celestia's sake, and he nearly left her for dead. Considering the fact that he's also a baby dragon, a child, it takes a terrible toll on him.

 

The situation is very much the same for the Mane 5. After leaving Twilight in the coldest way possible, they each begin to question their right to be Twilight's friend, and deep inside them, seeds of blame and conflict begin to blossom. It gets worse, however. They also begin to question their respective responsibilities as the bearers of the Elements of Harmony. As Cadance said, they were chosen because they each carried the traits the Elements represented, and on that fateful night, none of them stayed true to their Elements. Loyalty, Kindness, Laughter, Honesty and Generosity.......none of these traits gave Twilight a reason to smile. They all walked out on her, along with the Mane 5, and it is because of this that the Mane 5 each begin to question their roles as the bearers, and as Twi's friends. Not only is this bad news for Celestia, but it is also bad news for Equestria, as deep within the shadows, Chrysalis and her Changelings begin to regroup and prepare for the next attack, the Changeling Queen hell-bent on getting her revenge.

 

Lastly, Celestia will only take drastic measures if Twilight takes them first, e.g. attacking her guards or endangering Equestria in any way. However, she will find difficulty in issuing drastic orders, should this happen, as she needs Twilight to come back to Canterlot unharmed. Attacking her will only drive them further apart, as will attempting to apprehend her. And as previously said, Celestia wishes for no bad blood between herself and Twilight. Taking drastic measures against her will end in exactly that.

I noticed that Princess Cadance didn't scold Rarity, is there a reason for that? I'm gonna say that you couldn't think up what to say for her, not that it's a problem by the way

You're more than welcome, and please, do stick around. Things are only just hotting up, as the search for Twilight begins. Meanwhile, Chrysalis rallies her Changelings in preparation to attack Canterlot once more, and in the deep caverns that run below the Neighagra Falls, a broken-hearted, lonely purple unicorn lives out her days in exile, using her teleportation spell to haunt those responsible for her pain, reminding them of what they had done, and who they had done it to.

wait she was in the library at the end of the last chapter, is it a timeskip?, please tell me it is, that would leave a plot hole, a big one

My Little Pony: FiM is the sole property of Hasbro and Lauren Faust. This is a not-for-profit fanfiction made for the reading pleasure of myself and others.

 

Chapter 1-Fallout

 

"This day has been just perfect

The kind of day of which I've dreamed since I was small

Everypony I'll soon control

Every stallion, mare, and foal

Who says a girl can't really have it all?"

 

As Chrysalis, the evil, parasitic, bug-like Queen of the Changelings laughed gleefully, Twilight took the chance to end this. Moving over to Cadance, she said "Quick! Go to him while you still have the chance!" before zapping her restraints to nothingness with her magic. With no time to lose, Cadance went over to her husband-to-be, the Captain of the Royal Guard and Twilight's brother, Shining Armor. With a quick zap of her magic, Shining was freed from Chrysalis's grasp. "Wha-whe-huh? Is....is the wedding over?" Before Cadance could answer, the tall, menacing figure of Chrysalis stomped in front of them, holes in multiple sections of her legs and body. "Its, all, over!" Boomed the changeling queen fearsomely. "Your spell! Use your spell!" Cried out Twilight, attempting to coax her brother to action. However, again the mocking, rage-inducing laughter of Chrysalis rang throughout the wedding hall. "What good would that do? My changelings already roam free". Indeed, the Changelings continued to wreak havoc throughout Canterlot. "No!". Quickly, Shining attempted to conjure his shield spell, to no avail. With a droop of his ears, he assumed defeat. "My power is useless now. I don't have the strength to repel them". But then, Cadance moved up against him, and reassured "My love will give you strength". Again, the evil laughter cut them down. "What a lovely but absolutely ridiculous sentiment!" As Chrysalis looked out the window, admiring her handiwork, Cadance and Shining looked at each other, before the former closed his eyes. Again, Shining summoned the energy of his shield spell to his horn, before Cadance added the power of her magic to his own. With a crackle of electricity, the two touched horns, expanding the power further into a much stronger force. The magic enveloped the two, as they opened their eyes in awe, before again locking eyes with each other, smiling, and closing them, allowing the magic to grow in strength again, lifting them off the ground. As the power grew and expanded, the Mane 6 were forced to avert their eyes from the sheerness of the spell. Chrysalis then turned around to look, her eyes going wide and her mouth agape in shock and horror. The hall started to rock with the immense force of the energy. Finally, Shining and Cadance opened their eyes at the spell's climax, allowing the magic to envelope them in a bright white light, before sucking the magic inwards and exploding it back out in a massive pulsing wave of sheer magical power. Chrysalis screamed for her life as the wave collided with her, pushing her out of the hall and into the horizon beyond Canterlot. Joining her in the wave was the thousands of Changelings who were terrorizing the city, caught completely unaware by the sudden pulse. In what seemed like an eternity, the wave finally disapparated, leaving Chrysalis and her Changelings to plummet to the ground, screaming into the distance.

