Atomic Brony

Could you review this remix I've made. I actually made a remix of this a while ago, but I'm redoing it because it wasn't that great then.

For the genre I tried to make it sort of House-y, thus the long intro, which I think I need to do more with.

https://soundcloud.com/atomic-brony/glaze-beyond-her-garden-remix

@@Atomic Brony, 

Done  I tweaked the text a bit so it would pop a bit more as well as putting a bit of transparency in it so whatever is behind it should be slightly visible adding to the gem effect

 

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Very nice. Might I ask what font you used for the text?

Now that's improvement. I really like this. If you can make this bigger, I'll use it in videos and possibly even as an avatar. 

Here is a simple mock-up of a logo. I can tweak it to your liking as well as vector it so it's re-sizable

 

Logo (Test).png

This is pretty nice. I like it and I could easily use it as an avatar or in videos. However, there are a few things about it that, if changed, could cause me to like the logo much better.

1. I feel like the text would look better if it were resized so that  part of the beginning of the text was off the gem and part of the end of the text was off the gem. I apologize if I'm not explaining it quite well.

2. I don't really like the cartoonish look the lines give the gem. It really contrasts the text because the text has opacity and it looks really professional and nice. But the text is over a gem that has cartoonish looking lines and it really seems off-putting to me.

If you could possibly fix those things, mainly the second one, then I think it'd be wonderful for a logo and I could use it.

I need someone to create a new logo for me to fit my alternate alias.

Here are some criteria(forgive me if I'm too strict):

1. I would like if the logo was sized and made to fit YouTube channel art

2. Please include my alternate alias, 4M3ThY5T, in the logo

3. Try to use purples as much as possible

4. Please keep it clean. I don't want any vulgar, offensive, obscene, rude, or disturbing content in the logo. That's not how I want people to see me as.

EDIT: I have added the YouTube channel art template for your convenience.

I revoke my last decision on who the most attractive pony is. I'm pretty sure I can't do that, but I don't care. To me, Rarity is most attractive. I mean come on. Everything about her beautiful.

So, I want to to actually make some original pony-related music, however, the problem is that I'm not seeming to be able to come up with anything. Basically, I've got writer's block. So, if you can help me come up with any ideas, please do.

http://youtu.be/1DjbVWX9EuU

This isn't a new thing I made, but I decided to make a topic about it anyway, just so that people could see it and stuff.

Mind listening to this for me and giving a critique on it. It's my first shot at making an original song. I use a harpsichord because to me, that sounds fitting for Rarity. I plan to possibly give this lyrics in the future, but for now, it's only an instrumental track. I can tell there's something wrong with it, but I'm just not sure what.

Is this any better? I changed some percussive sounds, fixed the chords, changed when the hats play, and added an arpeggio melody type thing because I thought the song needed it in certain places.

https://soundcloud.com/atomic-brony/aviators-friendship-atomic

I could use some help with this. I know that there's something wrong with it because it doesn't sound quite right. I just can't figure out what it is that I need to change or add.

I have a question for you, Carbon Maestro.

Is there a certain structure that orchestral and classical music follow? If they are different, could you tell me both of them?

Okay well, let me keep this short and informative.

 

It seems like you need help on drums and song structure, so I'm going to go into a bit of these two and send you off.

 

First, when you use listen to songs, listen for the drum patterns. Copy it. Try it yourself.  A kick gives a "deep, bass sound" that usually starts a beat. A snare gives a higher drum sound, but don't mix these two together.

 

For this song, get rid of the triplet kicks. These are quite distracting and good songs would never use triplet kicks.

 

Instead, try a "Kick" "Snare" "Kick-Kick" Snare" combination. This is really basic, but please try it out anyways. This step usually requires trial and error. And if you're more adventurous, try out different kick-snare combinations, and if you're starting out, ALWAYS START THE FIRST BEAT WITH A KICK, then follow up with a snare or kick combination for the rest of the measure.

It'll help build the foundation of your percussion.

 

Second, the chords. It sounds like there's only 4 chords playing throughout the entire 5 minutes of the song. I stopped after 2:00 to tell you this.

 

Try this chord sequence: First, use a 4 chord sequence twice, followed by a brand new 4 chord sequence four times, then a 4 chord sequence twice, and a 8 chord ending. This is the basis of a "Pop" song for the genre Pop. It's also a fairly basic but effective musical structure to build your song off of.

 

Right now you have your kick, snares, and hats all over the place. Hats are used to define a change in the chord sequence but can also complement the kick, but use it sparingly or else it tends to be a nuisance than a help.

 

That's some basic stuff, but concentrate on the kick-snare combinations and diversify your chords, you can evoke a lot more emotion when you have more chords to work with! Start with a 4 chord sequence, repeat no more than once, then move onto another 4 chord sequence, repeat no more than once, then another 4 chord sequence, etc.

 

That is the basics of songwriting.

Thank you for the feedback. I edited the remix and used what I read from your post. I would like to know if this is any better.

Could you listen to this and tell me if you like it and what I could improve?

I would help me a lot if you did. I'm a musician and I'm only starting out. I'd be great to have some helpful suggestions on what I can improve with my music.

I honestly say that Applejack is the most attractive. I mean, her southern style, her hard working nature, her honesty, it just seems so attractive to me.