Cancelled.

[Demirari 454]

It's a murderfest for anyone that is a Earth pony. Getting really racist here! And I hope there are more survivors... Feel bad for Bon Bon. Wait a sec... Bob Bon's corpse fell... Sweet lord, it's a conspiracy!

[Cerise Hood 102]

It's a murderfest for anyone that is a Earth pony. Getting really racist here! And I hope there are more survivors... Feel bad for Bon Bon. Wait a sec... Bob Bon's corpse fell... Sweet lord, it's a conspiracy!

We shall see, my friend...

 

 

The good news is that the violence is toning down.

 

Also, I'll be introducing a new character next chapter.

 

 

 

So I can put spoilers in spoilers?

Cool!

Now I can make an endless chain of

Spoilers!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Edited November 22, 2013 by EpicHarmony

[Trevor Bright 872]

Well...that just got 20% darker...

How does one insert a spoiler?

[Cerise Hood 102]

Well...that just got 20% darker...

 

How does one insert a spoiler?

Since when were you Rainbow Dash?

 

The answer, obviously,

 

is in a spoiler.

 

[ spoiler ].......[ / spoiler ] without spaces.

 

nlah blahb blah blan lbsn

blah spelling FAIL!

 

 

 

 

 

 

[Trevor Bright 872]

 

I don't know

I just

felt like

quoting RD

at that moment

in time.

 

Edited November 22, 2013 by Dave Pyro

[Demirari 454]

"A ninja threw a hoof granade at them, which missed and hit Sugarcube Corner. "

Granade should be grenade.

""We... Made... It..." She breathed. Pinkie Pie carefully open the bag she held, revealing the Cake Twins. The were crying"

The should be they.

And this one left me a bit confused.

Dodging an arrow, I jumped onto roof of Sugarcube Corner. Out emerged a straight-haired Pinkie Pie holding baby blue sack in her mouth. Using her usual stunts, she wove through an army of soldiers, with only a few cuts.

There should be a at "baby blue sack," so it should be, "a baby blue sack," if I'm not mistaken.

Minor mistakes. ^^

Edited November 22, 2013 by Demirari

[Irish Mist 119]

Well *sip* that escalated quickly. But seriously, this was interesting though I really felt you need to give more details and/or descriptions to what's going on.

[Demirari 454]

I agree with what SmileyV said, more description and slow down the speed. It is going a bit too fast for my taste. Slow and detail wins the race. ^^

[Not Mike Jones 5]

There will be a lot more blood. And death.

Hooray!

 

Honestly, this ain't that disturbing to me. Then again, I'm a little bit of a goreaphiliac (Is that even a word?) so don't be surprised. Nice work so far, can't wait to read more!