 

 

Back in the wedding hall, Cadance and Shining began their descent to the ground, as the magic that they summoned together began to subdue. Everypony in the room began cheering, celebrating the victory against a force that had taken them by surprise, all except Twilight, who was facing the doorway, her back turned to the celebration. Celestia approached the lavender unicorn, gently placing a hoof on her shoulder. "Don't worry about me. I'm fine. You have a real wedding to put together". Slowly, Twilight looked behind her, a tear rolling down from her left eye, before looking back down again. "I've got a real wedding to put together, huh?" Asked Twilight, her voice hoarse with pain, and a sadness that Celestia quickly picked up on, concerning the sun princess greatly. "Are you OK Twilight?" Asked Celestia. Behind her, the celebrations died down as the other ponies in the room noticed Twilight still had her back turned. "You OK there Sugarcube?" Asked Applejack. However, she was met with no response. "What's the matter Twiley?" Asked Shining, concerned. "We won, didn't we?" This managed to elicit a response from the lavender unicorn, her voice still hoarse with pain. "Yeah Shining, we won". Shining's mood did not change either. He was now very concerned for his sister, who had managed to free his wife-to-be from the Canterlot Caves, the first step towards their victory against the changelings. Suddenly, Twilight spun around, slapping Celestia's hoof off her shoulder, almost dislodging the princess's golden horseshoe from its perch. Her face blazing with anger, Twilight yelled at the group in an almost unholy rage. "DO YOU TAKE ME FOR A FOAL OR SOMETHING?!!!" If you thought everypony in the room aside from Twilight was concerned, they were now terrified. Nopony had ever seen Twilight so angry, and yet they still didn't know the cause of it. Again however, Twilight continued. "You were my mentor Celestia! I believed in you! I trusted you! Luna help me, I even saved your kingdom twice for you! AND THIS IS HOW YOU REPAY ME?! You would abandon me for the sake of a COMPLETE STRANGER?!!!! And the enemy, no less!" Celestia was taken very much aback by Twilight's words. She knew why Twilight was angry, and on top of that there would be no consoling her. She, and everypony else involved in what happened at the rehearsal would be made to pay for their actions, especially Shining Armor. "Twilight, I know you are upset over what happened, but you must understand. We had no reason to believe that the Changeling Queen was impersonating the Cadance that stood before us, and as well as that your actions did not help matters either. In the end though, you were right, and we are all sorry for not trusting you, my most faithful student". Celestia lowered her head, in a request for forgiveness on behalf of herself and everypony else who abandoned Twilight. Little did she know, however, that Twilight would not accept that. "I cannot grant your forgiveness, Princess, because you still don't know the kind of danger I was left in when you abandoned me. And by the way, you told me that I had a lot to think about. Well princess....." Twilight slowly moved up to Celestia, ready to blast the next round of flak into her face. "WHO'S THE ONE THAT HAS A LOT TO THINK ABOUT NOW?!". Celestia stumbled back, shocked. She had officially become the first to realise exactly what kind of peril Twilight was placed in when she was left alone in the wedding hall. Cadance remained next to her husband-to-be, as frightened as everypony else. "Shining, honey, why is Twilight so angry?" When no response came, Cadance looked at Shining, to find his face etched with fear and guilt, for he also knew the reason Twilight was mad, and he also knew it was his fault that this powder keg finally blew. Twilight then moved over to the Mane 5, who were all sharing mixed emotions. Rarity had her hoof over her mouth, eyes wide in shock. Applejack was clearly having trouble trying to process the situation. Normally, she was second-in-command to Twilight, and if anypony knew the unicorn better, it was her. Rainbow's eyes were also wide in disbelief. She had seen Twilight lose her cool before, but never like this. Pinkie's emotion was probably the dullest of the 5, her mane had gone straight, and her pink colouring had taken on a slightly greyish tone. Her eyes were flooding with tears. Fluttershy was terrified. Her eyes were awash with tears and while trying to stay still, she tried her best to keep her distance from the enraged lavender unicorn that stood before her. Finally, Twilight spoke again. "Now, you five........traitors-" Before Twilight could continue, Applejack immediately cut in. "Traitors?! Now see here missy! You've got no right to be callin' us traitors! You just burst in, cornered the princess and started wailin' about her bein' evil with no proof! How in Tartarus did you expect us to believe you?!" "Because, AJ" Growled Twilight "you are my friends! What kind of friends abandon their friend to go and comfort somepony that they never met before?!" "But Twilight, we won, didn't we?!" Cried Pinkie. "Besides, I know what'll cheer you up. A party!" However, Twilight was quick to shoot her down. "Pinkie, this is one issue that cannot be solved with a party, and of all ponies here, even YOU SHOULD KNOW THAT!" Almost instantly, Pinkie recoiled in sheer terror. Suddenly, Rainbow Dash had had enough. "That's it!" Roared the sky blue Pegasus, who then charged at Twilight, pushing her back-first into the hall's back wall. "I've heard enough out of you egghead!" Roared Rainbow, directing her fury at Twilight. "Ok, so you got left alone. What else did you have to lose?!". Suddenly, Twilight bowed her head down, tears beginning to stream down her face. "You really want to know Rainbow?" "Know what?" Asked Rainbow, confused, but still angered. Twilight then looked up at her, transformed from a raging bull to an emotional wreck. With a sniff, she produced the answer. "MY LIFE!!!"

