writing Becoming a Brony - A Poem

[ErBoi 501]

So, I slapped this poem together over the last little while and wanted to share it for the sake of receiving both praise and critiques (there are weak parts in it I want to fix up) because I'm considering making a short animation out of it.

 

 

Becoming a Brony

During my nightly ritual of wasting time on image boards

I feel amiss as I spot an image of a cartoon pony, then two, then three

Not much longer does it take for there to be hordes

“What a peculiar meme,” I think, “to fain interest in something so girly”

Putting it aside, I prattle on with internet scum

Over whom the victor would be between Goku or Superman

But more and more I see the words “So awesome!”

Adorned by a rainbow-coloured character with no hands

“Wait a second,” I thought, “could it really be?”

My feelings mix over the very idea, that such men

Could actually, truly enjoy My Little Pony

When nothing seems in it for them

How could this show garner so much popularity

How does it attract such a crowd

How, with names like 'Sparkle' and 'Rarity'

I mean, is this even allowed?

Doing what I always do when life doesn't make sense

I turn to the internet for answers to aid my strife

Listening to what fans have to say and accepting their two cents

I learn they call themselves 'bronies', and many do, in fact, have a life

Curious but still in need of convincing

I see mention of the name 'Faust', which I then pronounced “Fahst”

Maybe I can watch this without wincing

“At least one episode” I think, it won't mean too much time lost

The pilot wasn't bad, but not great

And thus far I'm not feeling too involved

But it seems I still have more on my plate

Because the plot was unresolved

Wrapping up the second episode, I'm still lukewarm

I understand at least some praise is in order

For past shows with the same audience followed a quality norm

That made enjoying them seem like something of a disorder

Now I'm feeling content, having given the show a chance

I feel mature, ignoring gender stereotypes

But I think I'll stop here and not advance

After all, I've work to do, and my teachers will have gripes

Yet some mystical force is calling me

Some slight temptation of origins unknown

Telling me to return to see friends like Pinkie

As though I know I yet haven't a feel for the show's tone

Not quite sure why, I move beyond episode two

I continue watching, making the show the soundtrack for my work-time

Episode after episode, I sit and view and listen to

Maybe I am enjoying it, after all, is that such a crime?

Working and watching, I continue along

I begin to marvel at the animation, inspiring to say the least

Genuine humour, loveable characters, wonderful songs

Who knew this show would be such a beast?

I'm reminded of what fun I had watching weekly cartoons as a child

Sonic The Hedgehog, Pokémon, Beast Wars, Ned's Newt

At the thought of just hearing their voices again, I smiled

Fond memories brought on by this show that's...cute

One episode startled me to come upon

It excited me, perhaps more than I care to admit

Because in it, I heard Big Cat Tigatron

Say the line, “I don't wanna talk about it”

And that, my good friends, is where the deal was sealed

For liking ponies, this has been my testimony

And I see absolutely no reason for me or you to keep it concealed

I am a proud brony

Edited February 28, 2012 by ErBoi

[Kazuki Fuse 534]

Haha! Great stuff, I feel like I was reliving my experience of becoming a brony all over again.

[Gaupa95 68]

It's great... I see many good lines there that reminded me of the self denial i did when i started waching the show... and the great feeling of acceping that "hey I'm watching a show for small girls and I like it!!"

[Discolt 53]

That was pretty fantastic. You are an amazing writer, an I applaud you a thousand times for this.

 

Now all we need is a reading of it by a sporty gentleman with a British accent. Then it'll be perfect.

[Rusty 4]

story of my life, except i also got to hang out with the girls in my grade feelsgoodman.jpeg

[Osaka Bomb 39]

This hit very close to hom when it came to my move into bronydom. But I like the actual poem itself. It functions well enough as a poem, and the rhythm is nice. I like it! Nicely done.

[ZomBrony 347]

I started a little differently, I was watching random sparta remixes one day and I came across YOU'RE GOING TO LOVE ME! from Best Night Ever, since then I secretly wanted to watch more and one day my brother was watching dragon ball z and (as a joke) I said I'd rather watch mlp and I did, since then (it was 8 days I think) I watched all 4 generations of mlp. (well only technically I could only find special episodes and movies for G1) can't wait for s2e20!

 

btw I posted this after reading somepony else's post saying "This made me relive the experience of being a brony (or something like that) and I wanted to share mine

[Zero Sonic 29]

You said there were weak parts you wanted to fix up, but I really don't see it, which parts felt weak for you?

[BronyPony 575]

I started a little differently, I was watching random sparta remixes one day and I came across YOU'RE GOING TO LOVE ME! from Best Night Ever, since then I secretly wanted to watch more and one day my brother was watching dragon ball z and (as a joke) I said I'd rather watch mlp and I did, since then (it was 8 days I think) I watched all 4 generations of mlp. (well only technically I could only find special episodes and movies for G1) can't wait for s2e20!

 

btw I posted this after reading somepony else's post saying "This made me relive the experience of being a brony (or something like that) and I wanted to share mine

 

I started a little differently, I was watching random sparta remixes one day and I came across YOU'RE GOING TO LOVE ME! from Best Night Ever, since then I secretly wanted to watch more and one day my brother was watching dragon ball z and (as a joke) I said I'd rather watch mlp and I did, since then (it was 8 days I think) I watched all 4 generations of mlp. (well only technically I could only find special episodes and movies for G1) can't wait for s2e20!

 

btw I posted this after reading somepony else's post saying "This made me relive the experience of being a brony (or something like that) and I wanted to share mine

 

Same thing happened to me actually. I watched random videos, saw ponies, got curious, and walla.

[ZomBrony 347]

Same thing happened to me actually. I watched random videos, saw ponies, got curious, and walla.

 

O RLY? that's pretty cool

[bee815 3]

This pretty much hits the nail on the head. Hope you can make it into an animation.

[ErBoi 501]

You said there were weak parts you wanted to fix up, but I really don't see it, which parts felt weak for you?

 

In the latter half, I think the rhythm is a little too inconsistent. I know it's not musical lyrics, but when I read it out to myself, I find the jumps in pacing awkward and jarring. So, I guess what I really want is to have the syllable count for each line a little more uniform; not identical from line to line, but not with such jumps where two consecutive lines have a considerable difference in length.