 

Almost instantly after Twilight blared out what could've been the true cost of their mistake, everypony in the room except for Twilight fell silent. Rainbow was especially shocked. She had come within an inch of bucking Twilight in her face, and now she found herself releasing the sobbing unicorn from her grasp. Nopony could believe what they just heard, especially Shining Armor. For the Mane 5, their reaction to Twilight's death would've been for mostly personal reasons, but for Cadance, Shining Armor and Celestia, things went much, much deeper than that. Both Celestia and Shining Armor were placed in charge of security for the duration of the ceremony, and with Twilight's death, all their efforts to protect Equestria would've been in vain. If Chrysalis had succeeded, then Shining would've failed his duty to protect Canterlot as Captain of the Guard. On top of that would have been the failure to protect his future wife as her future husband, and above all else, he would've failed to protect Twilight as her Big Brother Best Friend Forever. And in conjunction, Celestia would've failed in her duty to protect her subjects as one of the princesses of Equestria, as well as failing to protect her most faithful student, as her teacher and mentor. And on Cadance's part, if Twilight had indeed perished at the hooves of Chrysalis, then she may never have made it out of the caves, and she would die as well. Everypony then came to realize the bigger picture: Twilight was indeed the lock that guarded the door to Equestria's future, and if it hadn't been for her, then Chrysalis would've become the key that would have surely unlocked Equestria's fall. "Can you see it now everypony? Can you see it Cadance?" Asked Twilight painfully. "She could've killed me! Clearly by abandoning me, you only proved that my life wasn't important to ANY OF YOU!" WHAT KIND OF MONSTERS ARE YOU?! My friends, my family, my m......" Twilight couldn't say anymore. The pain had become too great for her to ignore. Almost as quickly as she rounded on her friends, she fled the hallway, sobbing. The guards that lined the corridor could only exchange worried glances as the distraught unicorn tore past them, not caring who saw her.

 

Back in the hall, the atmosphere had become very dull and sad, as if a long, painful fall from grace had occurred there, which it had. As the Mane 5, along with Celestia and Shining Armor, began sharing thoughts and feelings, Cadance was still trying to process what she had just heard. Because of the actions of her aunt, the bearers of the Elements of Harmony, and above all else, her husband-to-be, her favourite filly may have met her end, and if that had happened, then the fall of Equestria would've been assured as well. At once, she regained a grip on herself, having comprehended that Twilight was hurt by everypony she loved and trusted. With newfound anger and determination, Cadance turned to face the group, and get some answers. "Shining, is it true?" Shining couldn't answer. Instead, he looked away from his future wife, his face etched with remorse. This only served to infuriate Cadance, who advanced upon the glum captain. "Shining, what happened?!" Left with no way out, Shining did his best to drown his sorrows, and explain to Cadance what had happened. Once he had finished, Cadance was left horrorstruck. "I......I.......I don't..........I-I........Shining, how?! How could you be so cruel?!" Cadance then turned to face the Mane 5, who could only return glum, sad expressions. "And you, you five.......you're her friends! How can you call yourself her friends after that?! And you are also the bearers of the Elements of Harmony! You're supposed to demonstrate what the Elements each represent, that's the sole reason why they chose you! Rainbow Dash, you are the Element of Loyalty. You should have stuck by Twilight's side no matter what! And you, Fluttershy. You are the Element of Kindness! You should've shown Twilight empathy when everypony else failed to! And you, Applejack. You may be the Element of Honesty, but the least you could've done was to give Twilight the benefit of the doubt! And yet you couldn't find it in your good character to do that!". Finally, Cadance faced her aunt, Princess Celestia, who looked as sad as only the sun goddess could get without totally breaking down. "And you, Aunt Celestia.......even you couldn't show your student the least bit of kindness that only a princess of Equestria could". Celestia could only lower her head in shame. Again, Cadance faced Shining, tears welling up in her eyes. "Shining......I thought you loved me!". Shining was shocked to hear this. He loved Cadance deeply, and to hear something like this was almost foreign to him. "But Cadance, I still do! How can you say such a thing?!" To Cadance, this was almost insulting. "If you really loved me Shining, then you wouldn't have treated my favourite filly like some piece of dirt! She's your sister! She's your flesh and blood, and yet you have the nerve to put me before her! Shining......how could you?!" "Cadance, please-" Celestia tried to interject, however Cadance silenced her before she could speak. "I don't want to hear it Aunt Celestia! You are in no position to say anything right now!" "Cadance......please" Shining struggled to find words. "We didn't know........I didn't know.........there was no way of knowing that that was the Changeling Queen". "You couldn't have known". Said Cadance. "You were under a spell. And yet, it's funny. You were the only pony who was around the impostor for most of the time, and yet you noticed nothing different about her behaviour". With that, Shining had run out of ideas. All he could do was hang his head in shame. "Now, if you'll all excuse me, there's a distraught, heartbroken little pony I have to see to". At once, Cadance began trotting towards the door, before stopping mid-journey. She turned to face the group one last time. "And as quoted by you, Shining Armor, you can forget about me marrying you. In fact, if I were any one of you, I wouldn't come near me or Twilight at all. And as you said, Aunt Celestia, you all have a lot to think about". 

 

As Cadance went off to find Twilight, Shining was left crushed. He was no longer the proud, happy stallion he was when Twilight arrived the previous day. He was now very much a shadow of his former self, his honour and respect ripped away from him. Karma had bitten him hard in the flank, as only yesterday it was him telling off his sister for upsetting his bride. Now it was his bride, or should I say, ex-bride telling him off for upsetting his sister. At this point, he didn't care if death was at his door. All he wanted was to apologise to Twilight, and to Cadance respectively. Unfortunately, the prospects of that happening looked bleak. All that was left for him to wonder now, was how things could get worse.   

and now for a reprise for This Day Aria (copied this off a fanfiction) so if you're on here Duragan, please don't kill me

 

(updated, so it makes more sense)

 

This day should have been just perfect,

The kind of day of which I've dreamed since I was small

But from too many mistakes

There's no love, dancing or cake

This day might never happen now at all 

Edited June 14, 2014 by draph91

[Wardaddy 470]

I noticed that Princess Cadance didn't scold Rarity, is there a reason for that? I'm gonna say that you couldn't think up what to say for her, not that it's a problem by the way

wait she was in the library at the end of the last chapter, is it a timeskip?, please tell me it is, that would leave a plot hole, a big one

and now for a reprise for This Day Aria (copied this off a fanfiction) so if you're on here Duragan, please don't kill me

 This day should have been just perfect,

The kind of day of which I dreamt when I was small,

But from to many mistake,

There's no love, dancing or cake,

This day might never happen now at all '

Well, I couldn't find much reason for Cadance to scold Rarity. She's the Element of Generosity, and I don't see how generosity could've helped Twilight in that situation, unless you're happy to enlighten me.

 

As for your second question, sorry! The answer to that would be a spoiler. Can't go around picking apart the next chapter, don't you know!

 

This day should have been just perfect,

The kind of day of which I dreamt when I was small,

But from to many mistake,

There's no love, dancing or cake,

This day might never happen now at all '

 A sad testament to an even more tragic truth. The day should've been just perfect, but because of that despicable, heartless Queen Chrysalis, and the even more heartless actions of Princess Celestia, Shining Armor and the Mane 5, Twilight's heart was broken, and her soul was crushed, and now the wedding may never happen at all.

Edited November 3, 2013 by Firebolt Blitz

[BlueEyedPegasus 59]

Well, I couldn't find much reason for Cadance to scold Rarity. She's the Element of Generosity, and I don't see how generosity could've helped Twilight in that situation, unless you're happy to enlighten me.

 

As for your second question, sorry! The answer to that would be a spoiler. Can't go around picking apart the next chapter, don't you know!

 

 A sad testament to an even more tragic truth. The day should've been just perfect, but because of that despicable, heartless Queen Chrysalis, and the even more heartless actions of Princess Celestia, Shining Armor and the Mane 5, Twilight's heart was broken, and her soul was crushed, and now the wedding may never happen at all.

It sure looks that way right now, considering how you've written it, but I have every bit of hope that everything will turn out alright in the end. Besides, I would like to know what you think of my idea of Shining Armor being promoted to Secretary-Captain Of The Royal Canterlot Guard.

[Wardaddy 470]

It sure looks that way right now, considering how you've written it, but I have every bit of hope that everything will turn out alright in the end. Besides, I would like to know what you think of my idea of Shining Armor being promoted to Secretary-Captain Of The Royal Canterlot Guard.

I thought I already gave you my input on that idea Blue Eyes. Anyway, it's not a bad idea, but the actual title of the rank could be rephrased into a more fitting, militaristic title. Other than that, it's a good concept. Furthermore, I can guarantee your hopes will come true. Twily will come around at the end of the day, but for now she needs to show Shining Armor how much damage he had done, along with her friends, and her mentor.

 

For your convenience, I will drop this one little spoiler: Chrysalis is rallying her Changelings to attack Canterlot again, only this time she will have her Changelings and herself move into strategic locations in both Canterlot and Ponyville, so as to tie up the Royal Guard in a nice big bow of chaos and confusion. Then, once she has the military distracted, Chrys will move her Changelings into their final attack positions, before letting all hell break loose in Canterlot. And this time, there will be no Twilight to rescue Cadance, Shining Armor or anypony. This will be Twilight's indirect revenge, as she will have shown Shining the consequences of his actions at the rehearsal. Canterlot would've fallen, she would've been killed, along with Cadance and the thousands of ponies resident in Canterlot, plus the Mane 5 and Celestia would've been transmorphed into Changelings loyal to only their Queen, and it would've been all, his, fault

Edited November 3, 2013 by Firebolt Blitz

[Wayvy 34]

I really love the way you described each pony's emotions - very detailed and realistic. I just find it a little too much for Cadance saying that she won't marry Shining Armor. But that's just my opinion. Aside from that, the story is perfect!

[Wardaddy 470]

I really love the way you described each pony's emotions - very detailed and realistic. I just find it a little too much for Cadance saying that she won't marry Shining Armor. But that's just my opinion. Aside from that, the story is perfect!

Thanks for the review! I had to really think about each pony's personality in order to cement an emotion befitting them. For Rarity, AJ and Rainbow, it was a no-brainer. But for Pinks and Fluttershy, well, I kinda had to improvise.

 

When you found Cadance saying she wouldn't marry Shining Armor, do you mean you found it too much for your heart to handle, or was I overdoing it when I typed that?

[Wayvy 34]

Thanks for the review! I had to really think about each pony's personality in order to cement an emotion befitting them. For Rarity, AJ and Rainbow, it was a no-brainer. But for Pinks and Fluttershy, well, I kinda had to improvise.

 

When you found Cadance saying she wouldn't marry Shining Armor, do you mean you found it too much for your heart to handle, or was I overdoing it when I typed that?

I find Cadance overdoing it when saying that. actually when I commented, i had read only the first chapter and didn't realize you are ready with others, so now I'm reading the other chapters. And they are all amazing! Very good work!

 

When I watched the episodes I was distracted by happy ending and took Twilight's problem to lightly. But after reading this and thinking about it - it is so realistic, i'm surprised I never had a second thought about how much Twilight was hurt.

Edited November 3, 2013 by Wayvy

[Wardaddy 470]

I find Cadance overdoing it when saying that. actually when I commented, i had read only the first chapter and didn't realize you are ready with others, so now I'm reading the other chapters. And they are all amazing! Very good work!

 

When I watched the episodes I was distracted by happy ending and took Twilight's problem to lightly. But after reading this and thinking about it - it is so realistic, i'm surprised I never had a second thought about how much Twilight was hurt.

Well now you do, and I'll take full creds for that, but while I will admit Twilight's actions were OTT, two wrongs never make a right, and that is something Shining and company clearly forgot. Their actions were, by all means, far worse than what Twily did. Ok, Twilight did make the bride cry, but for the love of Luna like, her brother, who she loved dearly and was so excited to see again, along with her friends who she cared for so much, and her mentor, whose happiness she worked so hard for, all broke her heart, and shattered her soul into tiny little pieces. How cold can somepony get like?

[Wayvy 34]

Well now you do, and I'll take full creds for that, but while I will admit Twilight's actions were OTT, two wrongs never make a right, and that is something Shining and company clearly forgot. Their actions were, by all means, far worse than what Twily did. Ok, Twilight did make the bride cry, but for the love of Luna like, her brother, who she loved dearly and was so excited to see again, along with her friends who she cared for so much, and her mentor, whose happiness she worked so hard for, all broke her heart, and shattered her soul into tiny little pieces. How cold can somepony get like?

You are right of course! I hope that everything will be alright for Twily in the end. She is my favourite pony after all ^^

I can't wait to read the next chapter, but don't worry if you need time. I mean it's better to take your time but make it good, than rushing it over.

[rst64tlc 11]

You know after re-reading these chapters, I found another fanfiction CW alt. ending.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/137474/1/cornholio4s-this-day-should-have-been-just-perfect/this-day-should-have-been-just-perfect-part-1

wish this update more.

[Wardaddy 470]

Finally! The author updated that fanfic.....

 

Fun fact: That particular fanfic served as the basis for my alternate ending, however I wanted to explore what would happen if there was no Council of Elrond to eat up the forthcoming chapters. And as you can see, this is the end result that hasnt quite ended yet. A longer, more drawn-out version of that fanfic. So far, Im quite proud of it.